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A marshan met a venusian, 'n they lived on a moon
A rapturous adventure, like a bride and a groom
But the homeland kept calling, as the story unfolds
Til they have to go back...to each their own world

Chorus
From the bottom of my bipolar heart
I know it's time to set us free
From the bottom of my bipolar heart
So we each face our own destiny

The soft heart kept believing, those feelings would not last
But the hard heart kept screaming, it's time to hit the gas
Now when the balance fades, then extreme steps in to play
That is when you realize, there is no other way

Chorus

Now the moral to this harlequin, keep one thing in mind
For adventure in a new world, one must be left behind
So I pressed that button...that said restart
To restore a little balance too..my bipolar heart
I restored a bit of balance too...my bipolar heart

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Interesting variation on the aphorism, "A bird may love a fish, but where would they live?"

"My Bipolar Heart" (suggested title)

A Martian met a Venusian, 'n they lived on a moon
A rapturous adventure, like a bride and a groom
But the homeland kept calling, as the story unfolds (Consider whether you need the word 'But'.)('keeps' or 'kept'? 'unfolds' or 'unfolded'. Present tense versus past tense.)
'til they had to go back...to each their own world
(to each, or each to?)(Near Rhyme seems to work just on the 'd', 'unfolds/world')('had' instead of 'have'?)

Chorus (Flipping Lines, to put 'My Bipolar Heart' in the last Line.)
I know it's time to set us free
From the bottom of My Bipolar Heart
So we each face our own destiny
From the bottom of My Bipolar Heart

The soft heart kept believing, those feelings would not last (Past tense)
But the hard heart kept screaming, it's time to hit the gas (Do you need 'But'?)
Now when the balance fades, then extreme steps in to play
That is when you realize, there is no other way (there can be no other way; option)

Chorus
I know it's time to set us free
From the bottom of My Bipolar Heart
So we each face our own destiny
From the bottom of My Bipolar Heart

Now the moral to this harlequin, keep one thing in mind
For adventure in a new world, one must be left behind
So I pressed that button...that (in Martian) said 'restart'
To restore a little balance to..My Bipolar Heart ('to' instead of 'too'. The extra 'o' implies excess, too many, too much, too far, too hard to live on that Moon, each having come from a different world.)
I restored a bit of balance too...My Bipolar Heart

(I think I like the way it opens like a Third-Person narrative, but in the Chorus the Singer-Character establishes his identity, singing/speaking directly to the Love-Interest Character. By the end I get that he, the Martian I think, is the one who made the final decision, with the best interests of both parties in mind, or...in his Bipolar Heart. I think I like it Iceberg!)


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Thanks Gary... wrote this about 4 years ago, after a breakup...forgot a few lines since then, and did it from memory..
Gotta get them tenses worked on some, and fine tune..
Like that option for the chorus...may depend on singer preference...and agree with you on the title..

Here's another shot

A Martian met a Venusian 'n they live on a moon
A rapturous adventure, like a bride and a groom
Her homeland keeps calling, as the story unfolds
Til they have to go back..to each their own world

Chorus.. could be either..I see your point, but the emphasis is in the repeat on bipolar heart..would like to have more opinions...
From the bottom of my bipolar heart
I knew it was time to set us free
From the bottom of my bipolar heart
To each face our own destiny..
Or
I knew it was time to set us free
From the bottom of my bipolar heart
To each face our own destiny
From the bottom of my bipolar heart

The soft heart keeps believing, those lo things will not last
The hard heard keeps screaming...it's time to hit the gas
When the balance fades, extremes step in to play
That is when you realize, there can be no other way

Chorus

For a moral to this harlequin, it's about the ties that bind
For adventure in a new world...one must be left behind
So I hit that button ...the one that's says restart
To restore a little balance to..my bipolar heart
I restored a little balance to...my bipolar heart..

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Thanks Gary... wrote this about 4 years ago, after a breakup...forgot a few lines since then, and did it from memory..
Gotta get them tenses worked on some, and fine tune..
Like that option for the chorus...may depend on singer preference...and agree with you on the title..

Here's another shot

A Martian met a Venusian 'n they live on a moon
A rapturous adventure, like a bride and a groom
Her homeland keeps calling, as the story unfolds
Til they have to go back..to each their own world

Chorus.. could be either..I see your point, but the emphasis is in the repeat on bipolar heart..would like to have more opinions...
From the bottom of my bipolar heart
I knew it was time to set us free
From the bottom of my bipolar heart
To each face our own destiny..
Or
I knew it was time to set us free
From the bottom of my bipolar heart
To each face our own destiny
From the bottom of my bipolar heart

The soft heart keeps believing, those longings will not last
The hard heard keeps screaming...it's time to hit the gas
When the balance fades, extremes step in to play
That is when you realize, there can be no other way

Chorus

For a moral to this harlequin, it's about the ties that bind
For adventure in a new world...one must be left behind
So I hit that button ...the one that's says restart
To restore a little balance to..my bipolar heart
I restored a little balance to...my bipolar heart..

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Wish I'd thought of that title!


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(Here's a little more tinkering to think about.)

"My Bipolar Heart" by Iceberg

A Martian met a Venusian 'n they live on a moon
A rapturous adventure, like a bride and a groom
Our homelands keep calling, as our story unfolds (Letting them 'own' it.)
'til we have to go back..to each our own world

Chorus..
From the bottom of My Bipolar Heart
I know it's time to set us free
From the bottom of My Bipolar Heart
may she reach her destiny.
Or
I know it's time to set us free
from the bottom of My Bipolar Heart
May we each face our destiny
from the bottom of My Bipolar Heart

Her soft heart keeps believing, those things will not last
My hard heart keeps on screaming...it's time to hit the gas
When the balance fades, extremes step in to play
That was when I realized, there can be no other way

Chorus

For a moral to this harlequin, it's about the ties that bind
For adventure in a new world...one must be left behind
So I hit that button ...the one that says restart
To restore a little balance to..My Bipolar Heart
I restored a little balance to...My Bipolar Heart..


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Interesting...but a bit confusing...
Bipolar is like one person with two different personalities...and your version leaves two people with the different personalities..
Thanks for giving me more to ponder on..Merry Christmas and Happy New Year

It's keeping me fairly busy so far..lol..but I'm very lucky to live in a small isolated town, where we are virus free..so far..


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