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Hey, everyone:

I hope you are all safe and well. This is a first time collaboration with Donna Evans, who passed along the lyrics to a song she had written, and I was happy to give them a go. I changed the order of a couple lines in the chorus to fit the melody, and then tweaked a line or two in the second verse . . . but beyond that I've stayed very true to Donna's original lyric. I haven't heard Donna's original version of this song--and I get the sense, for better or worse, that my take is a bit different . . . but I offer it up nonetheless. Special thanks to Donna for pitching in on the back up vocals.

I'm not sure the mix is quite where I want it, particularly as to where the lead vocals and back up vox sit in the mix . . . so any feedback in that regard would be much welcome.

My best regards to you all,

Deej

Here's the song:

She Sees Thru Gypsy Eyes

Here are the lyrics:

Gazing into her crystal ball—
image clear, logic’s dull.
She reads tea leaves and palms
to find out what’s goin’ on.

Floating yellow flower rings
cross waters where spirits sing—
My baby’s got a following
that brings in these gold dollars.

She sees thru gypsy eyes,
And I swear that I’m blind
and I’m hypnotized.
She sees thru gypsy eyes,
She says we’re meant to be.
It’s our destiny—
the cards don’t lie.

Viewing visions so divine,
the signs light up like sunshine.
I ask her if I’m dreamin’ . . .
She says see’in is believin’.

I was raised on a proper path
Have I been converted?
Well, she just laughed.
For us, life will just roll on past
with fortune on our side.

And she says now I know real living.
She says now all doubt is forgiven.

Floating yellow flower rings
cross waters where spirits sing—
My baby’s got a following
that brings in these gold dollars

She sees thru gypsy eyes,
And I swear that I’m blind
and I’m hypnotized
She sees thru gypsy eyes,
She says we’re meant to be.
It’s our destiny—
the cards don’t lie.

(c) 2020 Donna Evans / DJ Lekich

Enjoyed it mucho ! Congrats.Good song. Well done.

Your enunciation is very good overall. But I can't understand some Lines as sung. Audio is the most likely way 'consumers' will experience a work, and the words are the most likely factor to 'hook' their interest and sustain it.
I wonder if eliminating those two 'And's in the Chorus would enable the singer to more clearly deliver those Lines. The title Line, THE Hook, seems to come through clearly, but I had read the title before I heard it.

Another great one, Deej. Congrats to both of you. The beat is very staccato and that works well. I wonder if it might sound better if you were to loosen up your delivery of the verses a bit, so that you sounded more natural and conversational, straying a little from being right on the beat, contrasting a little with that staccato, then deliver the chorus the way you do now. Just a thought that occurred to me as I listened, and maybe completely wrong. It sounds really good as it is.

The vocal delivery does seem a little odd at times... but I like odd!
I think if you stopped the strumming of the guitar with an accent note just before the odd vocal break now and then, it would exaggerate the effect and make more sense

Great vox n sound as usual

Nice one as always Deej, I know a thing or two about those eyes, my wife is half Gypsy. LOL

It has been a pleasure to work with Deej. Love his vocal and music take and contribution to my lyrics. Pretty COOL!!

ckiphen, Gary, Gavin, JAPOV and Gerry:

Sorry for the delay in getting back to this thread . . . but know I really appreciate the listen and kind comments.

Gary, my style of singing always challenges my enunciation at times, as I have a tendency to drift off the last letter of a word--something I try to be conscious of, but tend to forget in the moment. I'm a big fan of eliminated connectors and unnecessary words from a lyric, but sometimes they are a necessary evil. Appreciate your thoughtful comments.

Gavin and JAPOV, I'm not sure I'm following the comment, but I'll acknowledge my vocal delivery is always a bit odd, LOL. . I'm not sure how I would sing this differently (kinda pathetic on my part really).

Again, thanks all for the listen. Glad it seemed to work for the most part.

Stay safe, stay well,

Deej

To Gerry: Curious if your wife is a card reader as well.

When I first saw the title it brought back memories of this classic Don Williams song. But outside of the gypsy woman reference the songs aren't similar at all. Thought they might be until I read the whole lyric.


https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=tyfeshvlZ6k

beechnut79,

Thanks much for stopping in. I'm not familiar with Don Williams or the song, but hope it was worth the listen nonetheless.

Stay well, stay safe--

Deej

Hi Deej,

I listened to this a couple of weeks ago, and I liked it a lot, but there's so much going on in this song that I wanted to spend some time listening to it over and over again.
First of all, I think your voice is really distinct and I've either heard you before or you sound a lot like someone who's name I can't quite place. I like it lot. It really holds my
attention throughout the song. I think the backing guitar keeps everything steady throughput the song and I'm a big fan of the "la-la's" in the background (probably because
of the Beatles). I'm starting to pepper my own music with more guitar riffs (thanks to you guys here), so it was nice for me to focus on those, which are nice surprises throughout
the song. The melody is memorable (it's running through my head as I'm writing this), which means (to me) that the melody is terrific. Lastly, the lyrics are very poetic and artistic.
I have some female friends that are artists (paintings, drawings - a talent that escapes me). The lyrics give me a feel of their outlook on life, that they look at things differently and
mystically. I'm not sure if that's what Donna was shooting for, but that's the impression I get when listening to the song while following the lyrics. I love them, by-the-way. I did see
some punctuation errors, though. Did you want to fix them? Ni big deal. I just thought I would mention it.

It was nice to experience your song (versus just listening to it).


Thanks,

Dan

This is really cool...Combo of 60's folk & 90's Alternative makes it fresh....

Yeah man, this here is a tight tune