Here's my latest offering

Looking In
©2020 Nigel Quin

Another day has fallen over
All the pieces lay around
Hearts are fraying at the edges
And the right words can’t be found

Everybody wants to help out
But no one knows quite what to do
All trying to find the answer
When all the time it lay with you

[Chorus]
Now you sit and wonder
Where on earth to begin
I will look out for you
When you start looking in

Another friend falls by the wayside
Happens more often than it should
Must be a way that you can change that
Before you lose them all for good

It is not easy being the victim
[and] Finding someone new to blame
But for the people who still love you
It’s drama time again

[Chorus]

[Bridge]
Your world and my world will always be the same
But the truth we see is different where tears and confusion reign

I’ve been here all the time for you
But it seems you never heard
Time to break the cycle
And leave the theatre of absurd

[Chorus x2]
[End]

Hi Nigel,
Well done. You put lots of time and effort into this one and it shows. Good luck with it.

Hi Nigel
Love that wavering guitar
Great melodies and what a wonderful hook:

I will look out for you
When you start looking in

Vocals sound sublime and nice arrangement - maybe could be trimmed in length though.

Enjoyed my listen - good work!
Paul

Good one Nigel.

Enjoyed my listen, Nigel:

I always want to know... is that your vocal? You know my habit of paying demo singers... (a geezer getting older) but the vocal was perfect for the song. Best wishes for success with it. The video clips you managed to "wangle" from friends (and your own, I suspect) were perfect.

Thanks for sharing, ----Dave

Well written and well done.
Very good structure: AABAABCiABB

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Have fun!

Nigel,

A great melody and arrangement. John Lennon would love this simple theme and vibe--I definitely knew you were British when I closely listened to your phonetics before seeing the UK. Love the 1st tenor mellow sound you have going as well--a unique vocal. Enjoyable and relatable, well done!

steady-eddie

Hi John – I did and thank you



Hi Paul – good to see you. Thanks for your kind words. It’s interesting what you say about the length, generally I am not one for longer songs, but this one seemed to unfold more naturally that way.



Hi Vic – glad you think so

Hi Dave - Yes, that is my vocal. The video clips were assembled from royalty free clips, I made a small donation to the people that provided the ones that I used.

Thanks for your kind words


Hi Guy – Thank you


Hi steady-eddie – I tried a slightly different vocal style (for me) on this one, thanks for your kind words

Nigel

Lots to ponder in this one--At age 82, I get just enough of what you are saying!

Write on bro!

Mackie

Wonderful song and production, that third verse is great!!

Tammy

Mackie - Glad you are back on the scene, thanks for listening


Tammy – Thanks for your kind words

I like the guitar earworm. Nicely done. My main suggestion would be to add a little melodic variety to the second and fourth verses just to keep the interest building for the chorus.

..ant

Good stuff..............very original sound. I really enjoyed this!
-Tom

Thanks for your kind words and the suggestion

So glad you enjoyed , thanks

Nigel,

Absolutely loved this! I’m trying to figure out who this reminds me of, and I can’t put my finger on it. Maybe Lennon, as suggested above, but really unique. Love the vocal as well. Definitely ear worm stuff. Feel good about this one!

Best regards,

Deej

Well done Sir.
A Brilliant arrangement and production Nigel.
Love the tasty guitar and bass bits and your vocals are silky smooth and expressive.
An impressively built soundscape with everything perfectly placed... with room to breath.

Thank you so much Deej, glad you liked



Nelson, thanks for your kind words

I love this song Nigel. Great production and the music just comes off as professional.

The video... I've gotta admit I'm not a fan. Basically it's shots of normal people looking at their laptops interposed with shots of a woman looking at the ocean.

What are your talking about? Cyber bullying? (That's my best guess). But IMO the video does almost nothing to advance the story. If you're talking about Cyber-Bullying, showing people normally interacting with their laptops is just confusing.

Anyway, I absolutely love your tune. Not so much the video.

Peace,

Ian

Hi Ian

I'm glad you like the song and thanks for your kind words on that. The song is not about cyber-bullying, it's about someone who always thinks that other people are at fault when things go wrong, when actually if it keeps happening maybe they should have a look at their own behavior. No problem with your views on the video, it was an experiment for me using royalty free footage and I did my best to convey the mood of the lyric with those restrictions

Thanks

Nigel

Hmmmm.... that's interesting... I was going to say that starting and ending the video "low-tech" was very clever. Contrasting people frowning at their computer screens with one lone soul looking out at the ocean is also very ironically poetic. People want to feel "in control" and "larger" than life, so shrinking the world to the size of a computer monitor can be very seductive. However, there's never been anything like pondering the vastness of the ocean, or perhaps the night sky, to make you feel small yet connected to something larger than yourself. At least that's what I took from it... Nice job!

Not sure how I missed this one. Very enjoyable. I agree it's an earworm and yes, it has a touch of Lennon in the simple melody, which really matches the thoughtful lyric. It might be a little long but it really didn't feel like it.

Yes, the video is a bit of an awkward fit in places. This is inevitable when using stock footage, as I've found when trying to do the same

That actually makes great sense. We've all had our run ins with narcissists. I've heard it said that if a true narcissist goes to therapy for a year or two they might admit they might have a problem.

Peace,

Ian

I like everything about this, Nigel. I thought I'd really like it after I heard the first couple of bars and I was right. I like the melody and the quirkiness of it. You should be very proud of this.

Thanks JAPOV - it's all getting very deep now - The strange thing is video footage can often work unexpectedly, just play some music while watching TV with the sound down

Hi Gavin, thank for you kind comments. I agree with 100% on the video, although I'm amazed at how talented some of the video makers are, and thankful to them for making their work available.


Thank you Daniel, I'm glad you like the song and feel honoured that it is the subject of what appears to be your first post

This one got many responses and I can see why. Very good.

Thank you