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Leafs
by Gary E. Andrews - 03/04/24 12:47 PM
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I got a Christian song I feel really inspired to see through. But it hasn't been the quickest write. After 1 1/2 months I NEVER would have stuck with a tune with NO VERSES YET... I've got the CHORUS & not much else of note... The HOOK & the original direction for the song as birthed are about World Events circa 2020: The ever changing world situation & the Great Spiritual Awakening cause people to look to God & OUT OF THE ASHES they will rise. Scripturally, the CHORUS/Hook is a reflection of Isaiah 61:3. I purposely left out my melody ideas for the verse as I didn't want to get locked in just yet. Plus, I am beginning to feel maybe I am not the one meant to write these verses. This also will work incredibly well as a Ballad. It can be slowed down to be a worship song for sure....Anyways here is what I got so far... "Out of the ashes"CHORUS:Out of the ashes Your people will rise Called by Your Spirit into the light From every nation, religion & tribe Out of the ashes Your people will rise Your people will rise
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Hi Steve A quick idea for your verse :
Out of the ashes Your people will rise Called by Your Spirit into the light From every nation, religion & tribe Out of the ashes Your people will rise Your people will rise
Where are we heading, when will it end? This gift from hell laughing demons send We are strong, we are all as one when dark clouds fade, we'll see the sun Regards John
Last edited by Travis david; 05/25/20 01:20 PM.
We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars. Oscar Wilde
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Don't know that I can be much help in this genre, but I can say I really like the chorus melody alot. So much so that I believe it would benefit the song, arrangement wise, to begin with the chorus. It has a large enough hook that I think the song opening up that way really would hit the listener with a bang. Additionally, I like the musical bed for the verses. I can hear different vocal melody possibilities while listening. Looking forward to the finished product. By the way, I like John's suggestion. Works well with your thoughts behind song.
Dave
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Yes nice chorus.
Started thinking about verses, maybe this will provide some inspiration you can adapt:
They can mock every prayer They can shout "Not allowed!" Take each house of worship Burn it to the ground
And when it's all said and done When the flames have gone out Faith will survive Of that there's no doubt
Out of the ashes the people will rise Called by Your Spirit into the light From every nation, religion & tribe Out of the ashes Your people will rise Your people will rise
Best of luck! -Mike
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Hi Steve A quick idea for your verse :
Where are we heading, when will it end? This gift from hell laughing demons send We are strong, we are all as one when dark clouds fade, we'll see the sun Regards John Thanks for the input & for giving some ideas to contemplate...
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really like that chorus, Steve. almost sounds like a song from the aftermath of this virus we are all have trouble with...nice work..
"Blessed are the words of truth and fiction, one might save you from the other...Vincent
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Yes nice chorus.
Started thinking about verses, maybe this will provide some inspiration you can adapt:
They can mock every prayer They can shout "Not allowed!" Take each house of worship Burn it to the ground
Best of luck! -Mike
Thanks for your input on the CHORUS I'm 58, but I think my younger rappers would call your verse "FIRE"...
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Steve,
You certainly have a start to something with that chorus. I’ll look forward to see what you do with it. I’d try to pitch in lyrically, but it’s really not my genre, but you’ve received some nice suggestions so far. Good luck with it!
Best regards,
Deej
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can say I really like the chorus melody alot. So much so that I believe it would benefit the song, arrangement wise, to begin with the chorus. It has a large enough hook that I think the song opening up that way really would hit the listener with a bang.
Dave Hi Dave, That is a very viable option. Especially if the tune ends up being a Congregational type song Thanks for the input
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Hi Steve:
I really enjoyed what I heard and encourage you to take however much time it requires to bring it where you want it to be. This is one of those songs that will touch all the emotional bases whether done exactly the way you presented it here... or in a full orchestrated version, complete with choir. Best of luck with it. Well done.
----Dave
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Steve,
You certainly have a start to something with that chorus. I’ll look forward to see what you do with it. I’d try to pitch in lyrically, but it’s really not my genre, but you’ve received some nice suggestions so far. Good luck with it!
Best regards,
Deej Thanks so much Dee for the listen & your time... really like that chorus, Steve. almost sounds like a song from the aftermath of this virus we are all have trouble with...nice work.. I know crazy huh? Thanks for your thoughts & taking the time to listen to what I got so far
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