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#1167512 - 08/10/20 08:50 AM I was only me  
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I was only me

Verse
I donít have a special talent
Outside my way with words.
Iíll die alone a great unknown
That no oneís ever heard.
A song that never found its voice
Thatís waiting to be sung.
A steeple with a silver bell
Thatís waiting to be rung.
Pre-chorus
Gathering dust
They turn to rust
Just a waste of time
Chorus
All these songs Iíve written
Footprints in the snow.
Never was somebody
Anybody knows.
Thereíre just words in passing.
Much the same as me.
Never was somebody.
I was only me.
Verse
Iíve no wish for fame or fortune.
I just want to be heard.
Iíll die alone a great unknown
Along with all my words.
A dream that found no fruition.
A seed that never grew.
These words these songs I have written.
Dreams that never came true.
Pre-chorus
Gathering dust
They turn to rust
Just a waste of time
Chorus
All these songs Iíve written
Footprints in the snow.
Never was somebody
Anybody knows.
Thereíre just words in passing.
Much the same as me.
Never was somebody.
I was only me.
Bridge
A whisper in the wind.
Iím the morning dew.
A whisper in the wind.
A man you once knew.

Pre-chorus
Gathering dust
They turn to rust
Just a waste of time
Chorus
All these songs Iíve written
Footprints in the snow.
Never was somebody
Anybody knows.
Thereíre just words in passing.
Much the same as me.
Never was somebody.
I was only me.


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#1167513 - 08/10/20 10:14 AM Re: I was only me [Re: ckiphen]  
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Love the hook and love it all.

Vic


It's never too late? Yes it is, so do it now.

If, given time, a monkey can write the complete works of Shakespeare maybe there's hope for me.

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#1167531 - 08/10/20 01:18 PM Re: I was only me [Re: ckiphen]  
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What Vic said smile This is one of your best, Carroll, at least in my opinion.

There is an apparent contradiction between these lines...
Never was somebody
Anybody knows.

and...
A man you once knew.

You could change it to "a man you never knew." Probably not necessary. Only a nit-picker like me would even notice it, and you might lose something in the change. Depends on what you're trying to say.

#1167542 - 08/10/20 02:34 PM Re: I was only me [Re: Gavin Sinclair]  
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It may be meant as one sentence:

Never was somebody anybody knows.

Vic


It's never too late? Yes it is, so do it now.

If, given time, a monkey can write the complete works of Shakespeare maybe there's hope for me.

http://store.cdbaby.com/cd/vicarnold2

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#1167544 - 08/10/20 03:30 PM Re: I was only me [Re: Vicarn]  
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Originally Posted by Vicarn
It may be meant as one sentence:

Never was somebody anybody knows.

Vic

Yes, that's how I read it.

Gavin

#1167549 - 08/10/20 04:30 PM Re: I was only me [Re: ckiphen]  
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Hi Carrol,
Very good lyric. My only nit is the same. It is 2 different tenses in the same line "Was/Knows" I hear "I am not somebody anybody knows" or "I was not somebody anybody knew" which doesn't fit your rhyme scheme. Just my thoughts, KOS.


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#1167553 - 08/10/20 05:22 PM Re: I was only me [Re: ckiphen]  
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Sorry missed that


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#1167554 - 08/10/20 05:25 PM Re: I was only me [Re: ckiphen]  
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Appreciate all the feedback but I think ill leave it as it is. Makes sense to me


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#1167581 - 08/11/20 02:25 PM Re: I was only me [Re: ckiphen]  
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ckiphen,

Mighty fine write on this one, with some very nice lines. I have no reservations about the "Never was somebody anybody knows" line, but I do think Gavin's suggestion of changing it the last line of the bridge to "a man you never knew" fits a bit more with the song. All just things to consider, as it seems you've already done. But again, really strong write. Well done!

All my best to you,

Deej

#1167597 - 08/11/20 06:11 PM Re: I was only me [Re: ckiphen]  
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Thanks pal


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#1167624 - 08/12/20 10:52 AM Re: I was only me [Re: ckiphen]  
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Give it a go if you want to.


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