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#1155157 - 07/12/19 06:21 AM One Word  
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I'm just going to keep posting till you all love me! smile

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no other word can come first
no lie or misperception
like the miracle of birth
the truth canít change direction
many words never matter
nothing new under the sun
just wailing in the clatter
till the end foretold to come

one word from the beginning
one word a gift so divine
one word spoke of creation
one word spoke the end of time
and itís time, time, timeÖ.. itís time

committed by principle
a duty to maintain course
no option to surrender
speaking victory foreword
driven by understanding
that silence is for cowards
the battle is deafening
a relentless war of words

itís the word worth waiting for
the word understood too late
itís the word that became flesh
the word that reveals our fate

desperate for words to believe
to add solace to the fray
to quiet the confusion
and conclude a darkened day
but peace has been forsaken
and logic has led astray
trade silence for compassion
when thereís nothing left to say

one word from the beginning
one word a gift so divine
one word spoke of creation
one word spoke the end of time
and itís time, time, timeÖ.. itís time

#1155199 - 07/12/19 09:24 PM Re: One Word [Re: JAPOV]  
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Hi Tony:

Well written and well performed. The genre is not in my "wheel-house" so I'm probably the last person you need to provide a review. The recording was excellent and, as I've said before, you have a really good vocal quality.

Best of luck with your music. ----Dave

#1155211 - 07/13/19 12:52 PM Re: One Word [Re: JAPOV]  
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Thanks Dave. I guess Iím just going to have to bite the bullet and keep on recording myself lol... smile

#1155339 - 07/17/19 12:01 PM Re: One Word [Re: JAPOV]  
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Like the tune, smoking track...Not gonna tell you what''s right, because there is a ton which is rockin'....But I have 2 things that STICK OUT that I would suggest

You are doing the TITLE an Injustice with no Harmony on your TITLE. Your voice get's drowned out and the TITLE is barely audible...

You need that High harmony ONE WORD...This should give your HOOK sparkle & sizzle....Oh and you need a female harmony...Preferably a sista'....Or at least that or a Christina Aguilera type sound. A BIG VOICE. This will give your CHORUS an anthem-like sound....

Also, changing the 2nd CHORUS to "It's the Word" versus "ONE WORD" & it's continuity and repetiotion is a slight misfire IMO...Keep your CHORUS the same. It get's confusing to listeners and when the CHORUS rolls around you want them yelling "ONE WORD"...This way they can't wait till you come back to the part where they can sing "ONE WORD"....

At least this is what I hear.....


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#1155340 - 07/17/19 12:09 PM Re: One Word [Re: JAPOV]  
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Raw and edgy with stellar lyrics that set the mind to pondering all of your rocking thoughts. Sound advice and what a sound it has. Nicely done.

#1155347 - 07/17/19 02:19 PM Re: One Word [Re: Steve Altonian]  
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Damn Good one buddy!
I agree about keeping the chorus the same.

#1155355 - 07/17/19 04:22 PM Re: One Word [Re: JAPOV]  
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"You need that High harmony ONE WORD...This should give your HOOK sparkle & sizzle....Oh and you need a female harmony...Preferably a sista'....Or at least that or a Christina Aguilera type sound. A BIG VOICE. This will give your CHORUS an anthem-like sound...."

ABSOLUTELY WHOLE HEARTEDLY AGREE!!!! Been looking for a singer for years lol smile Thanks guys!

#1155369 - 07/17/19 10:51 PM Re: One Word [Re: JAPOV]  
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The music and lyric are a nice match.

Your lyrics invite rereading, with lines that remind me both of protest and prog-rock. Abstract but with enough bite to create visuals in my head.

Enjoying your work.. smile

Mike


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Fortune depends on the tone of your voice

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from the album "Casanova" (1996)
#1155375 - 07/18/19 06:02 AM Re: One Word [Re: JAPOV]  
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"Your lyrics invite rereading......"

Thatís truly a complement! I miss vinyl records.... the sleeves, the fold outs, the artwork, the LYRICS! It would take me hours to fully absorb a new album when I was a kid smile

#1155446 - 07/20/19 09:10 AM Re: One Word [Re: JAPOV]  
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Tight composition, enjoyed it.

For fun I suggest that you consider writing rap metered lyrics to this music. Might sound good too.

#1155470 - 07/21/19 07:34 PM Re: One Word [Re: JAPOV]  
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lol... Yea, Iíve got rhythm! smile

#1156339 - 09/07/19 05:18 PM Re: One Word [Re: JAPOV]  
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Still messing around with sound ya'll..... Hereís a re-mix! All feedback welcome and, thanks in advance! smile

https://www.soundclick.com/html5/v4/player.cfm?songID=13919000

#1156349 - 09/08/19 10:36 PM Re: One Word [Re: JAPOV]  
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Japov,

I like the newer re-mix as the vocals are sitting on top which is needed with the edgy vibe. Profound lyrics aren't digested until one has listened and learned the song a bit for sure, which is normal and a good thing--but they add as what Mike said, "a desire to go back and better understand their more specific meaning."

One thought on your guitar solo at bridge ending..........maybe try panning that lead guitar riff to the right? Maybe keep 20%L. I know performing live it may not be panned, but for the recording I think that movement would give it a more pronounced and significant identity--JMO.

Great work here!

steady-eddie

#1156351 - 09/08/19 11:56 PM Re: One Word [Re: JAPOV]  
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Thanks Eddie! I actually considered using a ping-pong delay on the solo but it got a little muddled... So I decided to keep it raw and, as you said, easy to reproduce. I'm a very plug-n-play kinda' guy smile

#1156429 - 09/13/19 01:19 PM Re: One Word [Re: JAPOV]  
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Hi Japov
Really good lyric was my first thought then I had a listen and that was good too.. Best of luck with it
Joh


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