Happy New Year!

A bit different from me to start the year - hopefully haven't swung too far out of my wheelhouse
Comments are welcomed as usual - positive or negative constructive - I can take it

https://soundcloud.com/paulcanuck/i-cant-love-you-any-more

I Can't Love You Anymore

You said "It's never quite enough"
You said I'd better "step it up"
I said "I love you to the core"
I can't love you any more
I can't love you any more

You said you could feel me holding back
You said "Part of me's still on the rack"
I said "If you only knew the score
I've got nothing left in store
I can't love you any more"

I've tried most everything I know
But you keep telling me it doesn't show
I've laid my heart and soul out at your door
My love's a crashing wave upon your shore
I can't love you any more

You said you're with somebody new
You said you're convinced his love is true
I said "I heard your wedding vows
Now I know it's not allowed
I can't love you anymore
I can't love you anymore"

'Infectious' ear-wormy bass riff.
Drives home THE Hook/title with plenty of Repetition. Seems to have a dated feel, which may be just what a Music Supervisor is looking for to soundtrack a film, or some other 'use' that could be very lucrative.

Yes I agree with Gary and add it has an 80s feel to it
Best
John

Thanks Gary and Travis - much appreciated

Paul

Yes, very 80s, except it's a lot better than most of what I remember from back then. Catchy riff, great production. Love the gap in the middle.

Hi Paul.
It's certainly an interesting one. Plenty of stuff going on here.
I would bring up the vocals a tad though,

Vic

Liked the first two verses, but I didn't care for the "B" sections melody or lyric.
Good stuff!
-Mike

Paul,

A really unique write here--a great music piece IMO. Loved all of it--no nits!

steady-eddie

Sounds a little bit like the B-52s.

All sounds good to me. Almost a queen like bridge there. With more vocals added in there it would be really great.

Cool song!

Gavin - thanks for that. You mean I've moved from the sixties to the eighties? progress!

Vic - good feedback - I've bumped up the vocals in the new mix - thanks!

Mike - thanks for weighing in - good to hear which sections work/don't work

Eddie - cheers Eddie - glad you liked it

Ricky - I'll take a B-52's/Queen comparison any day. Good suggestion re the bridge.


New mix uploaded - hopefully going in the right direction


Thanks all
Paul

Nice. I could imagine Roy Orbison singing this. I like that bass line hook but it would be nice if there were some small flourishes here and there, like on the down notes connecting the repeats.

..ant