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#1169210 - 09/15/20 03:34 PM Sorry Babe  
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https://www.reverbnation.com/pollychase/song/32106708-sorry-babe

I don't know anymore, he said, don't know why I'm here,
don't know what I'm headin for, all I'm feelin now is fear.


He said I lost something, that I always had before,
I feel like I'm not really of this world anymore.
--

I'm sorry babe, I said I wish I could find
the magic spell to save you from that state of mind.


But I'm sorry I-I know I'm not any help at all,
don't know the secret words that could break your fall.
--

Tryin' to act like it's all cool, like there was nothin wrong,
but the face of death is starin in the window all night long.


We had big plans, remember, plenty dreams to go around,
an' when we had to let it go, so hard to land back on the ground.
--

Sorry babe, I wish I wasn't so weak and so scared myself,
wish I had a magic wand, an' I could be some kind of help.


Oh the things we imagine, the things we read between the lines,
things we coulda shoulda said, forever haunts the mind.
--

first, second


Sorry babe, how could I know your heart when I did not know mine.
Only knew what I imagined, what I read between the lines.

Oh maybe I'll forgive myself, 'cause you know, at the time,
I only knew what I imagined, what I read between the lines.

#1169222 - 09/15/20 08:34 PM Re: Sorry Babe [Re: Songbird52]  
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Hi Polly:

Powerful lyric well performed. It leaves the listener to wonder about the storyline. Enjoyed my listen and if you ever do a re-take... would love more background instruments. All the best.... ----Dave

#1169224 - 09/15/20 08:47 PM Re: Sorry Babe [Re: Dave Rice]  
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Originally Posted by Dave Rice
Hi Polly:

Powerful lyric well performed. It leaves the listener to wonder about the storyline. Enjoyed my listen and if you ever do a re-take... would love more background instruments. All the best.... ----Dave


Thanks Dave! Yes I would like to do multi-track recordings. I have been doing only one on ones recently. I guess I want it to sound the same as when I sing at open mics. But I would like to add mandolin to this.

#1169225 - 09/15/20 08:52 PM Re: Sorry Babe [Re: Songbird52]  
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Polly

Has a lot of nice thoughts throughout--Dave may be right--Need a Bob Dillon harp or fiddle well placed in the background!

Write on!

Mackie

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Originally Posted by Mackie H.
Polly

Has a lot of nice thoughts throughout--Dave may be right--Need a Bob Dillon harp or fiddle well placed in the background!

Write on!

Mackie


Thanks Mackie! Yes harp or fiddle background would be nice.

#1169230 - 09/15/20 10:12 PM Re: Sorry Babe [Re: Songbird52]  
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This one works very well, always room for more sad songs. I would like it a hair slower, but that's just me.


Have a goodun,

John W. Selleck BMI Songwriter
A day without learning is a day lost forever.

www.soundclick.com/johnsings
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https://www.soundclick.com/artist/default.cfm?bandID=1468958 For Selleck/Kay co-writes
#1169234 - 09/15/20 10:26 PM Re: Sorry Babe [Re: John W. Selleck]  
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Originally Posted by John W. Selleck
This one works very well, always room for more sad songs. I would like it a hair slower, but that's just me.


Thanks, I will try it a little slower.

#1169347 - 09/19/20 01:51 PM Re: Sorry Babe [Re: Songbird52]  
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Polly,

Nicely done! Good 60ís folk type tune . . . I agree with John that it could be a bit slower. And then lyrically, I might look to cut down any unnecessary words in the lines. Sometimes you seem rushed to get them out smoothly. Slowing the song down a tad may do the trick by itself, but something to consider. Well done!

Best regards,

Deej

#1169348 - 09/19/20 01:52 PM Re: Sorry Babe [Re: Deej56]  
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Originally Posted by Deej56
Polly,

Nicely done! Good 60ís folk type tune . . . I agree with John that it could be a bit slower. And then lyrically, I might look to cut down any unnecessary words in the lines. Sometimes you seem rushed to get them out smoothly. Slowing the song down a tad may do the trick by itself, but something to consider. Well done!

Best regards,

Deej


Thanks! I will try that. Come to think of it, there were some lines where it was hard to fit all the words. Slower could fix that.

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