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I'm ready to have some songs demoed and the singer is more comfortable with ballads, so thought I'd start with this one. Would appreciate comments...good or bad. By the way, can anyone recommend a demo company with a great female singer? Thanks a bunch!

Final Stages of Goodbye
Copyright 2003 Ann Tygart BMI

The truth is like a needle in a haystack
Turning up when you least expect it to
The note on her pillow said she's leaving
And denial turned to anger, turned to true

(Lift)
Life goes on and lovers change their minds
Nothing tells the cold hard truth like time

(Chorus)
Now he's in the Final Stages of Goodbye
He's past the point of thinking he might die
His heart is nearly mended, most all his tears are cried
He's in the final stages of goodbye

He threw away the stuff she hadn't wanted
Sold the house to a couple still in love
He's gone when the sun comes up tomorrow
That old chevy's pointed west and loaded up

(Lift)
He's letting go a little every day
Taking back the love he gave away

(Chorus)

Hey Ann,

This is one of the strongest lyrics I've read here, IMO. Wouldn't change a thing. Not sure it requires a female singer. Very nice job

Bill

Thanks, Bill, for taking a look and the kind words!

Guess I didn't make myself clear...I'm looking for a female singer for other songs, not this one.

Ann,

I agree with Bill, this is really good. Send me an email and tell me what type you're looking for and I will send you contact info for several female demo singers that work at more than one studio here.

Have you got the melody for this all done?

dawg

This is beautiful. It doesn't get any better than this. Good job!!

Mornin' Dawg and Tricia,

Thank you both so much! I wasn't sure this was ready to demo...now I can proceed with confidence...

Dawg, check your e-mail, and thanks again!

For an EXCELLENT demo studio with high quality at reasonable cost try ScullSound (Bill Scull Jr.). Eileen Balzano does most of Bill's female vocals, and she's very good. Many on the songwriting forums (including myself) have used Bill's services. And he's a very nice guy to deal with.

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Tom

Hi Ann

wooooohooooo great job here!!!!!!!

for some unknown reason i was expecting dried instead of cried, but probably no big deal.

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Hey, Tom...thanks for the tip on ScullSound. I'll check it out.

Hey, Ritt...glad you like it and I'll think about dried vs. cried. You may be right!

Hello Ann,

Very smoothly done.
I like it all, but I love the 1st lift !

Calvin

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Hello Songbird,

Not that I want to be the only person not waving the victory flag, but I think you might want to smooth this one out a tiny bit before demoing it. It IS very good. I LOVE the hook!

Maybe something along the lines of:


The truth'S like a needle in a haystack
PRICKS YOU when you least expect it
The note on her pillow said she's leaving
AND DENIAL DOESN'T HELP WHEN ATOMS SPLIT

(Lift)
Life goes on, lovers change their minds
Nothing tells the cold hard truth like time

(Chorus)
Now he's in the Final Stages of Goodbye
Past the point of thinking he might die
His heart HAS nearly mended, most OF his tears are cried
He's in the final stages of goodbye

He threw OUT the stuff she LEFT BEHIND
Sold the house to a couple still in love
He'LL BE gone BY SUNRISE tomorrow
'CAUSE THIS TIME HE'S HAD ENOUGH


(Lift)
He's letting go a little every day
LEARNING FROM the love he gave away

(Chorus)


Keep or Sweep. You may like it just fine as it is, and that's fine. Just figured I'd share my two cents, but two cents doesn't buy much anymore! LOL!!!

Good Luck with this one!

Stan :-)



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Happy Easter Mornin'....

Calvin...many thanks for the read and kind words.

Stan...I appreciate your time and effort here, and will likely use "his heart HAS NEARLY mended." Thanks for that!

Hi Songbird,

Very nice read. You go girl! I think this one might fit like a glove for someone like Jo Dee Messina (stylistically, I'm thinkin' somethin' along the lines of Bring on the Rain).

Larry

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Hi Larry,

Thanks for the read and kind words! I'd give my right...make that left...pinkie for a cut by JoDee! Actually, I think my melody would be too country for her, but now that you mention it, I suppose either male or female could do it. You've opened my eyes!