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Leafs
by Gary E. Andrews - 03/04/24 12:47 PM
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https://soundcloud.com/artwhimsically-yours/everything-is-fine-iiDo not weep for what's lost such wailings are long overdue you should have wept for the sweet love that we both once knew........................." <><><><><><><><><><><><><><><><><> Everything is fine now that you are out of my mind and I am resigned to leaving you far behind it is long past time All these cutting words from your sharp tongue, fall harmless past my heart. your sneering, jeering lips twisting in the exact opposite of your kiss that I no longer miss I am cocooned in the Novocain of apathy, totally numb I cannot succumb to the denial of how we were once one. so Rant on with your loco-motives I will not fall beneath your runaway train of thoughts and I will not lie strapped to the steel path of your endless rails and your vehement angst. Love perished months ago, its light fading from your eyes all its hopes aborted severed like an umbilical cord, as its nourishments parted, I stand orphaned from what sired it. I am solo now subtracted from two I am a massive ancient head Like those balanced on Easter island full of silent musings. struck mute by the truth that I cannot dispute my stance on our long lost romance Deeply embedded in the fallow soil where our love once bloomed where our love once bloomed Offering only my rock hard gaze, staring out beyond, your palms waving frantically in my face, your cold shoulders emitting Freon with nothing left that we can agree on your lips uttering curses against the odds against the Gods. Everything is fine now that you are out of my mind and I am resigned to leaving you far behind it is long past time Contented with a comforting knowledge that the distant waters lying before me hold, many other lovely fish in the sea...baby that's just how it's got to be....... that's just how it's got to be....... Phenomenal Music Played & composed by-J.A Prod. Beat-©-2020 vocals and Lyrics sung & written by- Matthew F. Blowers III-©-2020
Last edited by MFB III; 12/02/20 11:55 AM.
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Hey MFB,
Really interesting tune. The lyrics also fit very well. Problem ? There is quite a pitching issue here which needs to be resolved. How about hiring a pro vocalist, and this track will really shine. Another suggestion is a second vocalist to do call and response in the breaks. Keep working on it.
cheers, niteshift
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Hey, Niteshift...thanks for your input.
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