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A marshan met a venusian, 'n they lived on a moon A rapturous adventure, like a bride and a groom But the homeland kept calling, as the story unfolds Til they have to go back...to each their own world
Chorus From the bottom of my bipolar heart I know it's time to set us free From the bottom of my bipolar heart So we each face our own destiny
The soft heart kept believing, those feelings would not last But the hard heart kept screaming, it's time to hit the gas Now when the balance fades, then extreme steps in to play That is when you realize, there is no other way
Chorus
Now the moral to this harlequin, keep one thing in mind For adventure in a new world, one must be left behind So I pressed that button...that said restart To restore a little balance too..my bipolar heart I restored a bit of balance too...my bipolar heart
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Interesting variation on the aphorism, "A bird may love a fish, but where would they live?"
"My Bipolar Heart" (suggested title)
A Martian met a Venusian, 'n they lived on a moon A rapturous adventure, like a bride and a groom But the homeland kept calling, as the story unfolds (Consider whether you need the word 'But'.)('keeps' or 'kept'? 'unfolds' or 'unfolded'. Present tense versus past tense.) 'til they had to go back...to each their own world (to each, or each to?)(Near Rhyme seems to work just on the 'd', 'unfolds/world')('had' instead of 'have'?)
Chorus (Flipping Lines, to put 'My Bipolar Heart' in the last Line.) I know it's time to set us free From the bottom of My Bipolar Heart So we each face our own destiny From the bottom of My Bipolar Heart
The soft heart kept believing, those feelings would not last (Past tense) But the hard heart kept screaming, it's time to hit the gas (Do you need 'But'?) Now when the balance fades, then extreme steps in to play That is when you realize, there is no other way (there can be no other way; option)
Chorus I know it's time to set us free From the bottom of My Bipolar Heart So we each face our own destiny From the bottom of My Bipolar Heart
Now the moral to this harlequin, keep one thing in mind For adventure in a new world, one must be left behind So I pressed that button...that (in Martian) said 'restart' To restore a little balance to..My Bipolar Heart ('to' instead of 'too'. The extra 'o' implies excess, too many, too much, too far, too hard to live on that Moon, each having come from a different world.) I restored a bit of balance too...My Bipolar Heart
(I think I like the way it opens like a Third-Person narrative, but in the Chorus the Singer-Character establishes his identity, singing/speaking directly to the Love-Interest Character. By the end I get that he, the Martian I think, is the one who made the final decision, with the best interests of both parties in mind, or...in his Bipolar Heart. I think I like it Iceberg!)
There will always be another song to be written. Someone will write it. Why not you? www.garyeandrews.com
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Thanks Gary... wrote this about 4 years ago, after a breakup...forgot a few lines since then, and did it from memory.. Gotta get them tenses worked on some, and fine tune.. Like that option for the chorus...may depend on singer preference...and agree with you on the title..
Here's another shot
A Martian met a Venusian 'n they live on a moon A rapturous adventure, like a bride and a groom Her homeland keeps calling, as the story unfolds Til they have to go back..to each their own world
Chorus.. could be either..I see your point, but the emphasis is in the repeat on bipolar heart..would like to have more opinions... From the bottom of my bipolar heart I knew it was time to set us free From the bottom of my bipolar heart To each face our own destiny.. Or I knew it was time to set us free From the bottom of my bipolar heart To each face our own destiny From the bottom of my bipolar heart
The soft heart keeps believing, those lo things will not last The hard heard keeps screaming...it's time to hit the gas When the balance fades, extremes step in to play That is when you realize, there can be no other way
Chorus
For a moral to this harlequin, it's about the ties that bind For adventure in a new world...one must be left behind So I hit that button ...the one that's says restart To restore a little balance to..my bipolar heart I restored a little balance to...my bipolar heart..
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Thanks Gary... wrote this about 4 years ago, after a breakup...forgot a few lines since then, and did it from memory.. Gotta get them tenses worked on some, and fine tune.. Like that option for the chorus...may depend on singer preference...and agree with you on the title..
Here's another shot
A Martian met a Venusian 'n they live on a moon A rapturous adventure, like a bride and a groom Her homeland keeps calling, as the story unfolds Til they have to go back..to each their own world
Chorus.. could be either..I see your point, but the emphasis is in the repeat on bipolar heart..would like to have more opinions... From the bottom of my bipolar heart I knew it was time to set us free From the bottom of my bipolar heart To each face our own destiny.. Or I knew it was time to set us free From the bottom of my bipolar heart To each face our own destiny From the bottom of my bipolar heart
The soft heart keeps believing, those longings will not last The hard heard keeps screaming...it's time to hit the gas When the balance fades, extremes step in to play That is when you realize, there can be no other way
Chorus
For a moral to this harlequin, it's about the ties that bind For adventure in a new world...one must be left behind So I hit that button ...the one that's says restart To restore a little balance to..my bipolar heart I restored a little balance to...my bipolar heart..
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Wish I'd thought of that title!
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(Here's a little more tinkering to think about.)
"My Bipolar Heart" by Iceberg
A Martian met a Venusian 'n they live on a moon A rapturous adventure, like a bride and a groom Our homelands keep calling, as our story unfolds (Letting them 'own' it.) 'til we have to go back..to each our own world
Chorus.. From the bottom of My Bipolar Heart I know it's time to set us free From the bottom of My Bipolar Heart may she reach her destiny. Or I know it's time to set us free from the bottom of My Bipolar Heart May we each face our destiny from the bottom of My Bipolar Heart
Her soft heart keeps believing, those things will not last My hard heart keeps on screaming...it's time to hit the gas When the balance fades, extremes step in to play That was when I realized, there can be no other way
Chorus
For a moral to this harlequin, it's about the ties that bind For adventure in a new world...one must be left behind So I hit that button ...the one that says restart To restore a little balance to..My Bipolar Heart I restored a little balance to...My Bipolar Heart..
There will always be another song to be written. Someone will write it. Why not you? www.garyeandrews.com
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Interesting...but a bit confusing... Bipolar is like one person with two different personalities...and your version leaves two people with the different personalities.. Thanks for giving me more to ponder on..Merry Christmas and Happy New Year
It's keeping me fairly busy so far..lol..but I'm very lucky to live in a small isolated town, where we are virus free..so far..
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