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Mutlu
by Gary E. Andrews - 04/15/24 07:08 PM
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I have the rough recording ready to go and will post it in a day or two.
I like to "preach" to myself before I ever ask anyone to do the same.
Human Kindness
VERSE
Patience is a virtue
That hides inside a drawer
Sitting in my room
Something I ignore
Indifference lays beside me
While I try to sleep
Get up in the morning
It always follows me
CHORUS
I need to try some Human Kindness
Got to give it all I’ve got
I owe it to myself
And everybody else
Oh Human Kindness
I need to try some Human Kindness
Got to give it all I’ve got
VERSE
When tragedy strikes others
I hide in my cave
Crouching in the dark
Why be so afraid?
Others need my help
When they are all alone
I must stop wasting time
And leave the safety of my home
CHORUS
I need to try some Human Kindness
Got to give it all I’ve got
I owe it to myself
And everybody else
Oh Human Kindness
I need to try some Human Kindness
Got to give it all I’ve got
Bridge or Verse change up
Oh Human Kindness
Come on out
I know you there
Show the world
That you care
Words and Music
Copyright 2019
Jane Karwoski
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Hi Jane, I think this is very good. It made me think of "Easy To Be Hard" --but that song asks questions like "how can people be so heartless" and your lyric is more inward directed and brave that way and doubles as a beautifully writ self-affirmation and is really nothing like the Three Dog Night hit.. --and thanks for this. It was just what I needed to feel a little braver.  Mike
Last edited by Michael Zaneski; 10/07/19 05:22 PM.
Fate doesn't hang on a wrong or right choice
Fortune depends on the tone of your voice
-The Divine Comedy (Neil Hannon)
from the song "Songs of Love"
from the album "Casanova" (1996)
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Hi Mike,
Thanks for the nice things you said about the lyric - I work customer service (sometimes not so nice, some angry and some violent at times) so I have to remind myself constantly to be kind no matter what they say or do to me - not "just because" they are paying me to.
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What very very beautiful lyrics Jane.
And the sentiments are spot on for so many.
God Bless to all
Roy
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I like this. It has a great hook, and because it is inward-focused doesn't come across as preachy. The only thing I'd change is the first word. "Patience" really doesn't have much to do with the message. I would open with: ..or not if you don't agree Good work Paul
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Hi Roy
Glad you liked my lyrics. Thanks for the help on the bridge.
Hi Paul
That's a thought. - I am working on the bridge also so it's in the works. Glad you like it.
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