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Mutlu
by Gary E. Andrews - 04/15/24 07:08 PM
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I was only me
Verse I don’t have a special talent Outside my way with words. I’ll die alone a great unknown That no one’s ever heard. A song that never found its voice That’s waiting to be sung. A steeple with a silver bell That’s waiting to be rung. Pre-chorus Gathering dust They turn to rust Just a waste of time Chorus All these songs I’ve written Footprints in the snow. Never was somebody Anybody knows. There’re just words in passing. Much the same as me. Never was somebody. I was only me. Verse I’ve no wish for fame or fortune. I just want to be heard. I’ll die alone a great unknown Along with all my words. A dream that found no fruition. A seed that never grew. These words these songs I have written. Dreams that never came true. Pre-chorus Gathering dust They turn to rust Just a waste of time Chorus All these songs I’ve written Footprints in the snow. Never was somebody Anybody knows. There’re just words in passing. Much the same as me. Never was somebody. I was only me. Bridge A whisper in the wind. I’m the morning dew. A whisper in the wind. A man you once knew.
Pre-chorus Gathering dust They turn to rust Just a waste of time Chorus All these songs I’ve written Footprints in the snow. Never was somebody Anybody knows. There’re just words in passing. Much the same as me. Never was somebody. I was only me.
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Love the hook and love it all.
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What Vic said This is one of your best, Carroll, at least in my opinion. There is an apparent contradiction between these lines... Never was somebody Anybody knows. and... A man you once knew. You could change it to "a man you never knew." Probably not necessary. Only a nit-picker like me would even notice it, and you might lose something in the change. Depends on what you're trying to say.
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It may be meant as one sentence:
Never was somebody anybody knows.
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It may be meant as one sentence:
Never was somebody anybody knows.
Vic Yes, that's how I read it. Gavin
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Hi Carrol, Very good lyric. My only nit is the same. It is 2 different tenses in the same line "Was/Knows" I hear "I am not somebody anybody knows" or "I was not somebody anybody knew" which doesn't fit your rhyme scheme. Just my thoughts, KOS.
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Appreciate all the feedback but I think ill leave it as it is. Makes sense to me
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ckiphen,
Mighty fine write on this one, with some very nice lines. I have no reservations about the "Never was somebody anybody knows" line, but I do think Gavin's suggestion of changing it the last line of the bridge to "a man you never knew" fits a bit more with the song. All just things to consider, as it seems you've already done. But again, really strong write. Well done!
All my best to you,
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Give it a go if you want to.
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