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The first song I posted was something less than chipper. This one's a bit brighter. Comments welcome. And thanks for listening.

https://soundcloud.com/david-pulizzi/miss-sunshine-1

Miss Sunshine

I was tired and I was lonesome
I was strung out at the bar
I was looking for salvation
When you walked in through the door

Your smile was irresistible
Your body was obscene
The way you moved across the room
Was like a dirty dream

And I stared until I thought I might go blind
Hey, hey, Miss Sunshine

Later on that evening
Beneath the careless moon
I was feeling loose and wild and free
When I called up to your room

You opened up your window
I said I’ll have you understand
I’m just a small-town working boy
Who wants to be your man

And I won’t weep if you don’t treat me kind
Hey, hey, Miss Sunshine

You took me in completely
It felt so strange to me
Like anything was possible
Like it was meant to be

I brushed your hair, you read my palm
We turned on Patsy Cline
Every note she sang somehow rang
Sacred and divine

And the hours passed like a cool breeze drifting by
Hey, hey, Miss Sunshine

So there we were beside ourselves
With nowhere else to be
As I recall we did it all
Or so it seemed to me

I’ll tell you something plain and true
I’ve never felt like this
Every time I hear that whippoorwill
Your lips I want to kiss

’Cause they taste just like a rainbow dipped in wine
Hey, hey, Miss Sunshine

You gotta take a moment
You gotta take your time
You take what the good Lord gives you
And the rest you leave behind

I’m dazzled by your beauty
It’s all I’m thinking of
My heart is full of gladness
My pocket’s full of love

I see your light shine through the morning pines
Hey, hey, Miss Sunshine
Hey, hey, Miss Sunshine

©2019 David Pulizzi
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I really enjoyed this. A very infectious melody. It felt Irish to me. I'm not sure about whatever that instrument is that provides the little bursts of backing. I would probably ditch that for a harmonica or go full-on Irish and use a tin whistle. It's a great tune, David, a real toe-tapper, and fun lyrics.

Agreed, that accordion sound needs a little work, but overall great fun tune!

Hey Gavin, is it just me or does he sound a bit like Gary Andrews in this one?

He does a little, yes.

Hey David,

Welcome to JPF.....

That's one fantastic tune mate. You captured the whole spirit, and the delivery was spot on. A great Celtic tune done with style and passion.

cheers, niteshift

Superlative enunciation! I got the words, the story, 97% the first time through. The effectiveness of 'reporting back' to the title, THE Hook, ending each Verse ties it all together well. Dylanesque. I'd buy this! The Singer-Character is apparent. The Love-Interest Character is realistic. Rhythm, Rhyme, storyline, poetry. Splendid!
I'm carrying a link to my Facebook page to share with those who I think will enjoy it too.
Second listen. Third will have my complete attention.

Hi David:

Enjoyed my listen. I agree with Japov about the accordian... but that's "small change" when compared to the big picture. Great job... send more soon.

----Dave

Hi David,

Definitely I got a Dylan vibe with your vocal, though you sing a little more on pitch than he did--but Dylan was good at sliding in and out of pitch to create his style--I think he did it deliberately for effect. Hey, loved this uptempo tune--it really grabs you and it kept me riveted. I think partially because (especially we music folks) felt the "Dylanesque" vibe quickly, we may be anticipating a harmonica vs. an accordion. If keeping the accordion, I think it would sound better to set it back a little more in the mix slightly by adding some reverb and lowering volume by about 5 db. and maybe add a little compression to that track. You could also experiment with panning it about 30-40% one way or the other. This I think would "glue" it better to the mix. I like lead guitar solos (generally) more out front, but the accordion here is really giving "answers," and setting it back a bit should tone it down yet still give you the production effect & vibe that you are going for.

One other thought, (only if you feel the accordion is not the best sound for this song) might be to let the leslie organ play those "answers" which may also sound cool--food for thought. One thing for is for sure, you are a talented guy--love your performance and what a cool song musically & lyrically!

steady-eddie

Hi David,
I definitely get the Dylanesque. This is a happy little tune, well written. I also get the Jig feeling in it. A lot of fun to listen to.

Hi David
First I've heard your stuff - excellent!
I used to hate Dylan but the older I get the more I like his stuff - weird!
But you sing much more in tune than he ever did and you have your own unique celtic twist.
The accordian is a bit out of tune though - which kind of adds to the charm IDK.

Good work
Paul

Gavin, JAPOV, niteshift, Gary, Dave, E, John and Paul,

Thanks for all your comments. Yeah, the tune has an Irish feel. It's the only song of mine that does. The instrument that is not sitting well with most (or possibly all) of you is a melodica. I agree with E that it might be a little too forward in the mix and that a touch of reverb might be nice, as well. I really wasn't shooting for a Dylanesque sound, though I imagine I'd be much closer to exactly that if I played harp through the breaks. In that regard, I'm glad I didn't. When I wrote the song, I wasn't shooting for an Irish folk sound either. With the addition of the melodica, though, it turned out that way. Oh, well, I suppose I can live with one Irish-sounding tune in the repertoire.

Again, thank you all for listening and for the good words and advice. I've been away all weekend, so I plan on catching up with whatever I've missed tomorrow. Best to all. ... David

Damn it man this is beyond good.

While I do hear the Dylan thing, I feel it has the ruckus energy of a Billy Joel.

Lovely vocals

David,

Very Dylanesque . . . but a far better vocal than Bob could dare to dream. Love how you change out that first line of the chorus throughout (which by the way is a great hook). Clever and Springsteen-like lyrics (but also reminds me of the Jayhawks).

By the way . . . Welcome to JPF. It’s a pleasure to have you here. Keep the killer tunes coming our way--so impressed with what I've heard so far.

My best to you, sir . . .

Deej

Thank you, Nelson and Deej, for sending along your impressions. Well, by popular consensus, I guess I got the "Dylan thing." Personally, I don't hear it, but quite a few listeners here have mentioned it, so I suppose there must be some truth to it. No worries. It's certainly better than hearing I've got the "Paul Anka thing" or the "Justin Bieber thing." Seriously, thanks for listening and for the kind words.

I don't hear the Dylan thing either, David. And that's a compliment LOL.

David,

What some are hearing with your vocals is a similar "tonation" and vocal articulation that Dylan used--Dylan was "Dylan," a pioneer in a unique folk singing style with lyrics unlike anyone had heard before. Your voice is better both pitch and tonation however. Dylan is more famous due to both his lyrics and unique expressive vocal art form that he personified. I think Dylan more than likely learned when he originally probably sang "straight" that it wasn't very good, so he adopted a style that he stated that he borrowed that style from a singer he saw in Greenwich Village, NYC). I'm not a huge Dylan fan, but I do really like several of his songs--my two favs are "My Back Pages," also recorded by The Byrds, and I also really like "Don't Think Twice, its Allright."

I dig your style David!

steady-eddie

Eddie,

Ya know, I've been wondering for a quite a while why Dylan is more famous than me. Now I know. Thanks for the enlightenment. And I'm glad you dig my style, but clearly I need to change it. Wait till I post my next tune. It's going to be called "Mr. Tambourine Guy." It'll be sung by an unknown troubadour with a belligerent attitude and a croaky old voice, and I'm fairly certain it's going to be a monster hit.

Have a beautiful day, sir. ... David