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#1174512 - 03/05/21 09:31 PM Piano Song # 2  
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Heres another that came out decent. I musta liked it a bit more cause I ended up adding a guitar hook in the chorus, lol. But for the most part its a grind getting good results from software

Alot of Life To Live
https://soundclick.com/share.cfm?id=13976865

Cmon buddy just answer me
I know what you've been through
the world's in need a brand new hero
my money's still on you
Spend a little of that no quit
saved up since we were kids

Breakin records and breakin hearts
precious seconds and second starts
makin messes and makin art
you've got alot of life to live

Somewhere on this adventure
the GPS got lost
the prophets lied about too little profit
you didnt make back cost
but there's no tell in your poker face
it's time for a bid

Breakin records and breakin hearts
precious seconds and second starts
makin messes and makin art
you've got alot of life to live

One word could mean everything
like the moon in the dark
aint no doubt in my dubious mind
you'll hit one out of the park
all I ask is to hear from you
we'll get this whole thing fixed

Breakin records and breakin hearts
precious seconds and second starts
makin messes and makin art
you've got alot of life to live

Not to mention inventin things
good intentions and wedding rings
comprehension of everything
you've got alot of life to live

#1174514 - 03/05/21 09:44 PM Re: Piano Song # 2 [Re: Fdemetrio]  
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The lyric is exceptionally good. Really good vocal.Builds really nicely. Nice job

These lines are so good.

"Somewhere on this adventure
the GPS got lost
the prophets lied about too little profit
you didnt make back cost
but there's no tell in your poker face
it's time for a bid"

Steve


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#1174518 - 03/06/21 09:33 AM Re: Piano Song # 2 [Re: Fdemetrio]  
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I remember this one, good lyric! I can hear a lot of Bruce in the way you sing smile

#1174526 - 03/06/21 11:00 AM Re: Piano Song # 2 [Re: Fdemetrio]  
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Thanks Japov, I kind of lost contact with these ones its been a while, I think this would be worth redoing full.

My vocals change per song. I dont try to consciously change them, I think I just find a sweet spot for the melody and go with it. Yes, I very much hear Bruce in this. Wish I could howl like he does, but he has songs that are more breathy and from the throat more than from the gut.

Whatever makes the song seem real, Ill do it. I just cant sing like Daltrey or Plant, but I can like Petty or Neil Young...or Bruce. I can also do Ramones Green Day, Pop... Blues I can do pretty well. Just forget me for Metal, Hard Rock....meh, Country i can fake an accent but...

I

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#1174527 - 03/06/21 11:18 AM Re: Piano Song # 2 [Re: Fdemetrio]  
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VNorth...thanks for the spin and comments.

#1174534 - 03/06/21 12:38 PM Re: Piano Song # 2 [Re: Fdemetrio]  
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Great soft rock piece. Didn't think of this when I heard it but yes the voice is somewhat reminiscent of Bruce Springsteen especially since he launched the soft rock/folk music phase of his career.

#1174535 - 03/06/21 12:54 PM Re: Piano Song # 2 [Re: Fdemetrio]  
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Thanks Beech, I dont know if im soft rock, certainly not hard rock. Most stuff I do is on the power pop stuff, but I think Id be a good for for the singer songwriter era

Back in the day, I used to use sax and was not shy about sounding like Bruce, and I used to get notes from these small time record companies and publishers blasting me for sounding like him. Theyd see new jersey on the mailing adress and then let me have it... lol

But I think your right, play my tune, and then watch this video, id say the influence is quite evident. If only I had half the E street band AND the roots workin for me lol

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=NtZZ8B9KsEE

#1174561 - 03/06/21 11:36 PM Re: Piano Song # 2 [Re: Fdemetrio]  
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I remember this one too. And yes, I hear the Bruce influence. smile In a lot of Springsteen songs, the piano is absolutely key to the whole sound.

My only criticism of this would be that it seems to lose energy a bit as it gets into the chorus. I think part of it is that the ear is expecting two more lines of the verse. The chorus seems to start too soon. If you added two more lines there, building up the chorus and then launched into the chorus with more oomph, this would be really great.

What are you using to master this?

#1174562 - 03/06/21 11:42 PM Re: Piano Song # 2 [Re: Fdemetrio]  
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I think with some power chording on guitar and other interesting bits it wouldnt sound so abrubt. Its also nice to a curve ball in there, if the ear expects it...maybe im being too predictable.

I like some of this, the melody is good and the lyrics are pretty good. The stuff im working on now kicks this ones arse....

lol, dude your funny, mastering? Its two instruments, its a demo, scratch demo, Why master it if theres no bass, guitar, backing vocals

If i used anything it might have just been the generic pre dump gadgets in my daw

#1174565 - 03/07/21 12:19 AM Re: Piano Song # 2 [Re: Fdemetrio]  
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A rough master only takes a few minutes and it's fun to hear how it sounds. Check out this site. I haven't used it, but it lets you upload a reference track to base the master on. Springsteen maybe smile
https://www.musicgateway.com/free-online-mastering

Here's your song run through Ozone with no tweaking, just using the Master Assistant function. It's set to private and I'll take it down when you've heard it.
https://soundcloud.com/themysteriousbeings/fds-song-breaking-records/s-mkJrTyC4Shp

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#1174566 - 03/07/21 12:29 AM Re: Piano Song # 2 [Re: Fdemetrio]  
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Cool, if I hear a difference it sounds a bit more spacious, and a bit cleaner, kind of wasted on a dink arrangement

That was very thoughtful of you to give that a go, I may call on you when ive done the basics. I still think im gonna use some real people in the next batch. Toontracks also makes mixing and masteing software, where you just load up a mix, and all your stuff changes into their mixing settings, and can be tweaked...again havent gone there since im still in phase one

#1174714 - 03/11/21 02:22 AM Re: Piano Song # 2 [Re: Fdemetrio]  
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The music is stellar................really excellent. The lyrics are good. The music has that something special. Has a great "feel" to it. Sounds inspired.
You sing it very well, too.............a great part of the music's appeal.
Good stuff, man!
-Tom

#1174731 - 03/11/21 02:48 PM Re: Piano Song # 2 [Re: Fdemetrio]  
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Thanks Ironknee. The music wasnt played by me, it was written by me, for the most part, i worked with piano software to see if I could get it to play close to what I thought the song should have. This one came close, as least as piano and drums. I wish I coulda gotten more variation for the second and third verses, its basicly the same loop.

But thanks for the nice comments

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#1175099 - 03/20/21 03:55 AM Re: Piano Song # 2 [Re: Fdemetrio]  
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Thought this exceptionally good Fde. Someone mentioned Bruce and yes I hear this too.
I don't remember it I confess but it's the best of the small batch I've heard on here for a day or too.
Good vocal, lyric wise, I particularly like the first couple of lines of the chorus
Breakin records and breakin hearts
precious seconds and second starts.
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#1175127 - 03/20/21 07:55 PM Re: Piano Song # 2 [Re: Fdemetrio]  
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Way good ! No nits and crits from where I'm listening. smile

cheers,niteshift

#1175129 - 03/21/21 04:19 AM Re: Piano Song # 2 [Re: Fdemetrio]  
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I just took another listen and I think I hear what Gavin is saying, but I have a simpler solution. In your verses you change the chord progression for lines 3-4. If you save that progression for lines 5-6 and just repeat 1-2/3-4, I think your vocals will naturally build into the chorus better. No need for extra lines or chords, keep it simple and treat lines 5-6 like a lift smile

#1175131 - 03/21/21 09:05 AM Re: Piano Song # 2 [Re: Fdemetrio]  
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Woh, the little song that could resurfaces, lol

Travis, Niteshift, and Japov...again... Japov, Niteshift SAID no NITS, and he meant it, no NITS from you either LMAOOOOOO

Truth be told this song used to have a completely different set of lyrics, whereas now it goes into the chorus with a series of rhyming words, it didnt always. After the third line, so here say " saved up since we were kids" there was a tension chord there, and then it went into the chorus, but the "chorus" was the same line, three consecutive times.

If you consider structure, it USED to be an AAA, and theres no chorus in that form. There's a line at the end of each verse thats the hook. So when I got there, i thought this sounds better three times.

Used to be a punchier hookier chorus, but the lyrics werent as good. I went and redid the lyrics, and created all those internal rhymes, which i seem to be doing alot of now, its becoming my style.

But this tune gave me the chance to use some "sound of the words" and i think i have some good keeper lines I can use, but this song itself, I doubt ill redo, but you may see some of the lines show up in something else.

Cant wait to start doing the new stuff I have dozens of tunes needing to be done.

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