STREETS LATEST VERSION.

A subdued drum has been added to the bridge plus a few other adjustments
Pease have a listen on the link below

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STREETS ©2020 Vaughan & Arnold
V
Streets are for walking not sleeping
for the grace of god this could be me
Living off handouts, in alleyway hangouts
This ain't how it should be
V
Streets are for talking to your neighbour
Not for running with a knife.
What the hell's going on? They're our
daughters and sons.
Where is pride in this life?
Ch.
Streets. Streets. Streets
are for walking down
Streets. Streets. Streets
Or take your girl to town
Streets. Streets. Streets.
V3
Streets are for living not for dying
Heroes are heroes for all time.
Still wearing medals he used to take pride in
This ain't no place for a lion
Inst.
B
There's a doorway with a light
Some comfort on a cold night
Under the bridge a small fire burns
Where they take their turn
Ch.
Streets. Streets. Streets
are for walking down
Streets. Streets. Streets
just to hang around
Streets. Streets. Streets.
On our streets


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STREETS ©2020 Vaughan & Arnold

V

Streets are for walking not sleeping

for the grace of god this could be me

Living off handouts, in alleyway hangouts

This ain't how it should be

V

Streets are for talking to your neighbour

Not for running with a knife.

What the hell's going on? They're our

daughters and sons.

Where is pride in this life?

Ch.

Streets. Streets. Streets

are for walking down

Streets. Streets. Streets

take your girl to town

Streets. Streets. Streets

or just hang around

Streets. Streets. Streets.

V3

Streets are for living not for dying

Heroes are heroes for all time.

Still wearing medals he used to take pride in

This ain't no place for a lion

Inst.

B

There's a doorway with a light

Some comfort on a cold night

Under the bridge a small fire burns

Where they take their turn

Ch.

Nice laid back feel, sets the mood very well!

The shame is (JMHO) your hook is the weakest part... Seems to me it needs more than just "streets, streets, streets"... A phrase, something more poignant, descriptive...

All streets lead to the soul of my city...
Where we walk around
Take your girl to town
Just hangin' round
All hearts beat in the city streets

Just a thought

Vic/John,

I like this "Dire Straits" vibe. I was reading what Japov said and the chorus IMO does need to launch better. I, however, really like the using of the words "streets," as it's unique and phonetically, just sounds great. What I would suggest, is to empower that chorus, 1) pan the chorus guitar strums really wide R so that they don't compete with lead vox. 2) Thicken those chorus lines with a harmony, and "maybe" give it a "subtle dup lead vox track panned 40% L. I think this will enhance the chorus subtantially. Don't be afraid to change-up your attitude a bit more on certain lines as well to accentuate a few key lines making the overall performance less mellow in general.

I really like how the guitar answers flow throughout--experiment with some alternate panning or just a bit more panning--keeping center more for vox/bass/kick/snare. Cool lyrics and a very cool melody vibe--just needs a little polish to make it shine! Nice write--both of you.

steady-eddie

Social commentary, excellent. Vic sounds a bit less "rich" vocally as I remember.

Overall, well done.

Cheers JAPOV
The lyric was a joint venture your suggestion reads well and I'll pass it on to Vic for his comments
Appreciate your thoughts and listen
John

Hi Ed
Thanks for the listen and suggestions, again technical issues will be addressed by Vic I'm sure.
Yes Dire Straits was the plan when we discussed the music,
Vic's a big fan of M. K.
Regards
John

Thanks Mac
Social comment sure winter here not great for rough sleepers.
Amazing that the world can develop three life saving vacci es in 9 month but can't lift guys off the street into a decent hone
Cheers
John

Hi Japov
Thanks for your comments.

Vic

Thanks for the comments Ed.
Actually the guitar strums were panned about 35% left and right but I just increased that to 50% on a new upload on Soundcloud. https://soundcloud.com/vic-arnold/streets
See how that sounds.
The harmony was already panned left 35% and the centre is already taken up by those other tracks you mention.

Vic

Vic, that does sound better, and less competition for that space. If you are using stereo tracks, 35%, won't sound too wide if the volume is higher--50% made a difference. I usually use mono tracks for guitars and have several tracks for panning of each and experimentation. Maybe drop the volume a couple of db on the "strums" for a more supporting role--unlike guitar answers as they are simultaneous with the lead vox. I dind't notice the harmonies the first listen, maybe notch them up a bit and keep them panned opposing those strums?

Always enjoy your songs,

steady-eddie

Thanks, Mac.
I suspect the key was too high for me at my tender age. It was in G but maybe should have been in E or D.
I will have a go at it in one of those soon.

Vic

The guitar is the star It does have a bit of Dire Straits feel to it and a really nice vibe. I have to agree with JAPOV though. I felt the chorus could be more interesting. The repetition of "Streets" grated on me a bit. It feels a bit flat melodically and lyrically.

Hi again Ed.
Thanks for the return.

I'm working on a lower key version now. I'll post it up tomorrow and maybe you'll come back again.
Cheers!

Vic

Hi Gavin.
Sorry to hear about the chorus grating on you.
Maybe cutting it in half would work better but I don't think adding more explanatory words would help.

Thanks for listening.

Vic

New version, more meatier and meaner
Thanjs for the suggestions and help of Ed and Gavin in particular
John

A new take and a slight lyric change.

A new version eh?

Awesome production jumps right on out there. Beautiful songwriting........Fantastic lyric and melody.
A hit in my book!!!
Really impressive, guys!
-Tom

Thanks Tom.
Appreciated.

Vic

Thanks for your positive comments Tom
John

I like the new version. I'm never going to be a huge fan of that chorus, but that's probably just me (it usually is), and there is a lot to like in this, especially the guitar. I certainly agree with the sentiment of the lyric.

Vic,Travis,

Definitely better, I really enjoy this chorus especially--stays with you, I had it in my mind on the road driving the other day!

steady-eddie

Thanks for the update Gavin.
I'm not usually a great fan of repeated phrases myself but I feel it works here as an anchor.

Vic

Thanks, Eddie.
Good to hear.

Vic