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Mutlu
by Gary E. Andrews - 04/15/24 07:08 PM
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This was a small write I did for a friend that lost her Father..its not much, no bridge and not a ton of difference in verse, to chorus. but its a start. Lots of mistakes in this, but thats ok for now....lol I always like to put a little noise on with the lyric always thought it helped judge the lyric, but thats just me. all thoughts are welcome, https://soundcloud.com/user-745253707/down-to-meDown to Me 1 You have always been forever always been My friend I looked beside Me where You always stand in a blink of My eyes you were gone... 2 I will rest right here till I see You Remember You with a smile. I`ll see your face, with each seasons change and know Your not really gone. chorus Please say You are always forever, ..I need to hear that again.. I looked beside Me, and Your not there,.. " in that blink of My eyes you were gone.. 3 You know it has come down to Me now, I need to tell You again that its this heart that fights a cold wind till I see You once more. chorus Please say You are always forever, ..I need to hear that again.. I looked beside Me, and Your not there,.. in that blink of My eyes you were gone.. tag: Please say "We are always forever... I need to hear that again... © Copyright 2017 Vincent.
Last edited by lane1777; 04/13/19 06:53 PM.
"Blessed are the words of truth and fiction, one might save you from the other...Vincent
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Good to see you here Vincent,
I think the raw emotion is there. These are hard things to write about but can become great writes.
I'll watch as this progresses
Geneva
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that's a great idea to throw a little music on a lyric.Sometimes a lyric can't stand as strong without music or at least send a listener in the direction you hear it.I enjoyed the song,Lane,really heartfelt. Mike
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Lane,
An excellent start to what I'm sure will be a compelling song . . . love the lyrics and am impressed with you demo. You've got some nice vocals going on there . . . you and this song are very reminiscent of Willie Nelson . . . at least that's what I was hearing when I listened to this and read the lyrics. And that's pretty awesome. Will look forward to hearing more. Great work!
All the best,
Deej
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Hi Lane A poignant lyric just a suggestion ;
Please say You are always forever, ..I need to FEEL that again..
OR HOW I MISS MY BEST FRIEND CheersLane Travis
We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars. Oscar Wilde
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