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Mutlu
by Gary E. Andrews - 04/15/24 07:08 PM
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Its been a while away for me, but here I am! This is a song I wrote for my wife. Any comments are greatly appreciated. Thank you! http://sclk.co/r/s89wwzV1 Oh darlin, I will always be true, Cause I love you, my whole heart through My life would have no meaning, without you Oh darlin I will always be true. Chorus I used to pray in my room each night So the Lord would know my plight. Then came the day, He answered my prayers And you walked into my life. V2 So darlin, if you are ever blue, I'll try to be, the sunshine for you, For when I see you sad, my heart breaks in 2 I'll try to be the sunshine for you. Chorus So darlin, I hope you'll always be, By my side growing old with me, Without your hand in mine, I'm lost you see Oh darlin won't you grow old with me!
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Organ on this as glue would be really good. Sax too. Only “pet peeve” is you call this “Oh Darling”....you switch up to so and then to Oh many times which is fine. I just wouldn’t (if it were mine) name it one or the other. I would just name it Darlin’....
Nice feel
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Nice sentiments Todd and the song works well for me.
My only thoughts would be and this is only my opinion which could be worthless...
Lyrically I thought the Chorus made a better verse1 and verse 1 a better Chorus... The order of events make more sense to me then...
Sorry If my thoughts are not for you...
God Bless Roy
V1 I used to pray in my room each night So the Lord would know my plight. Then came the day, He answered my prayers And you walked into my life.
Chorus Oh darlin, I will always be true, Cause I love you, my whole heart through My life would have no meaning, without you Oh darlin I will always be true.
V2 So darlin, if you are ever blue, I'll try to be, the sunshine for you, For when I see you sad, my heart breaks in 2 I'll try to be the sunshine for you.
Chorus Oh darlin, I will always be true, Cause I love you, my whole heart through My life would have no meaning, without you Oh darlin I will always be true.
So darlin, I hope you'll always be, By my side growing old with me, Without your hand in mine, I'm lost you see Oh darlin won't you grow old with me!
Chorus Oh darlin, I will always be true, Cause I love you, my whole heart through My life would have no meaning, without you Oh darlin I will always be true.
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Hi Todd Great to see you posting again! Lovely sentiments, i could well imagine this as a Doo wop song. Definately not a Doh! Wop. It fits into that retro 50s early 60s style well. All the Best John
Last edited by Travis david; 07/17/19 04:09 AM.
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