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#1155136 - 07/11/19 12:30 PM Oh Darlin  
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Its been a while away for me, but here I am! This is a song I wrote for my wife. Any comments are greatly appreciated. Thank you!

http://sclk.co/r/s89wwz

V1
Oh darlin, I will always be true,
Cause I love you, my whole heart through
My life would have no meaning, without you
Oh darlin I will always be true.

Chorus
I used to pray in my room each night
So the Lord would know my plight.
Then came the day, He answered my prayers
And you walked into my life.

V2
So darlin, if you are ever blue,
I'll try to be, the sunshine for you,
For when I see you sad, my heart breaks in 2
I'll try to be the sunshine for you.

Chorus

So darlin, I hope you'll always be,
By my side growing old with me,
Without your hand in mine, I'm lost you see
Oh darlin won't you grow old with me!


Everything we have has come from you, and we
give you only what you have already given us!

1 Chronicles 29:14


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#1155142 - 07/11/19 03:08 PM Re: Oh Darlin [Re: Todd Strachan]  
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Originally Posted by Todd Strachan
Its been a while away for me, but here I am! This is a song I wrote for my wife. Any comments are greatly appreciated. Thank you!

http://sclk.co/r/s89wwz

V1
Oh darlin, I will always be true,
Cause I love you, my whole heart through
My life would have no meaning, without you
Oh darlin I will always be true.

Chorus
I used to pray in my room each night
So the Lord would know my plight.
Then came the day, He answered my prayers
And you walked into my life.

V2
So darlin, if you are ever blue,
I'll try to be, the sunshine for you,
For when I see you sad, my heart breaks in 2
I'll try to be the sunshine for you.

Chorus

So darlin, I hope you'll always be,
By my side growing old with me,
Without your hand in mine, I'm lost you see
Oh darlin won't you grow old with me!



Hi Todd,

This is really sweet, and if it didn't have a retro late 50s feel I'd wince at the true/blue rhymes, but they work for me in this context.

The band is a little on the loose side, but it all hangs together.

There's an appealing sincerity in your voice as well, that makes me overlook the imperfections in the vocals--kinda like Jonathan Richman like that, and that's a good thing.

I'm sure your wife will be thrilled, cuz it's got genuine feeling in it, and that's what counts. smile

Mike


Last edited by Michael Zaneski; 07/11/19 03:21 PM.

Fate doesn't hang on a wrong or right choice
Fortune depends on the tone of your voice

-The Divine Comedy (Neil Hannon)
from the song "Songs of Love"
from the album "Casanova" (1996)
#1155196 - 07/12/19 03:11 PM Re: Oh Darlin [Re: Michael Zaneski]  
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Thank you Mike I appreciate your insights! The band appreciates them as well, as I am the bass player, drummer, guitarist, and vocalist as well! I am lacking in all areas, and when I fix one thing, I flub somewhere else.

I haven't been recording in a long time, and this surprised me, because it turned out ok for me. And my wife liked it so I am happy with it! And I now realize I posted it in the wrong spot! Thanks again for the listen and comments!

Todd


Everything we have has come from you, and we
give you only what you have already given us!

1 Chronicles 29:14


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