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Then In A Clearing there was a time i saw Shakespeare in your eyes a mid summers night dream under tangerine skylines a puff of smoke a cloud unforseen floats invisible vapors hover a feather pillow is soaked with four walls my boundaries the voices are threatening i hear you call out my name the echo is deafening curled, bound by this flesh i adorn haunted by this timeless, endless scorn my doubts in dire need of escape an evil canvas had been callously drawn then in a clearing i saw you nearing was it a mirage some Avant-guard collage like a mystical genie you appeared and when i wished upon my scars you magically healed the carnage with a calming all knowing massage with four walls my boundaries the voices are threatening i hear you call out my name the echo is deafening just when i thought there was no hope for my sorrow you came along and gave to me tomorrow © 2005 by rittman ® 2005 by random noise music ------------------ http://www.ampcast.com/music/26305/artist.php [This message has been edited by sweetjoyce (edited 04-10-2005).]
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I like this one
good language
I like the tangerine skyline dealy and all of the second stanza thingy and the sorrow/tomorrow watchmacallit
live long and prosper adios
Rockito Ergo Sum
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thanks rocking man
glad you enjoyed
how's things
you graduate yet
how's the band doing?
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things are alright I am slightly graduated... ... don't ask me to explain but yeah mostly graduated
many bands have come and gone and now I just play my guitar all on my lonesome.
Rockito Ergo Sum
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Hi Rittman,
Gorgeous language in this one, reads like poetry. I'm not sure how music would work with it but the lyric can stand on its own.
Best, Rachel
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Thanks Rachel
most kind of you to say
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