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Mutlu
by Gary E. Andrews - 04/15/24 07:08 PM
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by Gary E. Andrews - 04/05/24 01:49 PM
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https://www.soundclick.com/music/songInfo.cfm?songID=13912247Room To Run [2019-08-18] [V] caught in between what I want, what I need being pulled like a puppet on string. going forward, then back round and round the same old track. back and forth what does it mean? [C] does it mean my life is over? does it mean my life is done? does it mean I can't escape this rut I'm caught in? does it mean there's no more room to run. [break] [V] have a love in my life a friend, lover and wife, she makes me feel like that young man. who would carve her name in trees, walk 'long forest, fields and streams helped me grow into the man I am. [C] does it mean that young man is gone now? does it mean what is can't be undone? does it mean I can't escape this rut I'm caught in? does it mean there's no more room to run? [Break] [V] am I where I want to be now that I can see that light forming up ahead? I still dream those dreams that have slipped away from me all of them float inside my head. [C] does it mean my dreams must be forgotten? does it mean what's left are setting suns? does it mean there's no escape from the rut that I'm caught in? does it mean there's no more room to run? [Tag] I would hate to think I can't escape this rut I'm in what is left has no more room to run. Copyright © 2019 by Douglas Murphy
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Hey Douglas - fellow Canuck Very pleasant song - love the acoustic guitar picking and your vocals are great. Good hook - well respected throughout. No nits from me. Nice work Paul
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Thanks PC.
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Hey Doug,
Beautiful lyrics with a sweet melody! I enjoyed your song, and many will relate to the lyrics for sure. A couple of sugs, not nits however. I think you could shorten your first break in half, and leave the 2nd break longer as is. I could hear some harmony coming in 3rd verse after break and following chorus which might be nice to create a little "build" & change-up.
Well done, enjoyed this'n!
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Steady-Eddie. Sorry, it took so long to reply. Like what you suggested and will consider in that awful thing we writers call the re-write. AHHHH! Douglas
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