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#294401 - 11/24/02 08:40 PM He Doesn't Live Here w/audio Collab w/ Joanne Lurgio  
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Greetings all! While I've been MIA for a while, Joanne has been working on music for an earlier post: He Doesn't Live Here. The lyrics were edited to reflect a number of your comments.... a huge thanks to you! and we hope you enjoy! And that's Joanne on guitar and vocals! Whatta voice!

He Doesn't Live Here
Lyrics: Teri Foreman-Black
Music: Joanne Lurgio
C2002

He Doesn't Live Here

V1
How much do I tell them, how much more can I say
The phone keeps on ringing, "Can I talk to him today?"
You dialed the right number, mail is slipped through the door
But he doesn't live here... not anymore

Friends no longer ask, just courteous calls
With innocent questions and a more awkward pause
Can I take a message, offer anything more?
Because he doesn't live here.... not anymore

Chorus:
He doesn't live here, this isn't his home
His residence (address) has changed -- now it's address unknown
He's closed his heart; I'm closing the door
He doesn't live here... not anymore

V2
Sometimes the kids answer, they know what to say
"No, Daddy's not here, he's moved (far) away"
I just have to hold them, I don't know what's in store
Because he doesn't live here... not anymore

His clothes are all gone, our bed now sleeps one
A lone mug on the counter and the laundry is done
No change on the dresser, no Saturday chores
Because he doesn't live here... not anymore

Repeat Chorus

Bridge:
Please if you see him
He's left some things behind
A house full of memories and if you don't mind
Mention the pieces of my heart on the floor
Now that he doesn't live here

End Into Chorus

http://www.songramp.com/view.ez?sampleid=2687



[This message has been edited by Teri Foreman-Black (edited 11-24-2002).]

#294402 - 11/24/02 09:17 PM Re: He Doesn't Live Here w/audio Collab w/ Joanne Lurgio  
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Hey terri. Missed ya.
Going in to SongRamp later so will grab it while I am there.
Quick take a la no sound, I would try it without the far in the far away line.
Float the moved note to fil the space would be effective I think.
Looks good.
REgards.
Graham

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#294403 - 11/24/02 09:18 PM Re: He Doesn't Live Here w/audio Collab w/ Joanne Lurgio  
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Hey, Teri, like what you've done with this. Still trying to get sound. Will get back to you, J


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#294404 - 11/24/02 10:09 PM Re: He Doesn't Live Here w/audio Collab w/ Joanne Lurgio  
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Am listening now Terri and a still say try it like i said. No big deal though works as is.
Were vox and guitar done in one take or seperate?
Will do up good
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#294405 - 11/24/02 10:51 PM Re: He Doesn't Live Here w/audio Collab w/ Joanne Lurgio  
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Hi Teri
So glad to see you got the song up. I'm having trouble listening to it.. it keeps breaking up. I'll keep trying.
Teri..hope you don't mind my responding to Graham.
Hi Graham. Voice & guitar were recorded together on a friends 4 track recorded. There are a couple errors on chords.. but my friends wife was getting dinner ready & I didn't have a chance to fix. When the time comes.. the final print will be perfect.
Joanne

#294406 - 11/25/02 12:54 AM Re: He Doesn't Live Here w/audio Collab w/ Joanne Lurgio  
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This is lovely Teri and Joanne! I have a very tough time with SongRamp because even when I stream it, it comes through at a higher rate than my old phone line dialup can handle..so it continually has to rebuffer. Hate that. Have to say that the music sounded much different than the way I had envisioned it with my head tune..which just goes to show we hear very different things to the same lyric at times. I had heard a definitely country sound for this...but this works beautifully also.

My only concern would be the length. At almost 5 minutes, you have put this pretty much out of the range of radio play today. I think you can easily do without the second repeat of the last chorus and come in closer to 4.5 minutes but that is still way long. I do think this is nice work, however..both of you!

Bobbie


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#294407 - 11/25/02 07:28 AM Re: He Doesn't Live Here w/audio Collab w/ Joanne Lurgio  
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The song does play a little long. I was surprised myself when I saw the time.
Wondering... instead of VCVBCC, maybe it could be sung...VVCBC.
Teri, I like MOVED FAR AWAY. Keeping in mind that this line is the quote of a child.
Joanne

#294408 - 11/25/02 07:50 AM Re: He Doesn't Live Here w/audio Collab w/ Joanne Lurgio  
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Graham, Thanks for the listen and the posted comment! (I'm keeping that "far" in parenthesis to keep it in mind) Bobbie, yep, it IS a long one but as Joanne suggested we can probably change the structure a bit to get it in under 4 without deleting any of the verses or bridge. I think VVCBC might very well work. Bobbie, I'm still hoping this will be "country"; I have a critiquer listening to it now for suggestions. And Joanne, you BETTER help me respond to these posts! :smile: Thanks, all for the listen!

#294409 - 11/25/02 08:33 AM Re: He Doesn't Live Here w/audio Collab w/ Joanne Lurgio  
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Hi Teri,

Just wanted you to know I plan to listen to this one right after work. I'm on my way out the door but was excited to see your audio posted and wanted you to know you're on my list of things to do today!!

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#294410 - 11/25/02 10:29 AM Re: He Doesn't Live Here w/audio Collab w/ Joanne Lurgio  
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I have the same problem as Bobbie (prolly cause we use the same phone lines, huh?). I love the way it reads and I am sure with a lil tweakin' you can get it in the time ballpark.

Fine job!

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#294411 - 11/25/02 10:41 AM Re: He Doesn't Live Here w/audio Collab w/ Joanne Lurgio  
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Toward length. I have listened to two minute wonders that seemed long, and songs like Ozone Pet's rendition of the late Robert Clark's Cold, Cold Wind which runs about 6-16 from memory that, when i first started playing it, used to catch me unawares come wind up time. it held my interest because it is so darn good.
I do not recall feeling this one drag today and I probably listened to it ten times.
Didn't even think to look at the time.
I actaully have quite a few songs like Cold cold Wind on my regular play list that if you look at the clock are too long for radio.
maybe that we do not have any adds to fill as little a gap as possible between so the punters think they are being entertained may have something to do with it.
On the otehr end of the skcale i have one of Lucky Oceans that goes one minute neat and i like that. Must ask him why he called it ONE.
Regards.
Graham
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#294412 - 11/25/02 11:01 AM Re: He Doesn't Live Here w/audio Collab w/ Joanne Lurgio  
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Crazy monday morning... Just sneakin in at work between reports. I had the same problem with the audio - I had to upgrade my software -- now it runs fine.. takes a little time though
TINK & dawg -- anxious for your feedback
Hey Graham.. thats a positive sign... there are some long song out there that are so smooth you don't realize.. I admit.. when I am singing this.. the time goes by.. I've played it live x2 -- both times had the audience in the palm of my hand.. you could hear a pin drop.. Now THATS a good sign.. no figiting near the end. [Linked Image]
Thanks for the listen
Joanne
Hey Teri -- you bet I'll help [Linked Image]

#294413 - 11/25/02 10:54 PM Re: He Doesn't Live Here w/audio Collab w/ Joanne Lurgio  
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Hi Girls,

I've tried three times so far, and each time, I don't get past the first line, am trying again right now....

FINALLY!! It's playing now...

Vocals are awesome!! Great set of pipes, Joanne. Your voice has a strong resemblence to Grace Slick, which is a good thing, IMO!!

Although for radio, the song goes a bit long, I didn't tire of it at all. I think you've done a great job marrying the lyrics with music and emotion. Wonderful!!

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#294414 - 11/26/02 07:38 AM Re: He Doesn't Live Here w/audio Collab w/ Joanne Lurgio  
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Good Morning Tink. Glad you finally got to hear it.. I finally got my SongRamp working..it was very frustating. Grace Slick?Huh, not bad. Thanks much for the compliment... singing is what I love most. I had great lyrics to work with. Teri told a great story with words, hoped for music to make you feel the emotions. This is my first attempt at putting music to someone else's lyrics, wasn't sure how it would work. I'm happy to hear you like what I did with it.. nice feedback. Teri has someone critiquing the song now, we can work on the structure a little to fix the length without taking away from the song.
Thanks for your thoughts
Joanne

#294415 - 11/26/02 08:27 AM Re: He Doesn't Live Here w/audio Collab w/ Joanne Lurgio  
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Hi Tink, Thanks for struggling through Songramp to hear it! I know that has to be frustrating so I really appreciate you hanging in there. I have to say that getting Joanne's cassette in the mail last Thursday night was such a great surprise... first there is the anticipation, and then you hear it for the first time, the words married with the music and Joanne's voice and it is just absolutely a shivering experience. Without JPF, these lyrics may have just sat in a file for quite a while.

We have some alternatives to shorten it without cutting words, so we'll be working on it. Again, Tink, thanks for the listen. It means quite a bit.

#294416 - 11/26/02 09:23 AM Re: He Doesn't Live Here w/audio Collab w/ Joanne Lurgio  
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Hey Teri! You are so kind. Thanks for those kind words.... Wouldn't have worked without your great lyrics. The anticipation was equally exciting for me. Thank You.
Joanne

#294417 - 11/28/02 01:09 PM Re: He Doesn't Live Here w/audio Collab w/ Joanne Lurgio  
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Hi Terri,

Just when you thought you might be consigned to page 2 [Linked Image]

Chorus:
He doesn't live here, it's no longer his home
His address has changed -- TO address unknown

"Residence" amounts to extraneous info.
"live here" and "longer" has rhythm to it.
A little less "pedestrian" and less sibilent
than "it isn't his". . . home

Cheers, [Linked Image]
TT


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