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#1154902 - 07/05/19 06:25 PM California  
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Comments welcome.


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California

©2015 Robert Randall Burke

Well, I went to California
Cause they said it never rained
Nearly drowned down in Laguna
When the mud slides came
All the pretty people
Scrambling for fame
But nobody knows your name.

And all the saints and sinners
Are gathered by the sea
To hear the newest prophet
Who looks a lot like me
The thing you've always wanted
Is the thing you'll never be
And nobody knows your name.

California
California
Some day soon
I'll be comin' home.

Well I went out in the desert
Just to see the stars
And I ended up in Bakersfield
Playin' in the bars
But they don't need no prophets
So I didn't get too far
Cause nobody knows my name.

Tom's Waitin' on the corner
Tryin' to bum a smoke
I offer him a Camel
He takes a righteous toke
He says this music business
Is nothing but a joke
And nobody knows your name.


California
California
Some day soon
I'll be comin' home
Some day soon
I'll be comin' home.







Regards,


Bob

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#1154907 - 07/05/19 06:50 PM Re: California [Re: 90 dB]  
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I like that style of chorus.
Good structure.
Well written.
Nice melody.

Have fun!


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#1154910 - 07/05/19 08:13 PM Re: California [Re: 90 dB]  
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Country Springsteen...If you want a better critique, generally the lyrics posted is a good idea....Too much reverb on the vocal. I would back off a bit...

Nice tune


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#1154917 - 07/06/19 09:20 AM Re: California [Re: 90 dB]  
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Nice vibe to this. "Country Springsteen" is not far off the mark smile

#1154918 - 07/06/19 09:35 AM Re: California [Re: 90 dB]  
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Dylanesque. Pretty.

#1154919 - 07/06/19 09:50 AM Re: California [Re: 90 dB]  
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Well,
I would say this song is ready for the Big Time. Excellent overall. The Singing Brakeman, Jimmy Rogers wrote a song Entitled: CALIIFORNIA BLUES recorded and made famous by none other than THE WONDERING BOY, Webb Pierce. It may be posted on youtube.

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#1154921 - 07/06/19 10:08 AM Re: California [Re: 90 dB]  
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I like it...

#1154930 - 07/06/19 12:26 PM Re: California [Re: 90 dB]  
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Very nice song.

The reverb only bothers me early on when it sounds "gated" and snaps off in the middle of a tail.

Mike


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#1154958 - 07/07/19 11:31 AM Re: California [Re: Guy E. Trepanier]  
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Originally Posted by Guy E. Trepanier
I like that style of chorus.
Good structure.
Well written.
Nice melody.

Have fun!





Guy,

Thanks for the listen and kind comment.


Regards,

Bob

#1154960 - 07/07/19 12:42 PM Re: California [Re: 90 dB]  
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"Ended up in Bakersfield", like that line. That's where I ended up! Nice tune and lyrics

#1154962 - 07/07/19 01:50 PM Re: California [Re: 90 dB]  
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Sounds good to me. Maybe give the vocal a little more presence
Lyrics are great.

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#1154964 - 07/07/19 03:31 PM Re: California [Re: 90 dB]  
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Well done, Bob:

Enjoyed my listen. Wouldn't you love to hear what "The Eagles" would do (would have done) with it? Yeah, or those other two guys mentioned above... LOL! Keep 'em coming.

#1155032 - 07/09/19 11:48 AM Re: California [Re: Steve Altonian]  
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Originally Posted by Steve Altonian
Country Springsteen...If you want a better critique, generally the lyrics posted is a good idea....Too much reverb on the vocal. I would back off a bit...

Nice tune



Steve,

Thanks for the listen.


Regards,

Bob

#1155143 - 07/11/19 03:17 PM Re: California [Re: Gavin Sinclair]  
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Originally Posted by Gavin Sinclair
Nice vibe to this. "Country Springsteen" is not far off the mark smile




Gavin,


I'm from South Jersey, and Springsteen is from North Jersey, but I guess I'll take that as a compliment. smile Thanks for the listen.


Regards,

Bob

#1155145 - 07/11/19 03:18 PM Re: California [Re: Martin Lide]  
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Originally Posted by Martin Lide
Dylanesque. Pretty.



Martin,

Thanks for the listen and kind words.


Regards,


Bob

#1155419 - 07/19/19 11:52 AM Re: California [Re: Ray E. Strode]  
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Originally Posted by Ray E. Strode
Well,
I would say this song is ready for the Big Time. Excellent overall. The Singing Brakeman, Jimmy Rogers wrote a song Entitled: CALIIFORNIA BLUES recorded and made famous by none other than THE WONDERING BOY, Webb Pierce. It may be posted on youtube.




Ray,

Thanks for the listen and kind words.

Regards,,


Bob

#1155420 - 07/19/19 12:46 PM Re: California [Re: Neil Cotton]  
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Originally Posted by Neil Cotton
I like it...



Neil,


Thanks for the listen.


Regards,


Bob

#1155504 - 07/23/19 10:53 AM Re: California [Re: Michael Zaneski]  
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Originally Posted by Michael Zaneski
Very nice song.

The reverb only bothers me early on when it sounds "gated" and snaps off in the middle of a tail.

Mike




Mike,


Thanks for the listen.


Regards,


Bob

#1155505 - 07/23/19 10:55 AM Re: California [Re: JaneK]  
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Originally Posted by JaneK
"Ended up in Bakersfield", like that line. That's where I ended up! Nice tune and lyrics




Jane,


Thanks for the spin. Appreciate it.


Regards,


Bob

#1155517 - 07/24/19 03:30 AM Re: California [Re: 90 dB]  
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#1155576 - 07/29/19 12:16 AM Re: California [Re: 90 dB]  
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Hi Bob

What can I say about this great song...

It was a real pleasure for me to listen to, and reading the lyrics was a joy. Although your diction is so spot on anyways.

I'm having another listen..

God Bless Roy


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#1155628 - 08/01/19 10:27 PM Re: California [Re: 90 dB]  
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Really love the vocal. I enjoyed the laid back style of it. Just an easy going tune that sucks you in. Very 70 singer songwriter vibe. Almost thought I was going to hear a cover of Going to California from Zep when I opened the thread. smile Reverb didn't bother me. I enjoyed it.

Dave

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Robert,

First off, that vocal right off is just so engaging. I was going back and forth at first on whether the reverb should be dialed back, but the more I listened the more I think you have it just right. And the write is just terrific—married well to a Springsteen like feel. Just beautifully done. Enjoyed this a ton!

My humble regards,

Deej

#1155857 - 08/14/19 10:47 AM Re: California [Re: 90 dB]  
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Calvin,


Thanks for the listen.


Regards,


Bob

#1155858 - 08/14/19 10:49 AM Re: California [Re: Roy Cooper]  
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Originally Posted by Roy Cooper
Hi Bob

What can I say about this great song...

It was a real pleasure for me to listen to, and reading the lyrics was a joy. Although your diction is so spot on anyways.

I'm having another listen..

God Bless Roy




Roy,

Thanks for the listen and kind words.


Regards,



Bob

#1155860 - 08/14/19 11:04 AM Re: California [Re: 90 dB]  
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Man, I feel like I just got to hear a lost Warren Zevon piece, both writing-wise and performance-wise. Great tune and great presentation.

On the mix, listen to how spare and unaffected the acoustic guitar sounds, then hear the vocals come in—the guitar is extra dry, and the vocal is extra wet. I would dial back the vocal reverb, ideally on the "Mix" dial of the reverb plugin, just reduce its presence by half or so. And then I would also add a touch of reverb to the super-dry guitar, to get them both sounding in the same room.

Great stuff! A really solid standalone song.

#1155872 - 08/14/19 09:39 PM Re: California [Re: 90 dB]  
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Bob I really like the song. You have a real good voice.
I was kind of hoping there would be a bridge to explain where home was.
Never the less I would be very proud if I wrote this song.
Tom

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Originally Posted by GocartMoz
Really love the vocal. I enjoyed the laid back style of it. Just an easy going tune that sucks you in. Very 70 singer songwriter vibe. Almost thought I was going to hear a cover of Going to California from Zep when I opened the thread. smile Reverb didn't bother me. I enjoyed it.

Dave




Dave,


Thanks for the listen and kind comments.


Regards,


Bob

#1156039 - 08/24/19 10:30 AM Re: California [Re: Deej56]  
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Originally Posted by Deej56
Robert,

First off, that vocal right off is just so engaging. I was going back and forth at first on whether the reverb should be dialed back, but the more I listened the more I think you have it just right. And the write is just terrific—married well to a Springsteen like feel. Just beautifully done. Enjoyed this a ton!

My humble regards,

Deej



Deej,

Thanks for the listen. Appreciate it.


Regards,

Bob

#1156149 - 08/29/19 07:14 AM Re: California [Re: 90 dB]  
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I enjoyed this. I think you've gotten some good feedback on the production re: the verb. You have a nice voice. Like Tom, I was wondering where home was and I think a bridge might serve to break this up a bit and solidify the narrative.

Just a thought.


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Originally Posted by Mark Kaufman
Man, I feel like I just got to hear a lost Warren Zevon piece, both writing-wise and performance-wise. Great tune and great presentation.

On the mix, listen to how spare and unaffected the acoustic guitar sounds, then hear the vocals come in—the guitar is extra dry, and the vocal is extra wet. I would dial back the vocal reverb, ideally on the "Mix" dial of the reverb plugin, just reduce its presence by half or so. And then I would also add a touch of reverb to the super-dry guitar, to get them both sounding in the same room.

Great stuff! A really solid standalone song.





Mark,


Would have answered sooner, but we had a little hurricane to deal with. Thanks for the kind words and suggestions. I attribute the reverb to mixing fatigue- after a thousand listens everything seems to blend together. That's my story, and I'm sticking to it! smile


Regards,


Bob

#1156380 - 09/10/19 11:10 PM Re: California [Re: 90 dB]  
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Bob,

A really nice listen, loved this melody. I liked the arrangement too, but agree with Mike, you could tweak the reverb a bit. I always like to feel I hear the reverb when I solo the lead vox, but then when hearing the song with all the tracks it "almost" disappears. There are exceptions with certain garage rock songs where heavy reverb is part of the general effect wanted. When the reverb is a bit too much, the song sounds more like a live recording which can be cool if that is what you desire.........but with this sweet ballad, I think backing off a bit will keep the vox a little more in front and warmer--JMO.

I absolutely loved this song, and nice job singing it too Bob!

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#1156452 - 09/14/19 05:46 PM Re: California [Re: Tom Franz]  
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Originally Posted by Tom Franz
Bob I really like the song. You have a real good voice.
I was kind of hoping there would be a bridge to explain where home was.
Never the less I would be very proud if I wrote this song.
Tom




Tom,


Thanks for the listen and kind comments.


Regards,


Bob

#1156453 - 09/14/19 05:52 PM Re: California [Re: Wendy D]  
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Originally Posted by Wendy D
I enjoyed this. I think you've gotten some good feedback on the production re: the verb. You have a nice voice. Like Tom, I was wondering where home was and I think a bridge might serve to break this up a bit and solidify the narrative.

Just a thought.




Wendy,

I don't believe every song needs a bridge, but that's just my opinion. I also think the 'narrative' is solid as it is, but once again, JMO. smile


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Bob

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#1156456 - 09/15/19 12:48 AM Re: California [Re: 90 dB]  
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Good song, many positive comments here to back that up! Best of luck with ut
Travis


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#1156558 - 09/18/19 07:39 PM Re: California [Re: E Swartz]  
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Originally Posted by E Swartz
Bob,

A really nice listen, loved this melody. I liked the arrangement too, but agree with Mike, you could tweak the reverb a bit. I always like to feel I hear the reverb when I solo the lead vox, but then when hearing the song with all the tracks it "almost" disappears. There are exceptions with certain garage rock songs where heavy reverb is part of the general effect wanted. When the reverb is a bit too much, the song sounds more like a live recording which can be cool if that is what you desire.........but with this sweet ballad, I think backing off a bit will keep the vox a little more in front and warmer--JMO.

I absolutely loved this song, and nice job singing it too Bob!

steady-eddie





Eddie,

Thanks for the comment re/ reverb. Reverb is very subjective, and I'm no expert tweaker. smile Appreciate the listen and thoughtful comments.


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Bob

#1156559 - 09/18/19 07:40 PM Re: California [Re: Travis david]  
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Originally Posted by Travis david
Good song, many positive comments here to back that up! Best of luck with ut
Travis




Travis,


Thanks for the listen and kind comments.


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Bob

#1156702 - 09/20/19 08:58 PM Re: California [Re: 90 dB]  
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This might sound odd, but this would have fit right in on some of Warren Zevon's albums. I'm a big Zevon fan so I mean that as a compliment. smile

Scott

#1156818 - 09/23/19 10:03 AM Re: California [Re: Scott Campbell]  
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Originally Posted by Scott Campbell
This might sound odd, but this would have fit right in on some of Warren Zevon's albums. I'm a big Zevon fan so I mean that as a compliment. smile

Scott




Scott,

Thanks for the listen and kind comments.


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Bob


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