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#1160573 01/14/20 03:40 PM
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This was partly inspired by me pretty much picking up the idea of the possible outline of the upcoming psychological horror film of the same song title name, so it's basically more in a paranormal way the definition of the word as it is on its own, and thanks to my new musical style the verses and bridge will be rapped with chorus sung.

EDIT: Yes btw you may notice the last line of the chorus is too lengthy, so I would highly respect constructive help filling in and/or just critique.

©luna simone

v1
At the brink of war
Nothing could excite the world ever more
Than a distraction
A clapback state
Til suddenly
She'd escalate into something more than people ever predicted

CHORUS
Her name is nothing but something
People fear and bow down to
Because they don't know their values from hers
She stepped into the world
Like an alien unexpected
Her alias is Antebellum
And opening a forbidden box to her is just another notion

v2
Once she entered the void
There was no turning back
She was beginning of the end
The evil the so called enemies lacked
No counterfeit
She was powerful and then some

v3/prechorus
No one could stop her middle finger to the sun
She was the dark blocking the light
The eclipse making fear alive
A horror story come to life
People slaves to paranormal acts and fight or flight

CHORUS
Her name is nothing but something
People fear and bow down to
Because they don't know their values from hers
She stepped into the world
Like an alien unexpected
Her alias is Antebellum
And opening a forbidden box of hate to her is just another notion

BRIDGE
Don't expect a Berlin wall to fall
Unless you live learn lessons harder
She makes you take the fall to your faith in the world
Aware that worldly faith will only make you weaker
Cause humility is the absolution the death of her
Like any queen of drama and gossip
She doesn't know the difference between drama and dirt
She'll take the blow until the lines of good and evil in her heart blur

REPEAT CHORUS:
Her name is nothing but something
People fear and bow down to
Because they don't know their values from hers
She stepped into the world
Like an alien unexpected
Her alias is Antebellum
And opening a forbidden box of hate is to her just another notion

Her name is nothing but something
People fear and bow down to
Because they don't know their values from hers
She stepped into the world
Like an alien unexpected
Her alias is Antebellum
And opening a forbidden box of hate is to her just another notion

Her name is nothing but something
People fear and bow down to
Because they don't know their distinction from hers
She stepped into the world
Like an alien unexpected
Her alias is Antebellum
And opening a forbidden box in her eyes is just another move another notion

Her name is nothing but something
People fear and bow down to
Because they don't know their values from hers
She stepped into the world
Like an alien unexpected
Her alias is Antebellum
And opening a forbidden box to her is just another move another notion.

Last edited by LunaSimone; 01/14/20 03:55 PM.

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Not my writing style but interesting.
Re the last line: as you're using metaphors why not just leave out "opening" or "forbidden" or just say "Pandora's box for her is just another move or motion"?
Of course I don't know the meter of this so it may not work.

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