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I've uploaded "Midnight Rendez-Vous" to my IUMA site. It's another unplugged, one-take recording -- just me and my guitar, playing and singing at the same time. It's meant for a female singer 'cause it's from a woman's point of view (hopefully my singing doesn't destroy it ). In a full production I'd have a sax lead line in the intro and instrumental following the bridge, with splashings of acoustic guitar leads (also electric guitar rhythm chords, but not lead -- I like acoustic leads for a song like this).

I've included the lyric to follow along. Any comments are most welcome and appreciated.

Thanks!

Tom

http://artists.iuma.com/IUMA/Bands/Tom_Guertin/index-1.html

MIDNIGHT RENDEZ-VOUS
© 2002 Tom Guertin All Rights Reserved

(Verse 1)
Dry red wine and baked hors-d'oeuvres
Moonlight drives hug coastal curves
Waves splash 'round the catamaran
As you bask in the arms of another man...

Midnight rendez-vous

(Chorus)
When love craves
A midnight rendez-vous
Then your heart
Must bid adieu
When forbidden love
Feels like déjà-vu
Under the cover of night
A midnight rendez-vous

(Verse 2)
Romantic walks along the boulevard
Your new love feels so avant-garde
Dreams of flight to the resort of Cannes
Spread your wings for another man...

Midnight rendez-vous

(Chorus)
When love craves
A midnight rendez-vous
Then your heart
Must bid adieu
When forbidden love
Feels like déjà-vu
Under the cover of night
A midnight rendez-vous

(Bridge)
Curled-up in bed in a moonlit room
Feeling like you've committed a sin
With your soul-mate lying next to you
You're lost inside another Harlequin...

(Brief instrumental break)

Midnight rendez-vous

(Chorus)
When love craves
A midnight rendez-vous
Then your heart
Must bid adieu
When forbidden love
Feels like déjà-vu
Under the cover of night
A midnight rendez-vous

(Chorus)
When love craves
A midnight rendez-vous
Then your heart
Must bid adieu
When forbidden love
Feels like déjà-vu
Under the cover of night
A midnight rendez-vous

(Tag)
Midnight rendez-vous

Hi Tom,

Different for sure and mixed emissions.

About the time you start wanting to feel for this guy the Harlequin lines gets you to smiling.

Something about it holds you in to the end and your left a little confused about the intent of the song.

Got to say I personally loved the song but I do wonder about your intent ?

Just a good laugh ???


Regards
Bill

Not bad Tom,
But it seems a bit scrunched in spots. Especially trying to sing MIDNIGHT. Sounds like it would flow better if you could find another one syllable word to take its place. yeah that changes a lot. (big help I know)
I'm with Bill too,
It is'nt perfectly clear if she's just having these fantasy rendesvous' while reading her books or if she's really stepping out. Kinda thinking just in her mind, but not positive there.


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Harriet

[This message has been edited by Harriet Ames (edited 09-07-2002).]

Hi Bill. Thanks for listening. No, I hoped for a witty a twist, but not a good laugh. I could be wrong, but my sense is that the confusion you're interpreting may be because I'm the one doing the singing in this version, but the song is intended to be delivered (full production demo) by a female vocalist -- 'cause it's from the woman's perspective (as I said in my preface).

I hope you come back to clarify, 'cause if I'm wrong, then there's a problem with the lyric ('tho no one had a such a problem with it when I posted it by itself a few days ago -- further on down the board).

Glad you liked the 'song'. Thanks again, Bill.

Tom

Thanks Harriet. The 'scrunching' may be my delivery rather than the word 'midnight' itself. I'll have to think about that.

As far as the story, the intent is to set the listener up to believe that the protagonist (she) is actually having these 'round midnight encounters, then use the bridge to reveal the twist that she's just a hopeless romantic dreamer, laying awake at night reading her 'Harlequin' romance novels (the lead-up story is kind of the Harlequin story she's reading at the time) while her husband is asleep beside her (who she really does love, as I tried to suggest by her referring to him as her soul-mate).

I'm a little confused about the story not being clear because (as I said to Bill), no one was confused when critiquing the lyric itself). Hmmmm...

Tom

Hi Tom,

Yeah you got me

Was to lazy to read the preface.

The female vocal will make all the difference I think would love to hear the demo when you get it.

The Harlequin line is a great twist.



Regards
Bill

*Bump*

Sorry. Never *bumped* before. With the time and effort composing and recording takes (even with my one-take unplugged renditions), I just hoped for more feedback on this one. Based on the original positive response to the lyric itself, I believe that part of the song is fine. From the stats at my IUMA site, a number of JPFers have listened to this one. Based on that, with little response, my assumption is that the music/melody and/or performance is not compelling enough (please imagine beyond my delivery if that's the problem to consider a strong female vocal). If you think it sucks, please say so. I've dished it out -- I can take it. I want to know with relative certainty before I think about deep 6ing this music/melody.

Thanks.

Tom

Hi Tom,

I haven't listened yet,but I will in a couple hours. I may not be able to add much new but I'll take a shot at it.

Bill

Hi Tom

Don't like the lyric,Tom. You have lots of writing talent,I believe.You demonstrate that talent in this song with its structure imagery rhyming.But my overall impression is that this is just silly and unrealistic.

I like lots of individual lines mind you. I like the idea of the song too. Have you tried a re-write using `I' instead of `You'

This is my honest impression Tom I hope you don't mind.

Your music is great...the guitar sounds faaaantastic!

In summary then I'd say if you had a good female voice here the music would be great but the lyric only so-so. But would a male listener mind? Maybe not.

Bill

Whoops sorry Tom!

Just read the original lyric post and I'm on the wrong side of the fence here...mostly all female too!....so my conclusion is they are right.

And the musics good...so ya got a winner!

Bill

I guess I must have went to this one straight after you put it up and IUMA hadn't let it go for download yet tom. I do download almost everything from the Lyrics#2 forum. I say almost as Besonic and MP3.comm I have hasles with so they often get missed.
I am downloading this now and will return.
I like to hear the noise end of everything i read. Seems to put a cap on the bottle.
REgards.
Graham

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Sorry Tom,

Tried to listen, but my lil ol country dial up modem kept buffering every fifth word. I'll again very early in the morning.

dawg

Hey Tom,

This is pretty clever with a nice twist. The verses are really nice and descriptive. I gave it a listen as well, and i'm a musical idiot so i can't really speak to it, though i can see, or rather hear how the last line in the chorus MIGHT seem a bit rushed...but what the heck do i know. The writing especially was nice.

Hi Tom,
Had the same problem as Dawg.
Will try again tomorrow morning early.
But whatever you do don't deep 6 it!
This is a great lyric and from what others say a great song. Cheers Trudi