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#369785 11/29/05 09:11 PM
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I LOOK FOR YOU
(c)2005
(1)
I walk the night,
Searching for you,
I'll walk the streets,
Oh I gotta find you.
This empty bed,
Won't let me rest,
Out in the dark,
Who would ever have guessed.
That I'd look for you,
That I'd look for you...
(2)
I wanna know,
Just how you feel,
If things we said,
Was a joke or for real.
Our angry words,
Cut very deep,
Can we forgive,
Will you come home to sleep.
And I look for you,
And I look for you...
(break)
Maybe when I find you,
You'll be dancin'.
Maybe you'll be in a restaurant,
With someone else.
Maybe you have started a brand new life,
While I look for you,
While I look for you...
(3)
I need to have,
Another chance,
A chance to love,
And a chance at romance.
I shouldn't be,
So unhappy,
Life is too short,
I won't be so lonely.
So I look for you,
So I look for you...


[This message has been edited by troubadour (edited 11-29-2005).]

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and of course everything I post turns into a paragraph! sorry!

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Hi

Just go to the Edit button, then when you see your message, hit Enter at the end of each line

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if you use Notepad it happnes your way

[This message has been edited by annie (edited 11-29-2005).]

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I like the "feel" of this, troubador. It seems like a little too much to have the break include the "I look for you" again. If it's the only contrast to the pattern of your verses, I think it should be a complete contrast.

Just my two cents.

Hope you edit it and fix the formatting. It's not hard, and you'll probably get more feedback if you do.

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#369789 11/29/05 10:32 PM
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well, I'm still lookin' for the "Edit button", don't seem to have one of those or it is hiding or disguised somewhere. Found the "Enter" key though. Perhaps I should wrap up this posting business....thank-you! all

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Look at your first post on this thread.

See the little pencil in front of a piece of paper? That's the edit button. You're the only one allowed to edit your posts. In fact, if you just hold your pointer over that button you'll see it say, "Edit/Delete Message."

Press on that button and up will come the post in a window. You can edit it by just going to the point in the text where there should be a line break and pressing the Enter key.

Give it a try. We'll be here if you get stuck. [Linked Image]

- James

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I like this,

the edit button is the Icon of pen on top of a piece of paper. It is towards the center, under the red bar that says topic. when you go to your particular post from the main board. hope this helps and I hope you don't pack it up so easily. I for one would like to see more.

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Thank-you! very much! I feel so good now! Got the hang of it! I'm happy now! Thankx

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<font face="Verdana, Arial" size="2">Originally posted by troubadour:
Thank-you! very much! I feel so good now! Got the hang of it! I'm happy now! Thankx</font>


Woo-hoo! You go, Troubadour - Master of the Edit button. [Linked Image]

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Just a random bump! = )


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Thanks for bumping this, Brian.

I was looking at this lyric this morning, troubadour, and it struck me how it's similar to a Stephen Sondheim song that was a fairly big hit - "Losing My Mind".

I don't know if you know it, but it starts out:

The sun comes up,
I think about you,
The coffee cup,
I think about you.
I want you so,
It's like I'm losing my mind.


I think it's an excellent lyric, and yours has a lot of those same qualities - simple phrases with a direct connection to the gut.

I'm not sure the hook is well-tied to the lines that precede it, though. It kind of feels to me like it hangs out there by itself on most of the verses.

The lines leading up to the hook are very strong, though. Lots of emotion and a direct honesty to them.

I hope you record this and we get a chance to hear it.

- James


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Dear Brian and James, Thank-you for the renewed interest in these lyrics. I have been gone due to a broken leg and am now just getting back on my feet again. Oh the pain of it all!!!


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