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"America" Words & Music by Terry James
In America, we don't believe in classes, In America, we don't support the fascists, In America, we don't believe the Nazis, In America, we don't behave like asses;
In America, we don't believe the commies, In America, we listen to our mommies, uh oh! In America, each man will help his brother, In America, because there is no other;
We don't think the world is, A bad place to live, We take what we give, We give, and give, and give, and give, and give, In America.
Oh take it Danny Boy!
In America, we don't believe in classes, In America, we don't support the asses, oh no! In America, each man will help his brother, In America, the country like no other, other, other, other, did 'ey run did 'ey run did 'ey run did 'ey run did 'ey run did 'ey run did 'ey run did 'ey run
In America
did 'ey run did 'ey run did 'ey run did 'ey run did 'ey run did 'ey run did 'ey run did 'ey run
In America
did 'ey run did 'ey run did 'ey run did 'ey run
In America
Dei run Dei run Dei run Dei run Dei Run Dei Run
Dei run!
©1980 Terry James ALL RIGHTS RESERVED
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Hi Terry,
I like the thought We don't think the world is a bad place to live
That is where your song begins. I would be interested to know more about what you mean by We take what we give and give and give And Oh, take it Danny Boy.
Your statements in the In America lines are really not true. In America we believe and support what we want to believe and some people do behave like asses and suffer the consequences. That is called freedom.
You need a major rewrite here. Welcome to the boards.
Vondelle
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Hey Terry- I agree with Vondelle. This one needs a re-write.. I do not support the list below but, there are plenty of people in the USA, who do; believe in classes, support the fascists, believe the Nazis, behave like asses; do believe the commies, don't listen to our mommies, uh oh! In America, each man will help his brother, "Some do not." Your lyric can be improved if you consider taking another approach. i.e. One loosely knit idea. Just one of many ways to approach your ideas. I worked in a different title. Title- THAT'S WHAT WE CALL FREEDOMverse Some may hate the Nazis The folks who side with commies Look down upon the fascist And those who's aim is building classes We try to get along Giving our neighbor a fair shake Sharing our land with each other so we can Live the American way chorus That's what we call freedomThe right to say what we belive in Even though a few may disagree That's what we call freedomWe'll protect our rights from sea to sea So we all can live together hopefully in peace That's what we call freedomv-2 chorus That's what we call freedometc.. Good luck ~C~ ------------------ www.soundclick.com/coolcatcal www.myspace.com/coolcatcal [This message has been edited by Cal (edited 10-10-2006).]
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I actually loved this lyric! I laughed out loud when you did the "and give, and give, and give"! Very clever way to show how much we actually do for the rest of the planet and then we get a slap in the face. It's every one's job to make the world a better place but it does seem like the same tax payers are doing it way more than the rest of the planet over and over and over again! Nice Write-You have my vote! ------------------ My Sound Click In a time of universal deceit, speaking truth is a revolutionary act", George Orwell MySpace
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