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I have produced and written this song, is the production something decent to listen.

https://soundcloud.com/user-148093629/precious-moment

(edit to put lyric June 7,2020)

Precious Moment
©2019 Irwin Byron Abrigo
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(1st Verse)
Precious moment, Precious moment
This moment of my life, Just to have you here tonight
With your body next to mine in this, precious moment
Precious moment, Precious moment

This moment it feels so good and I hope you feel the same way too
Coz it’s you I don't want to lose in this precious moment
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(Chorus)
And I wanna be loved; I wanna be loved by you
Before the night is through, I wanna be loved by you
In this precious moment, precious moment
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(2nd verse)
This moment in your arms, is like music to my song
Cause you fill my heart with joy in this precious moment
Precious moment, Precious moment
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This moment it can't be denied coz you are making me feel so fine
Don’t stop or I will die in this precious moment
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(Chorus)
And I wanna be loved I wanna be loved by you
Before the night is through I wanna be loved by you
In this precious moment, precious moment
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(Bridge)
You can hold me and make love to me tonight
Squeeze me but don’t tease me and then leave me
In this precious moment precious moment
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(Repeat chorus)

Good pop song.
Good singing.
Good rhythm.

Maybe post the lyrics here.

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Have fun!

Thanks for the reply Trepanier, I not too long edit my post and put in the lyric (I did made mention of me edited it)

Hope you'll enjoy the read.

Irwin

Irwin,

I like so much of this and it is feel good pop song, This is different from your other stuff & I see growth as a Producer. But your question means you have your doubts...

To answer your original question: The production is clear,& the recording is crisp...Great job..I think maybe the track is missing some counter melodies....In this type iof music maybe a couple stops with the drums earler than you did, to break up the monotany a tad would help...This would define the Arrangement a little more IMO. I think it needs a couple more instruments doing ear candy without stepping on your arrangement. I would have looked for some poppy pads/chimes/bells combo maybe...

I do think you guys let a couple thing go vocally that maybe could have been fixed by the vocalist, or used some pitch correction software.

The time of your track could be cut 2 minutes easy...I think the track would be more effective shorter.

Good up tempo Pop song...That's what I heard..Tracks are getting better Irwin for sure

id say you're improving. You're learning how to make a song out of the tools you're using. Before it seemed you were just throwing sampled tracks together

The hook is just as good as anything else in that electronica genre. Yeah I think there is pitch problems with the singer. It sounds like a sampled singer and your probably hitting some bumps with the melody and the chords it's playing.

It's a tough genre you need really good samples and have unlimited choices, but the home stuff is very limited.

One thing I would work on is matching what the track is saying with your lyrics.

Precious moments is a good melodic hook but the music doesn't sound sweet and sentimental, it sounds like a get down and boogie track.

Something to think about

But you are clearly getting better.

Hi Steve,

I know that there is a lot more than can be done with this production", but I was not exactly sure what else to do and I really would like the song to become something people will listen, so yes! I had some doubts.

It feels so good to know you have notice that I am improving for I do work very hard to produce a pleasing sound to my music productions.

Also their are some awesome song productions that are being done here on this forum too I have heard.

I thank you very much for your comment and input.

Irwin

Hi Fdemetrio,

You have took the time to listen to my song so I'll like to say thanks for your in depth input! I really appreciate it! I’ll see what I can do.

I really want persons to enjoy what they hear when they listen to the songs I produce so your suggestions means a lot to me. .

Irwin

Hi Irwin:

Heather did a great job for you on this one. Admittedly, this is not a song I would seek on my radio... but old geezers like me tend to like what they "grew up with!" LOL! Since your arrival, you have shown steady improvement and I admire your tenacity. Best of luck with this one and in everything you do.

----Dave

Yes Dave, I have notice a little improvement in myself as well but I am not fully satisfy as I would like to with my music productions I want them to be better.

I am happy to know you have notice and admired my tenacity.

Thanks very much for the reply.

Irwin

Nice rhythm, good singing. Very danceable. I like the simplicity of the lyrics.

Irwin,

Very nice pop/dance tune. I think it is the best I have heard from you. Really nice female vocal. There was some clipping I heard in the vocal. Other than that, I really thougt the production was spot on. I agree with alot of Steve's comment, with respect to adding some more ear candy hear and there. Nicely done. I thought for this type of tune, it may have been a bit long, as there were not enough different parts to justify it. That being said, this could be the extended dance mix.

Hi GocartMoz, Your comment are are very much welcome and I am happy that you like my production. About the the song being a bit too long, I should have notice that it has being repeated has it was uploaded.

I thank you very much for the reply.

Irwin