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#1158901 - 11/25/19 01:16 PM Human Kindness  
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This is a finished production of my song Human Kindness.
Vocals/Melody/piano - Jane Karwoski
Mike Zaneski - production

Thanks for taking the time to listen and comment.

https://soundcloud.com/user-296863402/human-kindness

Human Kindness

Verse

Goodness is a virtue
That hides inside a drawer
Sitting in my room
Something I ignore

Indifference lays beside me
When I go to sleep
I get up in the morning
It always follows me

Chorus

I need to try some human kindness
Got to give it all Iíve got
I owe it to myself
And everybody else
Oh human kindness

I need to try some human kindness
Have to give it all Iíve got

Verse

When tragedy strikes others
I hide in my cave
Crouching in the dark
Oh way be so afraid

Others need my help
When they are alone
I must stop wasting time
And leave the safety of my home

Chorus

I need to try some human kindness
Got to give it all Iíve got
I owe it to myself
And everybody else

I need to try some human kindness
Got to give it all Iíve got



Bridge

Was only yesterday I had to bite my tongue
Wasn't over something that I felt I done,
So I turned my heart around in a good way
Inner peace became the order of my day

Repeat Chorus

Lyrics
Copyright 2019

#1158902 - 11/25/19 03:22 PM Re: Human Kindness [Re: JaneK]  
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Nice one Jane! The guitar sounds a bit thready and I would give the overall mix a bit more room but, thatís just a matter of style... Well done! smile

#1158905 - 11/25/19 05:14 PM Re: Human Kindness [Re: JaneK]  
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Nice melody.
Good structure.
Good arrangement.
I especially like the chorus

Maybe too many words in the bridge...

Have fun!


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#1158911 - 11/26/19 12:29 AM Re: Human Kindness [Re: JaneK]  
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Hi Jane,
Nice to hear one of your very own. It was very kind to my ears. We all need a good bit of human kindness. I find the more I give the more I get. Great theme, thanks for sharing.

#1158913 - 11/26/19 04:54 AM Re: Human Kindness [Re: JaneK]  
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Hello Jane,


Catchy & beautifully done.


Calvin


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#1158925 - 11/26/19 09:24 AM Re: Human Kindness [Re: JaneK]  
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Morning Jane:

I listened and enjoyed the song... and it's message. You have exceptional vocal quality and Mike did a fine job on the production. Thanks for sharing.

----Dave

#1158937 - 11/26/19 07:35 PM Re: Human Kindness [Re: JaneK]  
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What a lovely performance JaneK and a warm sentiment in the writing.
And as always hats off to the maestro. Subtle fx made for quite a fun spin.

#1158978 - 11/27/19 12:12 PM Re: Human Kindness [Re: JaneK]  
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Thank you Tony, Calvin, John, Dave, and Nelson for listening and the nice comments you all made on the song.

Thank you Mike for taking my songs and producing them so they are listenable.

I wish you all a Happy Thanksgiving!

Jane

#1159032 - 11/29/19 11:35 PM Re: Human Kindness [Re: JaneK]  
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Jane,

Itís a really pretty tune . . . that chorus is an ear worm. Terrific job on the harmonies, Mr. Z. Jane, you should feel really good about this one. Compelling and impressive tune!

My best to you,

Deej

#1159039 - 11/30/19 02:33 AM Re: Human Kindness [Re: JaneK]  
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I always read the lyric before listening to a song and this one stood out making me eager to sit down and hear it.
Good vocal, production, in fact your best to date Jane.
Good luck with it
John


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#1159097 - 12/01/19 01:45 PM Re: Human Kindness [Re: JaneK]  
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Hi Deej and John,

Thanks so much for listening and the sweet comments - Mike did such a great job - I am very happy with the way it turned out.

Jane

#1159099 - 12/01/19 02:20 PM Re: Human Kindness [Re: JaneK]  
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Nice one Jane - especially liked how the chorus lifts just as it should!
Message is good too without being preachy smile
Vocals, harmonies, guitar, all done well.
And of course my fav was the piano!
No nits from me - good job guys smile
Paul

#1159186 - 12/03/19 01:34 PM Re: Human Kindness [Re: JaneK]  
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Hi Paul - Thanks for listening and the nice words. Coming from a fellow piano/keys player means a lot to me.

Jane

#1159533 - 12/11/19 05:58 PM Re: Human Kindness [Re: JaneK]  
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Hey I missed this one. Been doing some listening, i havent listened to much stuff here lately.

This has a Cyndi Lauper feel to it. Almost an 80's style hook(missing persons maybe even 90's... no doubt) in the chorus. One thing that I thought it could use was a pre chorus. It seems to jump into the chorus too fast, at least the first time around. The second time around it feels natural for some reason.

Nice vocal, love the bridge. Nice work!

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#1159542 - 12/11/19 11:04 PM Re: Human Kindness [Re: JaneK]  
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Hi Jane,
I think it all works well, I like the subject, and the song sounds full to me.
It might be the vocals, nice job! Lane


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#1159580 - 12/12/19 12:43 PM Re: Human Kindness [Re: JaneK]  
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Hi Fdemetrio,

Thanks for listening and your suggestion about the prechorus. I love 80's and 90's music.

Hi Lane,

Thank you for listening and glad you liked it.


Jane

#1159581 - 12/12/19 01:28 PM Re: Human Kindness [Re: JaneK]  
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Lovely song, Jane.

If I was nit picking about the music I would say the bass is too busy and distracting, more so at the beginning. Maybe more held notes could be better.
Apart from that? Great.

Vic.


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#1159628 - 12/13/19 11:36 PM Re: Human Kindness [Re: JaneK]  
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Hi Vic,

Thanks so much for listening and your comments. I don't mind the "nit picking". It helps me get better so I appreciate any advice you have.

Jane

#1159741 - 12/18/19 07:03 PM Re: Human Kindness [Re: JaneK]  
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Hi Jane,

Well done! I enjoyed the music, lyrics and arrangement--you can't go wrong with Mike's production. Mike, do you have reverb on the master post fader, or just individual tracks, or both? (less could feel warmer) I felt the music tracks "may" have a tad more reverb than needed for this music vibe--listening with semi-open cans. Doesn't at all mean that I'm right on that assessment however.

Beautiful work you two!

steady-eddie

#1159793 - 12/19/19 01:38 PM Re: Human Kindness [Re: JaneK]  
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Hi steady-eddie,

Thanks for the listen and nice comments. Glad you enjoyed my song. Didn't notice the reverb being a little much but I am not an expert on production right now, so I leave that to Mike.

Jane


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