Who's Online Now
14 registered members (JAPOV, Gavin Sinclair, 9ne, E Swartz, couchgrouch, James Guglielmo, ckiphen, MidniteBob, 2 invisible), and 186 guests, and
Key: Admin, Global Mod, Mod
Shout Box
Member Spotlight
IronMaiden
IronMaiden
Colorado Springs
Posts: 29
Joined: September 2007
Show All Member Profiles 
What's Going On
Edit: ALL Corona Virus Post MUST Go Here
by niteshift. 12/05/20 03:37 AM
In My Mind
by Gavin Sinclair. 12/04/20 10:32 PM
Getting a song to a major artist
by Craig Allen. 12/04/20 09:10 PM
NOT SO MERRY CHRISTMAS HERE IN THE TRAILER PARK- M
by John Lawrence Schick. 12/04/20 12:38 PM
STREETS.( Vic Arnold & Travis collab)
by Vicarn. 12/04/20 11:46 AM
I thought I'd bang out a bit of flamenco
by TransformsIntoAGuita. 12/04/20 08:52 AM
Ol' Joe ;)
by niteshift. 12/04/20 05:11 AM
TALK TO ME
by Gary E. Andrews. 12/03/20 11:13 PM
server error trying to load JPF
by Roy Cooper. 12/03/20 10:33 PM
Private Message Flashing Constantly
by Brian Austin Whitney. 12/03/20 10:29 PM
Kaufman Music Center
by Fdemetrio. 12/03/20 08:21 PM
success post #2
by Fdemetrio. 12/03/20 08:18 PM
Grapefruit Moon Video
by Wendy D. 12/03/20 10:52 AM
The Bluest Blue
by ckiphen. 12/03/20 07:51 AM
Where Have All The Cowboys Gone...
by JAPOV. 12/03/20 12:32 AM
Once
by JAPOV. 12/03/20 12:15 AM
::: What More Can I Do :::
by IronKnee. 12/02/20 11:24 PM
River With Nowhere To Run
by Fdemetrio. 12/02/20 08:12 PM
The killing floor
by ckiphen. 12/02/20 04:43 PM
A new Graduate - Charlotte Wood
by MidniteBob. 12/02/20 02:16 PM
LARAMIE (lingering love)
by Gary E. Andrews. 12/02/20 12:59 PM
Tell Me What You Were Thinking Of by Daniel Simons
by DanielSimons. 12/02/20 10:13 AM
The In-Law Josey Wales
by couchgrouch. 12/02/20 08:04 AM
Christie's Auction House
by Gary E. Andrews. 12/02/20 07:01 AM
Kelli - FAWM #5 - Colin work tape
by Travis david. 12/02/20 03:18 AM
First Time
by maccharles. 12/01/20 11:30 PM
Au Revoir
by maccharles. 12/01/20 11:27 PM
Everything is Fine.
by MFB III. 12/01/20 10:47 PM
CAE Number, What is it?
by John Lawrence Schick. 12/01/20 06:29 PM
Top Posters(All Time)
Calvin 19,836
Travis david 12,024
Kevin Emmrich 10,896
Jean Bullock 10,330
Kaley Willow 10,240
Two Singers 9,649
Joice Marie 9,186
Mackie H. 8,931
glynda 8,679
Mike Dunbar 8,574
Tricia Baker 8,318
couchgrouch 7,913
Colin Ward 7,909
Corey 7,357
Vicarn 6,689
Mark Kaufman 6,586
Wyman Lloyd 6,578
ben willis 6,108
Lynn Orloff 5,788
niteshift 5,748
Louis 5,725
Linda Sings 5,608
KimberlyinNC 5,210
Neil Cotton 4,909
Derek Hines 4,893
DonnaMarilyn 4,666
Blake Hill 4,528
Bob Cushing 4,388
Roy Cooper 4,252
Bill Osofsky 4,199
Tom Shea 4,179
Cindy Miller 4,178
TamsNumber4 4,130
nightengale 4,096
MFB III 3,928
Caroline 3,865
Kolstad 3,816
Dan Sullivan 3,710
beechnut79 3,682
E Swartz 3,597
Dottie 3,427
joewatt 3,411
Bill Cooper 3,279
John Hoffman 3,199
Skip Johnson 3,027
Pam Hurley 3,007
Terry G 3,005
Fdemetrio 2,965
PopTodd 2,890
Harriet Ames 2,870
Nigel Quin 2,865
MidniteBob 2,741
Sunset Poet 2,677
Nelson 2,608
Tom Tracy 2,558
Polly Hager 2,526
Jerry Jakala 2,524
Al Alvarez 2,499
Eric Thome 2,448
Hummingbird 2,401
Stan Loh 2,263
Sam Wilson 2,242
Judy Hollier 2,232
Wendy D 2,223
Erica Ellis 2,202
TrumanCoyote 2,096
Marty Helly 2,027
maccharles 1,997
DukeWill 1,988
floyd jane 1,985
Clint Anglin 1,904
cindyrella 1,888
David Wright 1,866
Clairejeanne 1,851
Cindy LaRosa 1,824
Ronald Boyt 1,675
Iggy 1,650
Noel Downs 1,620
Rick Heenan 1,608
Cal 1,574
Jack Swain 1,554
GocartMoz 1,552
Pete Larsen 1,537
Ann Tygart 1,529
Tom Breshers 1,487
RogerS 1,473
Tom Franz 1,473
Chuck Crowe 1,441
Ralph Blight 1,440
Rick Norton 1,429
Kenneth Cade 1,429
bholt 1,411
Letha Allen 1,408
in2piano 1,404
Stan Simons 1,402
mattbanx 1,384
Jen Shaner 1,373
Deej56 1,372
Charlie Wong 1,347
KevinP 1,324
Vondelle 1,316
Tom W. 1,313
Jan Petter 1,301
scottandrew 1,292
DakLander 1,265
Gerry 1,249
PeteG 1,242
Ian Ferrin 1,235
Glen King 1,214
IdeaGuy 1,209
lane1777 1,200
AaronAuthier 1,177
summeoyo 1,172
Diane Ewing 1,158
joro 1,082
BobbyJoe 1,075
IronKnee 1,042
S.DEE 1,040
yann 1,037
Tony A 1,016
argo 986
peaden 984
Wolvman 960
90 dB 954
9ne 947
Jak Kelly 912
krtinberg 890
Drifter 886
Petra 883
RJC 845
Brenda152 840
Nadia 829
Juan 797
TKO 784
Dayson 781
frahmes 781
ant 771
teletwang 762
Andy K 747
JAPOV 745
tbryson 737
Andy Kemp 734
Jackie444 731
3daveyO3 704
Dixie 701
Joy Boy 695
Knute 686
Irwin 681
Lee Arten 678
Moosesong 667
Pat Hardy 663
Katziis 652
R.T.MOORE 638
quality 637
CG King 622
douglas 621
Mel 614
ckiphen 609
NaomiSue 601
Shandy 589
Ria 587
TAMERA64 583
qbaum 570
nitepiano 566
pRISCILLA 556
Tink2 553
R&M 540
musica 539
deanbell 528
RobertK 527
BonzaiWag 523
Roderic 522
BB Wilbur 512
goodfolks 499
Zeek 487
Stu 486
Steve P. 481
KathyW 462
allenb 459
MaxG 458
Philjo 454
fanito 448
trush48 448
dmk 442
arealrush 437
DGR 436
avweek 435
Stephen D 433
Emmy 431
Rob L 426
marquez 422
kit 419
Softkrome 417
kyrksongs 415
RRon 408
Laura G. 407
VNORTH 407
Debra 407
eb 406
cuebald 399
EdPerrone 399
Dannyk1 395
Hobart 395
Davyboy49 393
Smile 389
GJShades 387
Ezt 384
tone 380
Marla 380
Cecilee 379
iggyiggy 378
coalminer 377
java 374
spidey 371
sweetsong 370
danny 367
Jim Ryan 360
Alek 358
papaG 353
Z - man 350
John K 348
JamesDF5 347
Jaden 344
ddreuter 341
TheBaz 340
Steggy 339
leif 339
tonedeaf 336
rickwork 334
Eddie Ray 332
Johnboy 328
Bob Lever 328
Helicon1 327
lucian 326
Muskie 321
kc 319
Z. Mulls 318
ptondreau 313
ONOFFON 312
Chris B. 310
trush 304
ed323 297
Ellen M 294
markus-ky 292
lizzorn 291
nicnac49 290
pomeranj 289
Char 286
ktunes 285
mastrose 280
pammie 279
pd 277
Previous Thread
Next Thread
Print Thread
Rate This Thread
#1170560 - 11/02/20 04:10 PM Au Revoir  
Joined: Oct 2019
Posts: 156
PaulCanuck Offline
Serious Contributor
PaulCanuck  Offline
Serious Contributor

Joined: Oct 2019
Posts: 156
Hi folks - this got started from a challenge on another site about writing lyrics with a well-know phrase from another language. Since Canada is a bilingual country it seemed like a good fit coming from a Canuckster. smile Any feedback or suggs are welcome.

https://soundcloud.com/paulcanuck/au-revoir

Au Revoir

Au revoir, mon ami, au revoir
Au revoir to the nights when we set the world on fire
I'll try to get by without your light in my life
Au revoir, mon ami, au revoir

Goodbye my dear friend goodbye
Goodbye to the nights when we laughed until we cried
I'll try to get by without your light in my life
Goodbye my dear friend goodbye

Au revoir, mon ami, au revoir
Au revoir to the times when we set the world on fire
I'll try to survive without your light in my life
Au revoir, mon ami
Au revoir, mon ami
Au revoir, mon ami
Goodbye.

#1170565 - 11/02/20 06:21 PM Re: Au Revoir [Re: PaulCanuck]  
Joined: May 2017
Posts: 1,450
Gavin Sinclair Online content
Top 200 Poster
Gavin Sinclair  Online Content
Top 200 Poster

Joined: May 2017
Posts: 1,450
Conover, North Carolina, USA
Cute song that exudes the good humour you always seem to bring with you. Beautifully performed and produced. One thing I'm not sure of. That hissing in the background - at first I thought it was designed to create an old time 78 RPM record kind of atmosphere, but it would stop and start and I think it was just brushes on the drums. I don't think it added anything to it. I'm biased because I don't like brushes, but I think it might be better without. On the other hand an old record crackle could add to the charm.

Another great song, Paul.

#1170581 - 11/03/20 03:36 PM Re: Au Revoir [Re: Gavin Sinclair]  
Joined: Oct 2019
Posts: 156
PaulCanuck Offline
Serious Contributor
PaulCanuck  Offline
Serious Contributor

Joined: Oct 2019
Posts: 156
Originally Posted by Gavin Sinclair
Cute song that exudes the good humour you always seem to bring with you. Beautifully performed and produced. One thing I'm not sure of. That hissing in the background - at first I thought it was designed to create an old time 78 RPM record kind of atmosphere, but it would stop and start and I think it was just brushes on the drums. I don't think it added anything to it. I'm biased because I don't like brushes, but I think it might be better without. On the other hand an old record crackle could add to the charm.

Another great song, Paul.


Thanks Gavin. Appreciate the kind words.
Yeah I kinda agree about those brushes even though I am a fan of brushes.
The drum track was a freebee loop where I don't have much control.
I'll see if I can scale 'em back a bit through EQ.- or find another freebee grin

.. and crackle might work too grin

cheers
Paul

#1170593 - 11/04/20 10:41 AM Re: Au Revoir [Re: PaulCanuck]  
Joined: Apr 2002
Posts: 947
9ne Online content
Top 500 Poster
9ne  Online Content
Top 500 Poster

Joined: Apr 2002
Posts: 947
N.E. of Toronto
I liked it. I thought you did a lovely job singing and capturing this style.
I wondered what it would sound like if you lost the second line in each verse and went to the third. Doing that I think a bridge would really work.
Best!
-Mike


http://www.soundclick.com/bands/pagemusic.cfm?bandID=170948

I think what makes satan so attractive to others is
that he tastes like chocolate...
....and he played real drums
#1170678 - 11/06/20 12:39 AM Re: Au Revoir [Re: PaulCanuck]  
Joined: Dec 2016
Posts: 1,372
Deej56 Offline
Top 200 Poster
Deej56  Offline
Top 200 Poster

Joined: Dec 2016
Posts: 1,372
Paul,

Love the tune—such a throwback. Yes, I could hear a bit of a crackling radio/album laying beneath this to give it some mood . . . and maybe just a little fuzz on that vocal to give it a bit of an old time, thirties sound to it. But it’s terrific as is . . . lovely arrangement. Always look forward to hearing what you post on the board . . . this no exception. Outstanding work!!

All my best,

Deej

#1171182 - 11/16/20 03:39 PM Re: Au Revoir [Re: Deej56]  
Joined: Oct 2019
Posts: 156
PaulCanuck Offline
Serious Contributor
PaulCanuck  Offline
Serious Contributor

Joined: Oct 2019
Posts: 156
Originally Posted by 9ne
I liked it. I thought you did a lovely job singing and capturing this style.
I wondered what it would sound like if you lost the second line in each verse and went to the third. Doing that I think a bridge would really work.
Best!
-Mike


Cheers Mike and thanks for giving it a listen. A bridge you say? Maybe - I kind of ran out of things to say or would have put one in grin


Originally Posted by Deej56
Paul,

Love the tune—such a throwback. Yes, I could hear a bit of a crackling radio/album laying beneath this to give it some mood . . . and maybe just a little fuzz on that vocal to give it a bit of an old time, thirties sound to it. But it’s terrific as is . . . lovely arrangement. Always look forward to hearing what you post on the board . . . this no exception. Outstanding work!!

All my best,

Deej


Thanks Deej - I guess it is a bit 30's come to think of it. Interesting idea about fuzz on the vox. I'll give it a try grin

#1171201 - 11/16/20 09:30 PM Re: Au Revoir [Re: PaulCanuck]  
Joined: Jun 2019
Posts: 745
JAPOV Online happy
Top 500 Poster
JAPOV  Online Happy
Top 500 Poster

Joined: Jun 2019
Posts: 745
Ha! I'm having visions of Fred Astaire and Ginger Rogers smile Very well done!

#1171236 - 11/17/20 09:46 PM Re: Au Revoir [Re: PaulCanuck]  
Joined: Nov 2011
Posts: 3,597
E Swartz Online content
E Swartz  Online Content

Top 100 Poster

Joined: Nov 2011
Posts: 3,597
Ohio
Paul,

What a perfect soundtrack scene song for a musical! Loved it, don't change a thing--it is simple in it's expression and perfect for the appropriate scenario. The song in "itself" is a bridge between scenes, no bridge needed IMO. You have a knack for the cinema or stage songs--you may want to direct pitching to that market, or think bigger and look into building a screenplay around music ideas........

Enjoyed this very much!

steady-eddie

#1171318 - 11/19/20 06:04 PM Re: Au Revoir [Re: PaulCanuck]  
Joined: Nov 2018
Posts: 12
DanielSimons Offline
Casual Observer
DanielSimons  Offline
Casual Observer

Joined: Nov 2018
Posts: 12
Paul,

This has a holiday feel to it. I can picture Burl Ives singing it. I love the rhythm guitar that's carrying the song along and the little drum solo break in the middle.
I'm learning things from you. I see how nicely you're balancing things. I can hear just enough of the bass to hold the bottom down. You've got a nice friendly voice
too. The sad lyrics betray the happy feel of the melody and your voice. I kinda got lost in the melody to realize that it's melancholic. I wouldn't change anything.

Dan

#1171328 - 11/20/20 02:26 AM Re: Au Revoir [Re: PaulCanuck]  
Joined: Mar 2020
Posts: 23
Jethro Aberdeen Offline
Casual Observer
Jethro Aberdeen  Offline
Casual Observer

Joined: Mar 2020
Posts: 23
Fonthill, On, Canada
Paul,
I concur with the last few comments, I can picture this lovely song in a stage play or movie, and the voice is perfect for this song. I like the brushes, and wouldn't change a thing.

kevin


Kevin
#1171347 - 11/20/20 10:59 AM Re: Au Revoir [Re: PaulCanuck]  
Joined: May 2017
Posts: 1,450
Gavin Sinclair Online content
Top 200 Poster
Gavin Sinclair  Online Content
Top 200 Poster

Joined: May 2017
Posts: 1,450
Conover, North Carolina, USA
Paul, by coincidence, this landed in my inbox - a plug-in from Izotope that can create that old record crackle. It's free. I downloaded it but haven't tried it yet. Since it's from Izotope, it's probably pretty good.
https://www.izotope.com/en/products/vinyl.html

#1171370 - 11/20/20 07:51 PM Re: Au Revoir [Re: PaulCanuck]  
Joined: Jan 2009
Posts: 6,255
Douglas Murphy Offline
Top 40 Poster
Douglas Murphy  Offline
Top 40 Poster

Joined: Jan 2009
Posts: 6,255
Montreal, Quebec, Canada
Bonjour fellow Canuck smile Great little ditty. Loved everything about it.

Douglas


"Is this a practice? They are all practices." John Denver

www.soundclick.com/dougmurphy

Skype Contact: douglas.murphy8
#1171390 - 11/20/20 11:28 PM Re: Au Revoir [Re: PaulCanuck]  
Joined: Jun 2011
Posts: 12,024
Travis david Online content
Top 10 Poster
Travis david  Online Content
Top 10 Poster

Joined: Jun 2011
Posts: 12,024
Kendal, Cumbria .UK
Hello Paul
What a lovely song!
Really good, I enjoyed it
Regards
John


We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars. Oscar Wilde
#1171569 - 11/24/20 07:32 AM Re: Au Revoir [Re: Travis david]  
Joined: Oct 2019
Posts: 156
PaulCanuck Offline
Serious Contributor
PaulCanuck  Offline
Serious Contributor

Joined: Oct 2019
Posts: 156
Originally Posted by JAPOV
Ha! I'm having visions of Fred Astaire and Ginger Rogers smile Very well done!


Cheers JAPOV - that's the vibe I was going for. smile

Originally Posted by E Swartz
Paul,

What a perfect soundtrack scene song for a musical! Loved it, don't change a thing--it is simple in it's expression and perfect for the appropriate scenario. The song in "itself" is a bridge between scenes, no bridge needed IMO. You have a knack for the cinema or stage songs--you may want to direct pitching to that market, or think bigger and look into building a screenplay around music ideas........

Enjoyed this very much!

steady-eddie



Thanks for the kind words Eddie. Yes I've often thought doing a musical play would be fun - just haven't had th time. Maybe after I retire smile



Originally Posted by DanielSimons
Paul,

This has a holiday feel to it. I can picture Burl Ives singing it. I love the rhythm guitar that's carrying the song along and the little drum solo break in the middle.
I'm learning things from you. I see how nicely you're balancing things. I can hear just enough of the bass to hold the bottom down. You've got a nice friendly voice
too. The sad lyrics betray the happy feel of the melody and your voice. I kinda got lost in the melody to realize that it's melancholic. I wouldn't change anything.

Dan


Thanks Dan. That was a concern of mine - that is a "happy" goodbye song - but I guess happy goodbyes do exist out there and hopefully the contrast works. Appreciate you listening and the generous comments smile




Originally Posted by Jethro Aberdeen
Paul,
I concur with the last few comments, I can picture this lovely song in a stage play or movie, and the voice is perfect for this song. I like the brushes, and wouldn't change a thing.

kevin



Cheers Kevin - glad you like the vocal - it's my achilles heel smile



Originally Posted by Gavin Sinclair
Paul, by coincidence, this landed in my inbox - a plug-in from Izotope that can create that old record crackle. It's free. I downloaded it but haven't tried it yet. Since it's from Izotope, it's probably pretty good.
https://www.izotope.com/en/products/vinyl.html


Thanks Gavin. I downloaded and installed that plug-in. Looks interesting and you can't argue with FREE smile I fixed the "noise" issue BTW with a noise-removal feature in Audacity - so thanks for that feedback too. smile

Originally Posted by Douglas Murphy
Bonjour fellow Canuck smile Great little ditty. Loved everything about it.

Douglas


Cheers Douglas - that's nice to hear from a Canadian - we have such impeccable tastes smile Stay warm and safe this winter! smile


Originally Posted by Travis david
Hello Paul
What a lovely song!
Really good, I enjoyed it
Regards
John


Thanks a lot John - appreciate the kind words! smile

Hope I didn't miss anyone - if I did - thanks for listening smile

#1171617 - 11/25/20 03:47 AM Re: Au Revoir [Re: PaulCanuck]  
Joined: Jul 2011
Posts: 1,042
IronKnee Offline
Top 500 Poster
IronKnee  Offline
Top 500 Poster

Joined: Jul 2011
Posts: 1,042
Hawaii
A nice piece of writing, Paul, and your singing is at its best.
A feel good, happy, melody with an unhappy circumstance??
Oh well.....not all goodbyes are sad....;-)
Good stuff!!
-T

#1171863 - 11/30/20 01:33 PM Re: Au Revoir [Re: IronKnee]  
Joined: Oct 2019
Posts: 156
PaulCanuck Offline
Serious Contributor
PaulCanuck  Offline
Serious Contributor

Joined: Oct 2019
Posts: 156
Originally Posted by IronKnee
A nice piece of writing, Paul, and your singing is at its best.
A feel good, happy, melody with an unhappy circumstance??
Oh well.....not all goodbyes are sad....;-)
Good stuff!!
-T


cheers Tom - yep happy/sad mixed together and stirred smile

#1171917 - 12/01/20 11:27 PM Re: Au Revoir [Re: PaulCanuck]  
Joined: Mar 2009
Posts: 1,997
maccharles Offline
Top 200 Poster
maccharles  Offline
Top 200 Poster

Joined: Mar 2009
Posts: 1,997
Fucking amaze balls.......no joke, this is goddamned awesome.


Support Just Plain Folks

We would like to keep the membership in Just Plain Folks FREE! Your donation helps support the many programs we offer including Road Trips and the Music Awards.


Newest Members
FullwaveStudios, JKVercher, DjKodeRed, LindaR, MrMoyer
21299 Registered Users
Forum Statistics
Forums116
Topics121,099
Posts1,139,691
Members21,299
Average Posts Daily48
Most Online37,523
Jan 25th, 2020
Just Plain Quotes
"I'd rather starve than eat poison food" -Brian Austin Whitney
Today's Birthdays
Jamaica Bob (2020)
Popular Topics(Views)
Powered by UBB.threads™ PHP Forum Software 7.6.0