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#1155561 - 07/26/19 05:29 PM Chasing Gold  
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https://soundcloud.com/user-296863402/chasing-gold-final-mix-mp3/s-Bnw9d


Music and Lyrics by Jane Karwoski 2019
Vocals by Jane Karwoski and Mike Zaneski
Production: Mike Zaneski

This is my first song taken to production with Mike Z. I am very happy the way it turned it.
Have a listen if you'd like to.

Chasing Gold

V1

Freedom
Comes with a curious price
We toil away
We give up our lives

Jealous Anger
For others who win
We’re always striving
But the odds are slim

Chorus

There’s more to life than Chasing Gold
So tired of being bought and sold
The same old grind is getting old
There’s more to life than Chasing Gold

V2

Success
We work all the time
To get to the top
We’re always behind

Security
It’s never enough
We save and save
To have it taken away

Chorus

There’s more to life than Chasing Gold
So tired of being bought and sold
The same old grind is getting old
There’s more to life than Chasing Gold

Bridge

We put in our time - we pay our dues
Ready to live without feeling used
But at the end of the show
Where did the happiness go?


There’s more to life than Chasing Gold
Tired of being bought and sold
The same old grind is getting old
There’s more to life than Chasing Gold





Lyrics:
Jane Karwoski
2019


Last edited by JaneK; 07/26/19 05:35 PM.
#1155562 - 07/26/19 08:58 PM Re: Chasing Gold [Re: JaneK]  
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Very pretty. smile

#1155563 - 07/26/19 11:04 PM Re: Chasing Gold [Re: JaneK]  
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Jane, great, great song. Very nice. I would pitch this as a cue for movies or tv.

My only suggestion would be to say just what more there is in the bridge rather than use the space to continue complaining (for want of a better word) like the vss do. Each section of a lyric has a function almost like a living thing. What you often see on the internet is a blurring or fading of those functions.

The lines wouldn't need to be complicated, just a simple, relatable couplet.

It's very good. I can see why you're happy with it. smile


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#1155566 - 07/27/19 12:10 PM Re: Chasing Gold [Re: JaneK]  
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Thank you Martin.

Thank you couchgrouch. The verse is probably not even a bridge - just another verse.

Thank you both for listening.

Jane

#1155568 - 07/27/19 07:29 PM Re: Chasing Gold [Re: JaneK]  
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I love this song Jane and both you and Mike did a great job.

The chorus for me is stunning...

God Bless Roy


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#1155570 - 07/27/19 08:27 PM Re: Chasing Gold [Re: JaneK]  
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Hi Roy,

Thanks - Glad you liked it.

Jane

#1155572 - 07/28/19 05:49 PM Re: Chasing Gold [Re: JaneK]  
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Very good song.
Nice melody.
Well written.
Good structure.

In the chorus, I especially like the way you sing the last line.
You might use the same pattern for the first 3 lines that are played fast...

Have fun!


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#1155579 - 07/29/19 11:37 AM Re: Chasing Gold [Re: JaneK]  
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Hi Guy,

Thank you very much for listening and your nice words. I am having fun!!!

Jane

#1155594 - 07/31/19 08:07 AM Re: Chasing Gold [Re: JaneK]  
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The recording came out really good and you did a good job on the VOX. Maybe one day I’ll learn how to get a tune under 3 minutes. Heck, maybe even 4 minutes....

I like the story of it. Yes we just Chase Gold and most of our finances go toward housing. I’m a gonna stop there, cause then I’ll be complaining too.

There is more to life.....


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#1155598 - 07/31/19 01:15 PM Re: Chasing Gold [Re: JaneK]  
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Hi Steve,

Thanks for the listen. Yes, if we spend too much time complaining will miss out on the good things in life!

Jane

#1155602 - 07/31/19 02:13 PM Re: Chasing Gold [Re: JaneK]  
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Martin, Rob, Roy, Guy, and Steve..

Thanks for listening and I'm very happy you enjoyed it smile

The production choices flowed like magic, for me, as I really connected strongly to her words and how she delivered them.

I hear so many of my music heroes in Jane's work, and yet she feels completely original to me. That's exciting!

I'm very happy and grateful to be a part of that..

Thanks, Jane, for the opportunity(s).. smile

Mike

Last edited by Michael Zaneski; 07/31/19 02:13 PM.

Fate doesn't hang on a wrong or right choice
Fortune depends on the tone of your voice

-The Divine Comedy (Neil Hannon)
from the song "Songs of Love"
from the album "Casanova" (1996)
#1155605 - 07/31/19 02:28 PM Re: Chasing Gold [Re: JaneK]  
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Nice song, Jane!

I love the feel—it's like Sade verses with a Joni Mitchell chorus—a great retro atmosphere that really works. And the message is delivered simply. cleverly and poignantly. Best of all, the message matters—not just another expression of personal feelings, but a very universal message delivered personally. That's what we strive for!

Man, this Zaneski guy gets around! Beautiful clear production as always...playing his Soundtoys like a BOSS. grin

Really great songwriting, Jane. smile

#1155608 - 07/31/19 04:34 PM Re: Chasing Gold [Re: Mark Kaufman]  
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Hi Mark,

Thank you for the compliments - Sade and Joni Mitchell - Wow I am floored.

It is great working with Mike.

Jane

#1155616 - 08/01/19 01:47 PM Re: Chasing Gold [Re: JaneK]  
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Like it Jane & Mike! Kind of a Joni Mitchell sound. I agree with Mark. Nice job guys!

Best, John smile

#1155617 - 08/01/19 02:50 PM Re: Chasing Gold [Re: JaneK]  
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Thanks John!

I've got to check Joni Mitchell out. Would you believe I don't own any of her records but I do like her. Oh, where have I been!

Jane

#1155625 - 08/01/19 10:12 PM Re: Chasing Gold [Re: JaneK]  
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Wow ... I really love the vocal. Great lyric and fantastic production. So much ear candy in the production ... reverb, delays. But it is Jane's vocal that really brings the song home. I loved it.

Dave

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Jane,

First off, I’ve admired your vocals on your postings so far, though those productions never quite showcased them in the way I think they deserve. Well, on this your vocal just shines . . . the way it should. And the write is terrific . . . love the chorus on this one. And Mike does his usual great job as producer stringing everything together. Just a well done tune. Feel good about this one—it’s special . . . and I think just the start. I'll look forward to hearing more.

My kindest regards,

Deej

#1155651 - 08/02/19 11:56 AM Re: Chasing Gold [Re: Deej56]  
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Thank you so much GocartMoz and Deej,

Wow. I really appreciate all the wonderful comments. I owe it all to Mike for producing my music they way it should be and to you all here at JPfolks for giving me the encouragement to continue writing.


Jane

#1155677 - 08/03/19 01:43 PM Re: Chasing Gold [Re: JaneK]  
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Thanks Mark, John, and Dave's B & L..

I hear bits of Peter Gabriel, Kate Bush, Tori Amos, and more rockin' women like Joan Osborne and the Wilson sisters (Heart)..

But ultimately, for me, her writer's voice --i e her style and "the things she chooses to say" seems completely her own. smile

Thanks for the listening and I'm very happy knowing you enjoyed it. smile

Mike

Last edited by Michael Zaneski; 08/03/19 04:03 PM.

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Fortune depends on the tone of your voice

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#1155815 - 08/11/19 07:28 AM Re: Chasing Gold [Re: JaneK]  
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Excellent production and vocals and a damn good song too!
Best of luck with it Jane & Mike
Regards
John


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#1155819 - 08/11/19 01:13 PM Re: Chasing Gold [Re: JaneK]  
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Hi John,

Wow. Thank you so much for the listen and the nice words. I owe it all to Mike for the fantastic work he did on my song.

Jane

#1156084 - 08/26/19 08:06 PM Re: Chasing Gold [Re: JaneK]  
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Good choice going with Mike. love the subject and the lyrics and the story they tell. the music works in a stellar way with all that you did and you provided the crem and mike provided the Brule..well done and I wish you both well on it. It should do well.

#1156087 - 08/27/19 03:26 AM Re: Chasing Gold [Re: JaneK]  
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Yep, fantastic lyrics/vox/production, great job! I have to agree with Guy though.... I would like to hear Jane reach a little higher for "there’s more to life" and sing the chorus at half speed. Still a home run though smile

#1156125 - 08/28/19 12:49 PM Re: Chasing Gold [Re: JaneK]  
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Thanks Matthew and Tony for having a listen and your comments. I really appreciate it.

#1156133 - 08/28/19 04:11 PM Re: Chasing Gold [Re: JaneK]  
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Hello Jane,


An enjoyable tune,
I thought this part was cool........


But at the end of the show
Where did the happiness go?


Calvin


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#1156148 - 08/29/19 07:04 AM Re: Chasing Gold [Re: JaneK]  
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Wow. This was good. I find the lyric and structure to this pretty interesting. I recently wrote a lyric where I deliberately left out some rhymes (there could have been some obvious ones). The first thing my partner says is "that doesn't rhyme." I'm kind of a slave to form/rhymes, etc. and I probably would have tried to build more support lyric wise for the "gold" metaphor. But I'm glad you did not do this. I think that makes it fresh and the music really wraps around to support it. Also, I love your voice.


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Hi Calvin,

Glad you enjoyed the song and thank you for the nice words.

Hi Wendy,

Thank you very much for the kind words and comments.


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