Talk to Me

Verse 1:
Who knows when things began to crumble
What I did or didn’t do goes through my mind
I can’t remember when the drinking started
Or the places that I left her on her own...
All alone

Chorus:
She said.....talk to me
There’s need for change
But her words rang hollow in my head
Those words she’d said
With pain..…once again
But things always seem to stay the same

Verse two:
Who knows why a man can have such courage
Strength coming from Jack Daniels shots
He feels no need or worry about others
As he sits there pours another, getting ever drunker
All alone

Chorus:
She said.... talk to me
There’s need for change
But her words rang hollow in my head
Those words she’d said
With pain….once again
But things always seem to stay the same

Verse 3:
Who knows where this story will be ending
If the bottom of a bottle can’t be found
When you’ve lost all that really matters
And you find yourself crying and hell bound....
All alone

Chorus
She said.....talk to me
There’s need for change
But her words rang hollow in my head
Those words she’d said
With pain…..over again
But things always seem to stay the same

Bridge-
There was a time two lives really mattered
Two hearts so connected beat as one
To a tune of love not known by many others
Till the walls of what we had came tumbling down

Chorus:
She said.....talk to me
there’s need for change.......

copyright 2020 craig kuchler

Hi Craig,
Rough subject, well done. This is usually the story, and the ending usually the same.

The last verse in the piece is what is known in the field as "hitting bottom". And can apply to other things besides only excessive drinking. That's when you reach the point when you may wonder why you even got out of bed. Perhaps I'll come up with one with that theme. Felt very fortunate that I never developed a huge taste for drinking-- only a beer every now and then. For another powerful piece on this subject, check out Lucinda Williams' "Drunken Angel".

Thanks John. Tough row to hoe. Like Beechnut I’m lucky I haven’t taken that road though I’ve been close.

Thanks Beechnut. Hitting bottom would be a tough place to hit.

You don't have THE Hook.
"Talk To Me" is your intended title, but it's not the gist of the Storyline. Even though she says it, there's no follow-up. She doesn't ask again, just that one time in the Chorus. And he doesn't talk to her.
And using it as the first Line of the Chorus makes it forgotten by the end of the Chorus.
THE Hook is the main idea of a Song. When you hear it it sums up what the Exposition in the Verses has been leading up to.
The last Line of a Chorus is a strategic position. Even if you use it in the first Line using it again in the last Line means that's what's left ringing in their ears.
I'd rewrite to get "Talk To Me" into the Exposition in the Verses. She wanted to talk to try to fix the relationship, to fix the drunkard. Even if there's no happy ending, that missed chance to talk and maybe have a different outcome is the main idea of the Storyline. It might be too clever to find a happy ending if they do talk. Sad Songs are easier to write. The ones where things are going good and stay good are rarer, and harder to write, maybe. Maybe not. If I were you, I'd talk to her. In fact, if you don't, I'm probably the guy who will. LOL

Hi, I wrote a song with this title years ago, it's near the bottom on my soundclick page,
just to kinda explain what Gary means the chorus goes

Talk to me
Talk to me
We have nothing to hide
Don’t shut me out
Don’t keep it all inside,
Let me into your world
Your voice is the key
Take me into your heart
Talk to me.

I like your idea of

She said, talk to me

but I also suggest ending the chorus on it

all the best,john.