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by Gary E. Andrews - 04/15/24 07:08 PM
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DAVE LEKICH JOHN VAUGHAN Please have a listen https://soundclick.com/share.cfm?id=14177183TRY INSIDE OF YOU You constantly remind me you don't need me at all. Things aren't what they should be— I won't wait for the axe to fall Keep the chair you brood in; the seat you rule in; your throne of misery. Every point you need to win, and you wonder why you’re losing me. If you want answers don't look at me— try inside of you. There's your side, always only your side. If you go looking for the truth— try inside of you. I longed for you to smile, all the while you just dragged me down A soul once so beguiling— hey, are you smiling now? A weight off my shoulders: the burden you placed there. Escaped, now it’s over— it’s good to breathe the air. I ached to be closer, but you never seemed to care not enough, not for us, not for love— Why you wonder.
Last edited by Travis david; 01/14/21 02:51 AM.
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Hey guys, I really enjoyed this tune! Well written and performance was really good too. I especially like the vibe as it "holds" you in the song.
I have no nits, but one sug for possible consideration with the musical arrangement. Given the dominant musical tracks--I think you could start the song with the music a bit further back in the mix and having it more gradually become pronounced giving the song more "build." Maybe experiment with reverbs and slight reduction of volume with music early in mix to achieve that (if desired or that is appealing for you).
Great job both lyrics and music& arrangements!
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very well written and the delivery of the song ...I don`t think anyone else would fit this but you DJ, especially after a person hears you perform it. and again JV, really good writing. enjoyed the listen for sure. Lane
Last edited by lane1777; 01/14/21 12:41 PM.
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one might save you from the other...Vincent
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Hi Ed
Thanks for your listen and comments. Deej comes by infrequently nowadays but I'm sure he will see your suggestions
Thanks for your help once more
Regards
John
Last edited by Travis david; 01/15/21 02:00 AM.
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Cheers Lane Thanks for having a listen and your thumbs up
Regards
John
Last edited by Travis david; 01/15/21 11:15 PM.
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Good lyrics Travis. Excellent vocal Deej.
I think the music needs a bit more gain on the bass and kick for emphasis.
Good one though.
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Really good song. Love the music lyrics and the vocals!
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Thanks Vic, I'm sure Deej will see your suggestion. Thanks
John
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Thanks Carroll pleased you enjoyed our sobgregards
John
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This is a really good write and performances all around. Nice work. As others suggested, this would benefit from a punchier mix - there's a lot of opportunity with the bass, kick, snare and crunch/presence on guitars.
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Great collab guys. Lots going on to hold interest - love that syncopated guitar work. Vocals are pitch perfect and the mix is good. Love the harmonies. Solid hook - well respected in the song and the lyrics fit nicely. Nary a nit to be found  Paul
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Thanks Ant
Appreciate your comments and listen.
Deej I know will answer your points
Regards
John
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Cheers Paul good to know it worked for you
John
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Fingers crossed just had a BBC email saying the song has been listened too by BBC INTRODUCING.
Which usually means it could get a broadcast in the next two weeks if lucky
John
Last edited by Travis david; 01/19/21 10:49 AM.
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