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ONE GOOD REASON One Good Reason ( Lyrics : Milo Ippolito, Robert dePriest, Music: Steve Sledge , 2020 ) V1. Give me a reason not to go There ain’t no use in crying We never could get far from trouble Although it weren’t for lack of trying Honey I’m leaving See what tomorrow’s gonna bring us But if it’s any consolation You nearly had me on a string C1. Let’s drive down to Atlanta Go back to your mama We can put an end to This tale that’s been dragging on. Why should I love you? Give me one good reason Sayin’ that ya need me’s not enough V2. Gimme a reason, or let me go. There ain’t no use in crying Seems like the rain just keeps on falling And I don’t see no silver lining Honey I’m leaving You can pin it on me if you want to But I ain’t looking for a medal For all the things you put me thru C2. Let’s drive down to Atlanta Go back to your mama We can put an end to This tale that’s been dragging on. Why should I love you? Give me one good reason Sayin’ that ya need me’s not enough B. One good reason One good reason C3. Let’s drive down to Atlanta Go back to your mama We can put an end to This tale that’s been dragging on. Why should I love you? Give me one good reason Sayin’ that ya need me’s not enough Let’s drive down to Atlanta Go back to your mama We can put an end to This tale that’s been dragging on. Why should I love you? Give me one good reason Sayin’ that ya need me’s not enough
Last edited by stmoeller60; 12/11/20 04:19 AM.
Cheers, Steve Sledge
"HiFi-LoFi-NoFi it's just fine with me"
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Man, voice and music-well done!
The lyric may need some help. It's a bit confusing: Is he leaving or is he staying? (Atlanta) In V1 I think the the first two lines could relate to the last two better. I liked the last two lines till I thought the last line may be better if it stated it could have been from lack of trying.
In the chorus: This tale that’s been dragging on seems to be a mouthful....
Best of luck- some very cool stuff here, (love that funky country!) -Mike
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I second what Mike says. Lyric needs a rewrite to make sense of it.
Good sound and performance Vic
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ST,
Loved the song tempo and rhythm, nice vocals as well. The prosody didn't bother me too much with the end chorus line, a challenge that I think the vocalist handled. A listener is going to think "tail dragging," which won't make sense quickly until they've listened a few times. "Tale" which you've used appropriately as "story," needs to IMO be more clear--we have the lyrics to look at, but the listener will not. Not a huge deal, but one small area that could be conveyed perhaps better. JMO, Keep or sweep......
This was an enjoyable listen however, and enjoyed your song!
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So this is good in so many ways, the music is outstanding....
In your CHORUS/HOOK/TITLE you have it buried way in the 6th line of the Chorus, not in a POWER SPOT.
I would look at maybe getting the HOOK/TITLE placement in your CHORUS into much more strategic lines... and try to get that into Lines 1 & maybe even 7 as well if I could...But after you've worked on a song so much, it kinda gets ingrained in your head, so it is easier said than done....
Music is awesome...Good work
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I echo what everyone else is saying about the music. It's really well done and enjoyable to listen to. The up tempo exuberance seemed to me to conflict a little with the lyric, almost as if they belonged to two different songs. I got over it and really enjoyed the song, but it did seem a bit strange.
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Thanks so much to all here. It was a real pleasure to work with Milo and Robert who wrote the lyrics to my music. This is again a project where I composed the music and melody first, and the lyrics where made for it. I passed the thread to them , so they might come in and comment some of your hints :-)
Have a ood time, Cheers Steve
Cheers, Steve Sledge
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Thanks guys. Fortunately, Steve was able to rise above the lyric’s shortcomings.
The writer’s opinion becomes irrelevant once the song is done. It’s the listener’s opinion that matters. So this is valuable information. Best!
Last edited by Milo5000; 12/18/20 04:11 AM.
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