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#1155439 - 07/20/19 07:09 AM Look At the Love We're In  
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This song was originally written and demoed about 10 years ago. It was put on hold three times (Kenny Rogers, Randy Travis and Charlie Pride), but never quite made their albums, so I decided it was time for a rewrite. This is the finished product complete with spanish guitar, fiddle and steel, and I couldn't be happier with it.

https://frettie.com/track_detail/2580

Thanks for listening!

Marvin

#1155471 - 07/21/19 07:42 PM Re: Look At the Love We're In [Re: Marvin Adcock]  
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Fantastic write as usual Marvin! smile Gotta' be honest though, I think the Spanish guitar is cluttering the intro a bit...

#1155484 - 07/22/19 11:25 AM Re: Look At the Love We're In [Re: Marvin Adcock]  
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The "through the years" line is practically a nod to Kenny R.

Bad decision, IMHO, him not recording this lovely song. smile

Mike


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#1155487 - 07/22/19 12:13 PM Re: Look At the Love We're In [Re: Marvin Adcock]  
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Perfection.



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Bob

#1155491 - 07/22/19 01:08 PM Re: Look At the Love We're In [Re: Marvin Adcock]  
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if this gets a pass, there is no hope for the rest of us.

#1155493 - 07/22/19 04:09 PM Re: Look At the Love We're In [Re: Marvin Adcock]  
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That's a great title Line, THE Hook, with Hook Factor in both word-meaning and Melody. A totally original take to my mind. I never heard anybody say, "Look at the love we're in." I like it. I 'get' it the first time I hear it.

It is a bit derivative in Melodic style, but in the country market that's not a deal-killer, rather a preference in the industry consumer, judging by the 'trends' that seem to get cut and released, based on the judgment of Leadership Decision-Makers' up the line, from artist to management to label, publisher, producer.

So what IS wrong? I suspect there's some weakness in the Lyric, possibly Lines that don't add much in Lyrical meaning, taking up space and delaying getting back to the 'Punch Line' a second time.
Or Lines where the voice drops off in a way that implies what's being said by the Singer-Character, sung by the singer, isn't important.
The Bridge may fail in its function, giving a variation of Melody, cadence, brief, leading logically Lyrically back to a final giving of the Chorus.
Maybe the Lyrical story needs closure, a Third Verse with a satisfying ending to the story of the Singer-Character and the Love-Interest Character. She's in there too. I'm goin' back to listen again.

I wonder if seeing/reading the Lyric might reveal some of that. I could be totally wrong. I was once before.

That's a nice short one too. Radio would love it, leaving more time for the commercials that pay the bills.

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#1155499 - 07/23/19 05:25 AM Re: Look At the Love We're In [Re: Marvin Adcock]  
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Thanks everyone for listening and commenting, much appreciated!

Best,
Marvin

#1155515 - 07/23/19 07:52 PM Re: Look At the Love We're In [Re: Marvin Adcock]  
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F C S: First Class Song

Have fun!


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#1155516 - 07/24/19 03:23 AM Re: Look At the Love We're In [Re: Marvin Adcock]  
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Hello Marvin,


Quality work !


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#1155526 - 07/24/19 05:28 PM Re: Look At the Love We're In [Re: Marvin Adcock]  
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Well, Nice write. Melody easily recognizable


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#1155534 - 07/25/19 05:21 AM Re: Look At the Love We're In [Re: Marvin Adcock]  
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Thanks for listening Guy, Calvin and Steve. I appreciate your thoughts!

Best,
Marvin

#1156040 - 08/24/19 11:08 AM Re: Look At the Love We're In [Re: Marvin Adcock]  
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This one deserves another listen.


Regards,


Bob
Originally Posted by Marvin Adcock
This song was originally written and demoed about 10 years ago. It was put on hold three times (Kenny Rogers, Randy Travis and Charlie Pride), but never quite made their albums, so I decided it was time for a rewrite. This is the finished product complete with spanish guitar, fiddle and steel, and I couldn't be happier with it.

https://frettie.com/track_detail/2580

Thanks for listening!

Marvin





This one deserves another listen.


Regards,


Bob

#1156049 - 08/25/19 06:37 AM Re: Look At the Love We're In [Re: Marvin Adcock]  
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Thanks Bob!

#1156060 - 08/25/19 02:15 PM Re: Look At the Love We're In [Re: Marvin Adcock]  
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Excellent song. It has that pop country feel from the 90's

Sometimes its just a matter of whether or not the artist is in the same frame of mind as the song.

#1156075 - 08/26/19 02:38 PM Re: Look At the Love We're In [Re: Marvin Adcock]  
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What a fantastic hook, both lyrically and melodically! That's half the battle, right there smile Not that the rest isn't top notch too. This is not my kind of music, but I still found it really catchy and sing-along, especially that hook. Great demo performance.

I'm not sure that the Spanish guitar adds anything.

#1156089 - 08/27/19 05:13 AM Re: Look At the Love We're In [Re: Marvin Adcock]  
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Thanks Fdemetrio and Gavin for listening and commenting. I appreciate it!

Marvin

#1156091 - 08/27/19 10:36 AM Re: Look At the Love We're In [Re: Marvin Adcock]  
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Marvin, I see you're a member of Brent Baxter's Frettie organization. Can you tell us anything about it?
I'd still like to see this Lyric for analysis. It does a lot right. What's it doing wrong that it hasn't gotten traction? An idea for a tweak might turn the tables and get it to market.


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