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#1159120 - 12/02/19 08:28 AM
Soldiers Field now musicated. Travis and Vic
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Nice to collaborate with Travis again on this one. It's folky but not in any strict sense. Mostly Travis' lyrics, slightly adjusted and with a few of my own thrown in. Somewhat ambiguous in parts left to the imagination. Does it work? Vic https://soundcloud.com/vic-arnold/soldiers-fieldSoldiers Field © 2019 vaughan/arnold V: The sun is rising o'er the meadow as I walk the hallowed ground Trees have grown, casting shadows The lark sings a pleasing sound V: Much greener grass than I remember Pastures lush where wounds have healed Wildflowers grow in swathes of splendour But this for me is Soldiers Field C: If this soil one day reveals the misery that it conceals of a hundred years ago still the seed shall grow for the young men of all nations when to Soldiers Field they go Inst: V: I walk alone here night and day I stand beside you as you greave my soul can find no place to lay except upon this Soldiers Field C: Outro: I am that whisper on the breeze and the rustling of the leaves So here's to those who plant the seeds Here we lie on Soldiers Field
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#1159126 - 12/02/19 10:27 AM
Re: Soldiers Field now musicated. Travis and Vic
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I like it. The musical treatment has just the right tone for the subject. Love the guitar. One thing that did strike me was that the feeling of the chorus is kind of similar to the verse. I think it might add variation and be easier to get more of an emotional lift just by adding syllables to lines 1 and 3 (and possibly line 2 also). The example below is not necessarily the right wording, just showing what I mean about the extra syllables. If what I'm saying doesn't make sense when you try singing it, then it's obviously just me - it often is  If this soil one day reveals the sad secrets of the misery concealed (below the grass) From the blood that shed a hundred years ago A brighter flower will grow for the young men of all nations when to Soldiers Field they go Great collaboration.
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#1159141 - 12/02/19 01:56 PM
Re: Soldiers Field now musicated. Travis and Vic
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Thanks for the comments Gavin. Glad you like it. Yes, many folk songs don't tend to have choruses. This one is more to give a subtle change between verses. Have you tried singing what you have suggested? I dare you.  That is quite a mouthful to sing to that melody. My other thought was that the phrases "sad secrets" and "blood that shed" was already covered by "the misery concealed", which makes them redundant. Not convinced of "Brighter flower" being better than "seed" as seed includes the grass and trees that have grown. However I do appreciate that you are thinking of the song. Thanks again for the time spent. Vic
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#1159144 - 12/02/19 02:54 PM
Re: Soldiers Field now musicated. Travis and Vic
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Yes, Vic, I tried singing it and it seemed to work just fine for me. I tried it again now and it didn't work at all. I think it was because I was singing it from memory after listening , had jumbled up the melody in my head and accidentally come up with a different one of my own. Please consign my suggestion to the appropriate file in the corner  I wasn't suggesting you changed the words to the ones I posted. I just used them as a way to show how to arrive at the melody, which was, of course, the wrong melody! I'm going to shut up now. 
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#1159200 - 12/03/19 07:53 PM
Re: Soldiers Field now musicated. Travis and Vic
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If this soil one day reveals the misery that it conceals of a hundred years ago still the seed shall grow for the young men of all nations when to Soldiers Field they go I just find the word "If" to be a little confusing here... This soil always reveals the misery that’s concealed from a hundred years ago So seeds of wisdom grow for young men of all nations when to Soldier’s Field they go... 
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#1159213 - 12/04/19 05:37 AM
Re: Soldiers Field now musicated. Travis and Vic
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#1159275 - 12/04/19 08:16 PM
Re: Soldiers Field now musicated. Travis and Vic
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Hi Vic - not enough songs out there honouring the young men and women lost in war IMHO. This one is really good - you capture the mood perfectly in the vocals, lyrics and guitar . Or is that a mandolin? Not a nit to be found here in my book  Paul
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#1159290 - 12/05/19 08:17 AM
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Hi Japov Thanks for your suggestion, I think "always" doesn't work as well IMHO. "If" being ambiguous as it's a former battle field with its secrets and anomalies not to forget spirits! Cheers John
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#1159340 - 12/06/19 12:51 AM
Re: Soldiers Field now musicated. Travis and Vic
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Hey, Travis and Vic you too make one hell of a team in a good way, You produce hot tunes that move the listener to listen closely to your vocals and lyrics and to really get into your music. I have walked in many military cemeteries, fired 21 gun salutes to honor some of the fallen, sang amazing grace at some, just to the wail of the bagpipes. I was humbled and always will be by such hallowed ground. I might have been one of those beneath one of those Soldier's Fields, but someone else took my place, and though he remains unknown he is most dear to me for the life I have been able to lead. This song moved me to tears, which is righteous, and it speaks volumes to what you to have created. ~~Matt
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#1159357 - 12/06/19 11:04 AM
Re: Soldiers Field now musicated. Travis and Vic
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This has a classic Americana vibe. I think the contrasting sections are good enough the chorus kind of jumps out, its not a pop song. I can hear Springsteen doing this... in his older years...lol
I do think the second verse could be better, its not as good as the first verse lyrically.
I enjoyed my listen, sounds good, good vocals. Reminds a bit of knockin on heaven's door.
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