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#1165077 - 06/06/20 07:53 PM "Cry of the Young" VIDEO  
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Thank you everyone for the suggestions on the tune as I was working it out. Early versions were not working too well & I almost scrapped the whole project. A week ago this wasn't even on my list of songs to ever redo, let alone a VIDEO, & here is the end result.

"Cry of the Young" VIDEO

"Cry of the Young"
(c)1997 Steve Altonian

On a cold hard city night
There’s kids at play playing with guns & knives
Someones child dies

Battle lines are being drawn
City streets blast out the sound of war
Someone pays the cost

When you look around you can see the cry of the young
Lives are over before they ever get to start
If you listen really hard you hear the cry of the young

Things aren’t how they used to be
In a land of locked doors & broken dreams
Someones mother cries

Heading down a one-way road
In search of something that they can’t find at home
Someones baby’s lost

When you look around you can see the cry of the young
Lives are over before they ever get to start
If you listen really hard you hear the cry of the young








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#1165078 - 06/06/20 08:22 PM Re: "Cry of the Young" VIDEO is done [Re: Steve Altonian]  
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Liked it Steve.

You got a good result with what you had to work with on the music and the video was emotionally compelling and seemed pretty seamless.
Well done.

Martin

#1165089 - 06/07/20 10:11 AM Re: "Cry of the Young" VIDEO is done [Re: Martin Lide]  
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Originally Posted by Martin Lide
Liked it Steve.

You got a good result with what you had to work with on the music and the video was emotionally compelling and seemed pretty seamless.
Well done.

Martin


Thanks Martin...Another songwriting thread & Deej from here REALLY helped me with this track. The whole last half of the song had a different beat (RAP, TECHNO?) & they stayed on me on it...So I re-did the drums/bass for the last half. At first I resisted....

But....I had to really consider their critique...When a couple people start telling you the same thing, you may want to listen...







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#1165208 - 06/09/20 01:29 PM Re: "Cry of the Young" VIDEO is done [Re: Steve Altonian]  
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I never would've thought this song would end up with this video...How our world has changed...



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#1165220 - 06/09/20 07:53 PM Re: "Cry of the Young" VIDEO is done [Re: Steve Altonian]  
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Steve,

The final mix came out really well—cool work with the video. Compelling. I hope this does well for you . . . so good luck with the pitch opportunity. It's deserving of the attention.

Best regards,

Deej

#1165264 - 06/11/20 12:09 AM Re: "Cry of the Young" VIDEO is done [Re: Deej56]  
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Originally Posted by Deej56
Steve,

The final mix came out really well—cool work with the video. Compelling. I hope this does well for you . . . so good luck with the pitch opportunity. It's deserving of the attention.

Best regards,

Deej


You & Vic were really helpful on this song as I was pushihg to get this done. You were the first to point out the drums & at the time the back half of this song WAS NOT COMING together...Originally this was going to a rapper & I had the "bright" idea of 2 drummers going at the same time. At parts was "super cool", at other parts "super busy"...

I looked at the crits from here & elsewhere on the drums & realized the TECHNO/RAP beat I originally had was a total misfire...About 4-5 people mentioned the same thing about the drums elsewhere, so clearly I had an issue. But to fix after the fact? NOT SO EASY. Obviously since I replaced the drums, I now gotta replace the bass. But, had to be done. When 4-5 people mention the same issue, I may have an issue...

I appreciate not getting an "atta boy"...This song didn't need an "atta boy", it needed the drums to be fixed

Thanks for the crit






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#1165319 - 06/12/20 04:05 PM Re: "Cry of the Young" VIDEO is done [Re: Steve Altonian]  
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Really beautiful singing. Great song, powerful rhythm and emotions.

#1165389 - 06/14/20 04:54 AM Re: "Cry of the Young" VIDEO is done [Re: Steve Altonian]  
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Hi Steve
I noticed this is dated 1997? It eens nothing changes even going back to 1969 and Elvis'In the Ghetto.
I think it's a good all round song. The chorus is good and works well IMHO.
Emotionally charged and timeless, sadly.
Regards
John


We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars. Oscar Wilde
#1165396 - 06/14/20 10:49 AM Re: "Cry of the Young" VIDEO is done [Re: Travis david]  
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Originally Posted by Travis david
Hi Steve
I noticed this is dated 1997? It seess nothing changes even going back to 1969 and Elvis'In the Ghetto.

Emotionally charged and timeless, sadly.
Regards
John


Morning Travis,

I wrote the song as a TITLE TRACK for a play with the same name...My daughter came up to me a month ago & said I "had to" re-do & update "Cry of the Young" in light of world circumstances. As she spoke I heard the phrase "Out of the mouth of babes" & I took it as a sign, so I went to work.

Wasn't even on my radar at all to ever sing again, let alone cut & put to VIDEO...






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#1165443 - 06/15/20 05:13 PM Re: "Cry of the Young" VIDEO is done [Re: Steve Altonian]  
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I like the way you put that video together. No jumping from one place to another unless you needed to jump from one place to another.
Good work all round.

Vic


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