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#295594 12/06/02 03:13 AM
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Fresh ink folks - first one in a long time...

Waiting For Me

This old road ain't no friend of mine
Though we know each other well
A broken man on a broken line
Goin' just as far as I can tell

Now and then I slip a gear
Now and then I feel the fear
I don't want to be lonely

Chorus:
Someone is waiting for me
Someone I love
Someone I need
Someone is waiting for me

The miles are dressed for steel and chrome
And the asphalt doesn't seem to care
I was told all roads would lead to home
But this one never leads me anywhere

Now and then I test my brakes
Now and then is all it takes
I don't want to be lonely

Chorus

Bridge:
Maybe I'll never know her name
But she's waiting just the same
I don't want to be lonely


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Hi Hobart, this lyric is so beautifully sad and so simple. Only tiny nit might be to drop "seem to" from the second line of v2. Cheers, Judy

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G'day Cobbre. God to see ya.
The ashphalt line got me thinking too but I worked on it and it sang. wsa easier my way without the seem too but it got there and is better with it in there meaning wise anyway me thinks.
I actually have an unfinished piece called this. Nothing like this though, strange thing about it is i have had the music done for years but have never got the words to wher i am happy with them.
Like it Hobes. The thinkg trucker song me thinks.
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Hey Hobes,

I always get excited when I see a new one from you on the board. I know I'm going to be impressed before I even read it. Mostly cause you have a knack for saying volumes in a very economical way. I admire that quality in a writer, in you. You certainly didn't disappoint with this gem.

Very beautiful and sad portrait of a lonely man with a glimmer of hope in his hand and the anticipation of a new dance in his hopeful heart.

Bravo, Hobiwan!

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Hobes, this is first rate. proof pos that it's not quantity but quality that counts.

ps one of my many dead end jobs was dish jockey as a 17 year old. the dishwasher was made by Hobart and it used to always break down making me spend my graveyard shift washing pots, pans, silverware and scraping hard cheese off Mexican combo plates by hand. I hated that Hobart machine. everytime i see your name I get a baaaad flashback, haha. the bosslady'd say, "the Hobart man won't be here till next week". I'd say he should hang...good times, good times. stay in school kids and GET that diploma... [Linked Image]


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Kudos Hobes,

Just enough lyrical change to make you slow down and think, and just enough words to give you something to think about.

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Thanks all. Those first two lines popped into my head and I knew it had to go somewhere. [Linked Image]

Along the way, I played around with saying "I know she's waiting for me/She's the one I love/She's the one I need". But for some reason I felt like "someone" was more appropriate even though I don't really like using a vague word when I could be more precise.

And you're absolutely right Graham - I was thinking a trucker ballad all the way. Although more along the lines of "Willin'". Both you and Judy got caught on the "seem" and I can see where the meter might seem odd. But that's one of the beautiful things about songwriting I suppose. With music, you can stretch or hurry syllables as you need to - as long as you say what you mean.

Tink - you're far too kind. [Linked Image] There were a couple of lines in there I was a little too proud of though...

Couch - Thanks for your approval. I'm all too familiar with the Hobart machine myself. I worked in many a pizza joint and the Hobart was a standard fixture for mixing dough, chopping onions and shredding big blocks of cheese. The worst part for me was cleaning the Hobart!

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Hey Dawg,

Yeah I think that's why I put that line in there about the brakes. [Linked Image]

Actually, I wasn't too sure about putting in those "Now and then" lines. But I think they need to be there to create that pause, movement and tension.

Hmmmm...

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Been waiting for this one all day Hobes. Saw it earlier but had no time. Those first lines just draw you in like being tied to a conveyor belt.


Not sure about the pre choruses, though I guess the ears have it. I just thought the "now and then's (or at their use in the second lines) was a bit weak.

I wanted to hear something like

Now and then I slip a gear
I think "I don't want to be here"
I don't want to be lonely

but that might blow your head tune.

Kudos in any event.


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Absolutly Hobes. And like i said. I did get there in the end.
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HI Hobes, Neat Song!

Only line my mind went "WHA" on was the "Miles are DRESSED for" one....(Maybe "Miles are Graced by?")

Loved the "Brakes" Climb...

Awed by the so-called "Simplicity" here..
you must do a Lot of Haiku, Bro!

"KUDOS!"

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Hi Hobart,

I have no nits; real solid stuff.

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Hi, Hobes!
The meter felt a little off in places. If you have a melody that makes it all work, then disregard but just in case you don't have a melody yet, I put some minor suggestions in ( ). Otherwise looks vedy, vedy good to me. [Linked Image]

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This old road ain't no friend of mine
Though we know each other well
A broken man on a broken line
Goin' just as far as I can tell
(How far it goes no one can tell)

The miles are dressed for steel and chrome
(Delete AND)
the asphalt doesn't seem to care
I was told all roads would lead to home
But this one never leads me anywhere
(But this one never takes me there.)


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Good Morning Hobes
This is so well done. Simple & effective. I like the twist at the end, maybe I'm a little slow, but I wasn't expecting it and was struck with the sadness of this lonely man.
Nice Job
Joanne

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HI Hobart,

This is very well done. Reminded me of my dad, thanks. Think I'll give him a call [Linked Image] Thanks for writing this one Trudi

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Hi ya Bob,
Looks like homecoming. We've got Shandy AND you on the board today!

Simply beautiful!
My fav part:
The miles are dressed for steel and chrome
And the asphalt doesn't seem to care
I was told all roads would lead to home
But this one never leads me anywhere


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Brilliant, nuff said, Jeannette


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