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by Gary E. Andrews - 04/15/24 07:08 PM
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This was partly inspired by me pretty much picking up the idea of the possible outline of the upcoming psychological horror film of the same song title name, so it's basically more in a paranormal way the definition of the word as it is on its own, and thanks to my new musical style the verses and bridge will be rapped with chorus sung.
EDIT: Yes btw you may notice the last line of the chorus is too lengthy, so I would highly respect constructive help filling in and/or just critique.
©luna simone
v1 At the brink of war Nothing could excite the world ever more Than a distraction A clapback state Til suddenly She'd escalate into something more than people ever predicted
CHORUS Her name is nothing but something People fear and bow down to Because they don't know their values from hers She stepped into the world Like an alien unexpected Her alias is Antebellum And opening a forbidden box to her is just another notion
v2 Once she entered the void There was no turning back She was beginning of the end The evil the so called enemies lacked No counterfeit She was powerful and then some
v3/prechorus No one could stop her middle finger to the sun She was the dark blocking the light The eclipse making fear alive A horror story come to life People slaves to paranormal acts and fight or flight
CHORUS Her name is nothing but something People fear and bow down to Because they don't know their values from hers She stepped into the world Like an alien unexpected Her alias is Antebellum And opening a forbidden box of hate to her is just another notion
BRIDGE Don't expect a Berlin wall to fall Unless you live learn lessons harder She makes you take the fall to your faith in the world Aware that worldly faith will only make you weaker Cause humility is the absolution the death of her Like any queen of drama and gossip She doesn't know the difference between drama and dirt She'll take the blow until the lines of good and evil in her heart blur
REPEAT CHORUS: Her name is nothing but something People fear and bow down to Because they don't know their values from hers She stepped into the world Like an alien unexpected Her alias is Antebellum And opening a forbidden box of hate is to her just another notion
Her name is nothing but something People fear and bow down to Because they don't know their values from hers She stepped into the world Like an alien unexpected Her alias is Antebellum And opening a forbidden box of hate is to her just another notion
Her name is nothing but something People fear and bow down to Because they don't know their distinction from hers She stepped into the world Like an alien unexpected Her alias is Antebellum And opening a forbidden box in her eyes is just another move another notion
Her name is nothing but something People fear and bow down to Because they don't know their values from hers She stepped into the world Like an alien unexpected Her alias is Antebellum And opening a forbidden box to her is just another move another notion.
Last edited by LunaSimone; 01/14/20 03:55 PM.
Aries. INFP-T. Artist of all trades. Listener and creator of vast, unexpected musical genre writings/compositions. Art is the journey of a free soul. -Alev Oguz http://soundcloud.com/lunasimone
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Not my writing style but interesting. Re the last line: as you're using metaphors why not just leave out "opening" or "forbidden" or just say "Pandora's box for her is just another move or motion"? Of course I don't know the meter of this so it may not work.
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