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Video of Acoustic/Vocal/BGV's to see where the tune is at.....Full band recording has begun with my usual studio guys in Nashville...Genre will be Country.

First love, last love
© 2019 Steve Altonian

Moonlight dances upon your hair
Your eyes light up the sky
You slip your hand inside of mine
You hold me tight and smile a little smile

I feel your heart beating underneath my skin
I kiss your tender lips and whisper in your ear

First love, last love
Sharing dreams and memories
First love, last love
Sometimes baby, love is meant to be

I’ve come to call you my best friend
You’re a candle to my soul
A yellow rose in the desert snow
I have grown from the seeds you’ve sown

Girl you know me a bit better than myself
You gently show me exactly who I am

First love, last love
Sharing dreams and memories
First love, last love
Sometimes baby, love is meant to be

BRIDGE
Still can taste that first kiss
It gets sweeter and sweeter all the time
You’re my favorite song
My love keeps burning strong…….for you

First love, last love
Sharing dreams and memories
First love, last love
Sometimes baby, love is meant to be
Sometimes baby, love is meant to be...

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Welcome to JPF, Steve:

When it comes to "Love Songs" I believe you've cornered the market. For a "worktape"... this is a gem. Can't wait to hear the final production... but it works well exactly as you recorded it here. Nice vocal... I might add!

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I think you put this across really well, Steve. It's going to be good. Simple, sincere and with a really great hook. Looking forward to hearing the finished version.

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Sounding good, great voice! smile
To me the intro sounds more like a lament than a love song but, as you said, that's subject to change.

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Originally Posted by Dave Rice
Welcome to JPF, Steve:

When it comes to "Love Songs" I believe you've cornered the market. For a "worktape"... this is a gem. Can't wait to hear the final production... but it works well exactly as you recorded it here. Nice vocal... I might add!

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Yeah, a few people have said it was a good track. My intention was a total throwaway track. Others have liked this track alot, go figure....Since you listened I added BGV's and someone has convinced me to add another guitar. We shall see how that goes tonight.


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It's a nice song and very personal and personable.

It has some abstract metaphors that provide visuals but it might could use a couple of more concrete visuals to put the listener into the scene with the people being sung about.

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NIce melody.
Good structure.

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Hi Steve. "First love, last love" is a fine fitting title for the lyric.
Pretty good song too.

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Originally Posted by Gavin Sinclair
I think you put this across really well, Steve. It's going to be good. Simple, sincere and with a really great hook. Looking forward to hearing the finished version.


Thanks for listening and commenting....This was intended to be a throw away track,..I recorded the acoustic with my 4th best guitar that I never play, a $199 dollar guitar. Go figure

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Hi Steve,

I like the slow-ish tempo and could hear power ballad type brushed drums in the mix. Lots of room in between sung notes for your studio guys to work some magic with appropriate fills and such.

Good song.

Nice to meet you!

Mike

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Originally Posted by Gavin Sinclair
I think you put this across really well, Steve. It's going to be good. Simple, sincere and with a really great hook. Looking forward to hearing the finished version.


Yeah I am a firm believer in the Hook/Chorus driving a tune. I appreciate your comment about the hook. It all starts with the Chorus for me. If I can get one I really believe in and love singing, the rest of the song takes on a life of its own. I am a firm believer in writing from the Chorus

Thanks for listening


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really awesome! great storytelling technique that's really good inspiration for folk revival enthusiasts who write about love like me wink


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Originally Posted by Vicarn
Hi Steve. "First love, last love" is a fine fitting title for the lyric.
Pretty good song too.

Vic


Thanks Vic...The song was inspired & started out totally different as in the singer didn't end up with either my first love or last love....It was on the bummer side and didn't want to add another 'love lost" song to my catalog...So I scrapped that idea and strapped on my boots got "in character" & rewrote the whole tune...

Originally Posted by Michael Zaneski
Hi Steve,

I like the slow-ish tempo and could hear power ballad type brushed drums in the mix. Lots of room in between sung notes for your studio guys to work some magic with appropriate fills and such.

Good song.

Nice to meet you!

Mike


Hi Mike,

That is the direction " Power Ballad" we are going for with this...Studio guys are cutting the Rythym track today.


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Hi Steve,

I really like this song. It has a very memorable chorus hook. You must be excited about taking it to the studio.

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Originally Posted by LunaSimone
really awesome! great storytelling technique that's really good inspiration for folk revival enthusiasts who write about love like me wink


Hi Luna,

Thanks for the good word. I went a different direction on this as at first it was about First & Last loves both not lasting....The original line was "Sometimes baby, Love AIN'T meant to be"...It was too personal so I decided to go universal....

My first drafts were pretty pathetic....


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Hi Steve. I will join the fan club. Yep, I like what you have done. I also will be waiting to hear the final.

By the way, looking at you picture on the wall and your PC screen, I take it you are a sea lover.

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Great sentiments a nice easy feel to it,great when love lasts sadly not for us all.
Good song Steve,well worth developing more.
I think the lyric is sound and well thought through
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Originally Posted by Martin Lide
It's a nice song and very personal and personable.

It has some abstract metaphors that provide visuals but it might could use a couple of more concrete visuals to put the listener into the scene with the people being sung about.

Martin


You know I was going to be specific and bring up like how they met and it just seemed too predictable...For whatever reason I chose to leave it open to interpretation. I guess we all know not many will experience First Love, Last Love...So this opens it up to others to play with it and relate more...Calculated risk but felt right for this particular tune to leave it with metaphors and open to interpretation

Originally Posted by Michael Zaneski
Hi Steve,

I like the slow-ish tempo and could hear power ballad type brushed drums in the mix. Lots of room in between sung notes for your studio guys to work some magic with appropriate fills and such.

Good song.

Nice to meet you!

Mike


The song will change for sure, but my guys have always taken the tune up a couple notches...Yes, Producer is going Power Ballad, Country of course

Originally Posted by JaneK
Hi Steve,

I really like this song. It has a very memorable chorus hook. You must be excited about taking it to the studio.

Jane



Yeah, the memorable CHORUS & HOOK is what I'm counting on to carry this tune....Thanks for the input


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Hi Steve,


Quality work, nicely done.


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Originally Posted by Roy Cooper
Hi Steve. I will join the fan club. Yep, I like what you have done. I also will be waiting to hear the final.

By the way, looking at you picture on the wall and your PC screen, I take it you are a sea lover.

God Bless Roy


Thanks for listening and joining the fan club. It’s good to have members who are not from the Phillipines (tons on my Facebook)....LOL

Originally Posted by Travis david
Great sentiments a nice easy feel to it,great when love lasts sadly not for us all.
Good song Steve,well worth developing more.
I think the lyric is sound and well thought through
Regards
Travis


Thanks Travis. Yeah gonna invest a little cash into cutting this one


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