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New mix. My friend Gerry suggested a new mix for this song. Sounded like a good idea. So here it is. <edit> I was told that the main writer for this song Ken had passed away. I have found out that was false information. https://soundcloud.com/tom-franz/prayer-gmPrayer By Ken Mastro and Tom Franz sun on my shoulder wind at my back there was a time when my live was like that just long enough to drop my defense and make my fall more immense Lord I need something to hold onto before I blow away if humility is your goal i passed that point so long ago all you have given you have taken away all i have left are these words I pray C B I can hear the cold wind howling at my door that is why i'm praying lord it's coming back for more C
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Thanks for sharing that with us, Tom:
Knowing your belief in your co-writer's strengths make the song more meaningful... but even without it... in today's world of unseen enemies and anarchists... hell bent on destroying our culture, our history and our past, no matter how "out of touch" with modern beliefs... makes this prayer so needed at this time.
Somewhere in my archives, I have a co written song with the same title... but the subject (request to the Almighty) is a bit different... and from a child's perspective.
Thanks for sharing. May your prayer be answered. Beautiful work.
----Dave
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Tom,
It's a pretty song . . . love those first four lines. There are few things I can quibble with, but the all come down to artistic choice and they're really not worth mentioning, and you've made some nice ones consistently throughout. The vocal is heartfelt and full of emotion--nicely done. If there's an opportunity for enhancement . . . for me at least . . . it the lyric of the bridge--those last two lines could convey more.
But the chord progression and melody make this compelling just as is. Really enjoyed it!
All my best,
Deej
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Wow...This is really good this morning for me personally.
Reminds me of my friend Bryan MacLean from LOVE who wrote "Alone again, or". He told me to do a song of his & he passed Christmas of '99. I can't find the song, so I cannot do it...
Nice work and very touching as is
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Beautiful guitar and singing. A theme so many of us can understand. Real nice song.
Those guitar trills are very pretty.
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Beautiful, Tom. Those words are what I strive for with my own. Sincere, relevant, and touching. Like the others, I thank you for sharing. -Tom
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Dave, Thank you for your listen and thoughts.
Deej, Thanks for your kind words. How about that the last two lines of the bridge were my favorite of the part that I wrote. It was about the unrelenting difficulty some people experience in life. But I sooooo respect a listener's view point because THAT is reality. You can't explain a song you give it to a listener and it becomes whatever they perceive it to be. Thanks for the constructive thoughts very much.
Steve, Dude I hope you find that song!!!!! I know how that would be though I have so many notebooks and audio clips of ideas. I really hope you do come across it. Thanks for the listen.
Polly, You heard the previous version that was so busy guitar wise that it had too many distracting string squeaks. Maybe it is the way that I EQ the guitar. I like that high end sparkle. Perhaps I should rethink that. . . . . Thanks for the listen and kind words.
Thomas, We have a mutual admiration thing going. Thanks for your listen.
Tom
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. Steve, Dude I hope you find that song!!!!! I know how that would be though I have so many notebooks and audio clips of ideas. I really hope you do come across it. Thanks for the listen.
I went online to his lost tapes & it's not there....Bryan Macleans guitar playing & writing were so genius. Alone again, or
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Tom,
I went back and gave the bridge another listen. I think you can read/hear those lines in two ways--yours being the better. My initial, and I think wrong, read of "That is why I'm praying lord it's coming back for more" was, paraphrased, "I'm praying it comes back again" . . . which of course doesn't make a lot of sense, hence my comment, but that should have tipped me off to a plainer meaning: Again, paraphrased, "That's why I'm praying lord BECAUSE it's coming back for more"--which makes more sense and hopefully what you intended.
Not sure how to clarify it--probably doesn't need anything, actually--just a weird take on my part. Maybe you could change the line to " . . . it's come back for more" given it's already howling at the door. Dunno. Go with what feels right to you . . . As I said, pretty song sung with heart--really nice job on it.
Regards,
Deej
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It has Cat Stevens written all over it. Little Neil Diamond too. Very emotional and great guitar track.
The singing style reminds me of Italian classic songs.
But this was terrific.
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Hello Tom I enjoyed listening to this very much. The highlights are the vocal and guitar for that reason I would drop out everything else apart from the bass. To bring that wonderful acoustic guitar out in the mix I would twin it, pan one Left and the other Right. The right hand guitar track I would up the highs a little on the EQ and the nudge it a few milli seconds to the right, the Left hand guitar track I would drop the Highs on the EQ a little and leave the track in position. This would fill it out with that Acoustic Guitar and also enhance your vocals in the middle with that bass line just sitting in the background.
Only suggestions Tom but worth giving it a try and apart from that I wouldn't change a thing.
Best,
Gerry
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Really strong lyrically and beautifully performed. Guitar sounds great and the vocal is very emotive, just the way I like it. Thanks for sharing.
Dave
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Hi Tom, What the world needs more of are good music, good singing, and plain simple words they can all understand. this fills that need well. Well done.
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Deej, thanks for the second listen. Good idea on the lyric change. I will probably use that going forward.
Fdemetrio, all very nice compliments. Thank you for the listen.
Gerry, done deal sir. Remixed per your suggestions. You are right less is more for my mixes and songs. Thanks as always for lending me your capable ears.
Dave, Thanks for the listen and kind words. Really tried to do my buddy Ken right.
John, thanks very much.
Martin,Thanks.
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Tom,
This is a powerful write.....I just like everything about it--lyrics/melody/arrangement/performance. You had me rivoted, sweet!
steady-eddie
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