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#1157645 - 10/11/19 09:38 AM Little Lies  
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A little song about Little Lies. Comments welcome.


https://90dbband.bandcamp.com/track/little-lies






Little Lies


Copyright 2019 Robert Randall Burke



The fine wines
The white lines
Tools of temptation
The long dark hallways
Of your imagination


All the little stories
All the little lies
I never saw them
In your eyes.


I was just
A pastime
Lamb to the slaughter
A plaything
A gold ring
For the devil's daughter.


All the little secrets
All the little lies
I never saw them
In your eyes.


I was just
A pastime
Lamb to the slaughter
A plaything
A gold ring
For the devil's daughter.


All the little secrets
All the little lies
I never saw them
In your eyes
I never saw them
In your eyes.

#1157657 - 10/11/19 02:28 PM Re: Little Lies [Re: 90 dB]  
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Enjoyed the song. Thought the lyric was stunning. Thanks for sharing.

----Dave

#1157664 - 10/11/19 06:34 PM Re: Little Lies [Re: 90 dB]  
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I like the lyrics but the music does nothing for me. It can be better musically.

#1157674 - 10/11/19 11:10 PM Re: Little Lies [Re: 90 dB]  
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Good word economy in the lyrics which are really good.
Lots to like here musically - solid vocals, guitar work, drums.
Perfect arrangement, length.
No nits from me and I've been known to pick them smile

Paul

#1157690 - 10/12/19 03:53 PM Re: Little Lies [Re: 90 dB]  
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This is a good song with lot's of verve in the mix. Very well done.

Your vocal delivery sounds a little like Peter Gabriel. Especially when you sing the line " in your eyes". I like it!

#1157733 - 10/13/19 04:45 PM Re: Little Lies [Re: Dave Rice]  
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Originally Posted by Dave Rice
Enjoyed the song. Thought the lyric was stunning. Thanks for sharing.

----Dave




Thanks for the listen, Dave. Loved your last one too.


Regards,


Bob

#1157734 - 10/13/19 04:47 PM Re: Little Lies [Re: CTthomas]  
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Originally Posted by CTthomas
I like the lyrics but the music does nothing for me. It can be better musically.



Sorry you didn't care for the music, but thanks for listening anyway.


Regards,

Bob

#1157735 - 10/13/19 04:50 PM Re: Little Lies [Re: PaulCanuck]  
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Originally Posted by PaulCanuck
Good word economy in the lyrics which are really good.
Lots to like here musically - solid vocals, guitar work, drums.
Perfect arrangement, length.
No nits from me and I've been known to pick them smile

Paul




Paul,

Thanks for the kind words. I'm a big fan of your stuff as well.


Regards,


Bob

#1157770 - 10/14/19 12:36 PM Re: Little Lies [Re: 90 dB]  
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Hi Bob,

You have a really strong song here. The verse melody has a classic George Harrison feel (circa "While My Guitar Gently Weeps") and is married perfectly to the lyric.

Because of the space between lines, in the last verse, as I was listening I was imagining a piano echoing the vocal melody 2 beats later, then realized you could use your lead vocal instead (with a digital delay), or sing the echo yourself, or use an instrument to do that, like the aforementioned piano. I only mention this cuz I was expecting some kind of addition there, like...for the arrangement to add another instrument or something, and so I was hearing it strongly in my head.

The only other thing I could imagine was harmonies above your vocals on the chorus.


Very beautiful song and I enjoyed it very much. smile


Mike


PS...whoops! I noticed upon re-listening your lead guitar is adding nice fills in the last verse..I guess then I was hearing those echoes in spite of the last verse being thickened..

Last edited by Michael Zaneski; 10/14/19 04:26 PM.

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Fortune depends on the tone of your voice

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#1157794 - 10/14/19 11:12 PM Re: Little Lies [Re: 90 dB]  
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Bob,

Like everything about this one. Engaging vocal—really accentuates the melody on the first two lines of the chorus—killer. Wonderfully done . . . man, that chorus is an ear worm. Cool stuff!

My humble regards,

Deej

#1157843 - 10/16/19 06:00 PM Re: Little Lies [Re: 90 dB]  
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I like the mood of this song.
I like the voice and the guitar.

I agree that it sounds like Harrison... and maybe Dire Strait...

Have fun!


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#1157952 - 10/20/19 10:03 AM Re: Little Lies [Re: JaneK]  
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Originally Posted by JaneK
This is a good song with lot's of verve in the mix. Very well done.

Your vocal delivery sounds a little like Peter Gabriel. Especially when you sing the line " in your eyes". I like it!



Jane,

Thanks for the listen and kind comments.


Regards,


Bob

#1157954 - 10/20/19 10:06 AM Re: Little Lies [Re: Michael Zaneski]  
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Originally Posted by Michael Zaneski
Hi Bob,

You have a really strong song here. The verse melody has a classic George Harrison feel (circa "While My Guitar Gently Weeps") and is married perfectly to the lyric.

Because of the space between lines, in the last verse, as I was listening I was imagining a piano echoing the vocal melody 2 beats later, then realized you could use your lead vocal instead (with a digital delay), or sing the echo yourself, or use an instrument to do that, like the aforementioned piano. I only mention this cuz I was expecting some kind of addition there, like...for the arrangement to add another instrument or something, and so I was hearing it strongly in my head.

The only other thing I could imagine was harmonies above your vocals on the chorus.


Very beautiful song and I enjoyed it very much. smile


Mike


PS...whoops! I noticed upon re-listening your lead guitar is adding nice fills in the last verse..I guess then I was hearing those echoes in spite of the last verse being thickened..




Mike,


Thanks for the listen and critique.


Regards,


Bob

#1157966 - 10/20/19 02:57 PM Re: Little Lies [Re: 90 dB]  
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Really good concise writing that is so descriptive. Good rhymes that sing so well.

I like: "The long dark hallways/Of your imagination."

The music has an ominous feel to it. Nicely done!

Kristi


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#1158016 - 10/21/19 02:35 PM Re: Little Lies [Re: Deej56]  
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Originally Posted by Deej56
Bob,

Like everything about this one. Engaging vocal—really accentuates the melody on the first two lines of the chorus—killer. Wonderfully done . . . man, that chorus is an ear worm. Cool stuff!

My humble regards,

Deej




DJ,


Thanks for the listen and kind remarks. Love what you've been doing lately as well.


Regards,


Bob

#1158017 - 10/21/19 02:37 PM Re: Little Lies [Re: Guy E. Trepanier]  
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Originally Posted by Guy E. Trepanier
I like the mood of this song.
I like the voice and the guitar.

I agree that it sounds like Harrison... and maybe Dire Strait...

Have fun!




Guy,


Appreciate you taking the time to listen.


Regards,


Bob

#1158018 - 10/21/19 02:39 PM Re: Little Lies [Re: Kristi McKeever]  
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Originally Posted by Kristi McKeever
Really good concise writing that is so descriptive. Good rhymes that sing so well.

I like: "The long dark hallways/Of your imagination."

The music has an ominous feel to it. Nicely done!

Kristi




Kristi,


Thanks for the kind comments. Appreciate it.


Regards,


Bob

#1158065 - 10/21/19 10:02 PM Re: Little Lies [Re: 90 dB]  
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Hey Bob!

Comments Welcome..........so here are some:

I like especially the verse melody--(and yes I immediately felt Beatles "My guitar gently weeps," although you're not exact on that melody--which is a good thing).

I might suggest that you boost the volume a bit with the guitar solo and "build" that area up a bit. You might also drop the chorus after the solo and go directly to the 3rd verse--I don't see this as a "chorus hook driven song," and that you will actually empower the last chorus by this delayed omission. Then on that last chorus, do not tag the last two lines, rather go back to vs and fade out slowly with this very cool verse music--as IMO this verse melody with the concise verbal delivery is the strength of your song. You will not add song time if you cut the chorus after the solo. Another option--is to possibly cut a couple measures from the intro, as this song's verse is raring to be launched and doesn't need a long intro IMO.

Now this is an optional alternative production arrangement--not saying it is better, just how I might interpret doing it and just sharing that idea with you. None of us would produce a song exactly the same, so don't think I'm not liking what you have, I do and wouldn't spend this much time here if I didn't! I'm certainly not saying my suggestions are necessarily better........use or lose.

A great write, and definitely strong potential here!

steady-eddie

#1158090 - 10/22/19 02:18 PM Re: Little Lies [Re: E Swartz]  
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Originally Posted by E Swartz
Hey Bob!

Comments Welcome..........so here are some:

I like especially the verse melody--(and yes I immediately felt Beatles "My guitar gently weeps," although you're not exact on that melody--which is a good thing).

I might suggest that you boost the volume a bit with the guitar solo and "build" that area up a bit. You might also drop the chorus after the solo and go directly to the 3rd verse--I don't see this as a "chorus hook driven song," and that you will actually empower the last chorus by this delayed omission. Then on that last chorus, do not tag the last two lines, rather go back to vs and fade out slowly with this very cool verse music--as IMO this verse melody with the concise verbal delivery is the strength of your song. You will not add song time if you cut the chorus after the solo. Another option--is to possibly cut a couple measures from the intro, as this song's verse is raring to be launched and doesn't need a long intro IMO.

Now this is an optional alternative production arrangement--not saying it is better, just how I might interpret doing it and just sharing that idea with you. None of us would produce a song exactly the same, so don't think I'm not liking what you have, I do and wouldn't spend this much time here if I didn't! I'm certainly not saying my suggestions are necessarily better........use or lose.

A great write, and definitely strong potential here!

steady-eddie




Eddie,


Thanks for the thoughts on production.


Regards,


Bob


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