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#1164618 - 05/24/20 11:52 PM Out of the ashes (CHORUS only done)  
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I got a Christian song I feel really inspired to see through. But it hasn't been the quickest write. After 1 1/2 months I NEVER would have stuck with a tune with NO VERSES YET...
I've got the CHORUS & not much else of note...

The HOOK & the original direction for the song as birthed are about World Events circa 2020: The ever changing world situation & the Great Spiritual Awakening cause people to look to God & OUT OF THE ASHES they will rise. Scripturally, the CHORUS/Hook is a reflection of Isaiah 61:3.

I purposely left out my melody ideas for the verse as I didn't want to get locked in just yet. Plus, I am beginning to feel maybe I am not the one meant to write these verses.

This also will work incredibly well as a Ballad. It can be slowed down to be a worship song for sure....Anyways here is what I got so far...

"Out of the ashes"

CHORUS:

Out of the ashes Your people will rise
Called by Your Spirit into the light
From every nation, religion & tribe
Out of the ashes Your people will rise
Your people will rise



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#1164641 - 05/25/20 05:46 AM Re: Out of the ashes (CHORUS only done) [Re: Steve Altonian]  
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Hi Steve
A quick idea for your verse :

Out of the ashes Your people will rise
Called by Your Spirit into the light
From every nation, religion & tribe
Out of the ashes Your people will rise
Your people will rise

Where are we heading, when will it end?
This gift from hell laughing demons send
We are strong, we are all as one
when dark clouds fade, we'll see the sun
Regards
John

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#1164652 - 05/25/20 01:06 PM Re: Out of the ashes (CHORUS only done) [Re: Steve Altonian]  
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Don't know that I can be much help in this genre, but I can say I really like the chorus melody alot. So much so that I believe it would benefit the song, arrangement wise, to begin with the chorus. It has a large enough hook that I think the song opening up that way really would hit the listener with a bang. Additionally, I like the musical bed for the verses. I can hear different vocal melody possibilities while listening. Looking forward to the finished product. By the way, I like John's suggestion. Works well with your thoughts behind song.

Dave

#1164654 - 05/25/20 02:30 PM Re: Out of the ashes (CHORUS only done) [Re: Steve Altonian]  
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Yes nice chorus.

Started thinking about verses, maybe this will provide some inspiration you can adapt:

They can mock every prayer
They can shout "Not allowed!"
Take each house of worship
Burn it to the ground

And when it's all said and done
When the flames have gone out
Faith will survive
Of that there's no doubt

Out of the ashes the people will rise
Called by Your Spirit into the light
From every nation, religion & tribe
Out of the ashes Your people will rise
Your people will rise

Best of luck!
-Mike


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#1164672 - 05/26/20 12:52 AM Re: Out of the ashes (CHORUS only done) [Re: Travis david]  
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Originally Posted by Travis david
Hi Steve
A quick idea for your verse :

Where are we heading, when will it end?
This gift from hell laughing demons send
We are strong, we are all as one
when dark clouds fade, we'll see the sun
Regards
John


Thanks for the input & for giving some ideas to contemplate...


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#1164685 - 05/26/20 05:09 PM Re: Out of the ashes (CHORUS only done) [Re: Steve Altonian]  
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really like that chorus, Steve. almost sounds like a song from the aftermath of
this virus we are all have trouble with...nice work..


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#1164691 - 05/26/20 07:17 PM Re: Out of the ashes (CHORUS only done) [Re: 9ne]  
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Originally Posted by 9ne

Yes nice chorus.

Started thinking about verses, maybe this will provide some inspiration you can adapt:

They can mock every prayer
They can shout "Not allowed!"
Take each house of worship
Burn it to the ground

Best of luck!
-Mike




Thanks for your input on the CHORUS

I'm 58, but I think my younger rappers would call your verse "FIRE"...


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#1164701 - 05/26/20 08:53 PM Re: Out of the ashes (CHORUS only done) [Re: Steve Altonian]  
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Steve,

You certainly have a start to something with that chorus. Iíll look forward to see what you do with it. Iíd try to pitch in lyrically, but itís really not my genre, but youíve received some nice suggestions so far. Good luck with it!

Best regards,

Deej

#1164739 - 05/27/20 10:13 PM Re: Out of the ashes (CHORUS only done) [Re: GocartMoz]  
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Originally Posted by GocartMoz
can say I really like the chorus melody alot. So much so that I believe it would benefit the song, arrangement wise, to begin with the chorus. It has a large enough hook that I think the song opening up that way really would hit the listener with a bang.

Dave


Hi Dave,

That is a very viable option. Especially if the tune ends up being a Congregational type song

Thanks for the input


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#1164762 - 05/28/20 10:57 AM Re: Out of the ashes (CHORUS only done) [Re: Steve Altonian]  
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Hi Steve:

I really enjoyed what I heard and encourage you to take however much time it requires to bring it where you want it to be. This is one of those songs that will touch all the emotional bases whether done exactly the way you presented it here... or in a full orchestrated version, complete with choir. Best of luck with it. Well done.

----Dave

#1164807 - 05/29/20 08:05 PM Re: Out of the ashes (CHORUS only done) [Re: Deej56]  
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Originally Posted by Deej56
Steve,

You certainly have a start to something with that chorus. Iíll look forward to see what you do with it. Iíd try to pitch in lyrically, but itís really not my genre, but youíve received some nice suggestions so far. Good luck with it!

Best regards,

Deej


Thanks so much Dee for the listen & your time...

Originally Posted by lane1777
really like that chorus, Steve. almost sounds like a song from the aftermath of
this virus we are all have trouble with...nice work..


I know crazy huh? Thanks for your thoughts & taking the time to listen to what I got so far


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