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Mutlu
by Gary E. Andrews - 04/15/24 07:08 PM
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I finished this last night. I won't go into details as I think the lyrics are clear enough. Very basic recording with me playing guitars and keys. All vocals are me, old school, no vocal processors or harmonizers. http://www.badbetsy.com/new_original/s/thats_what_dads_doThat’s What Dad’s Do Words / Music: J. Taylor © 2019 Bad Betsy Publishing A.S.C.A.P. Verse 1I held you in my arms Right before your Momma did. I knew that you were special I did everything to keep you from harm. ChorusI’LL BE THERE FOR YOU WHEN YOU’RE SAD OR FEELING BLUE THROUGH THE YEARS AS YOU GREW AND GREW I WAS THERE. CAUSE THAT WHAT DADS DO Verse 2Many times I stood in the dark As you wandered through your life I chimed in when you asked me to Held back tears when you gave up being a wife Repeat Chorus
BridgeIf I could take away all your pain Bring you sun when it’s pouring rain Give you hope and fight your fears Hold you close and dry your tears Key Change : Repeat Chorus
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nice...out of the 60s...works for me. ala Mamas & Papas
Last edited by Neil Cotton; 02/12/19 02:37 PM.
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Iggy,
I couldn't find the song through your link? I was looking "That's what Dad's do?"
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Says "Error: Page not found".
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Come on Iggy, Vic & I want to know what "Dad's do" besides making babies!
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Awww! Sweet sentiment. Just one observation: I thought that there may be a drag coming out of the bridge. Like the chorus should come in sooner.
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Iggy,,
It surely is a sweet song, love the harmonies too. I didn't feel any "drag" as Vic did after the bridge and liked that transition back to the chorus.
However, though I liked your lyric concept, I think you can improve upon the lyrics a bit as far as "verse" rhyme structure keeping more consistent. I think you could maybe use the word embark in that 2nd verse to rhyme with dark. I also think you might lose the 2nd chorus rhyme (blue- a bit trite anyway), and insert a non rhyme story line--just let the three lines rhyme which is enough IMO. Of course it's fine as is, and sugs are JMO--use or lose.
I always enjoy your performance and music Iggy--nice write!
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Neil wow the Mamas and Papas. I love their harmonies. Vic, thanks for the listen and the suggestion. Eddie you're right on with your suggestions. It was a quick song to my daughter so I didn't pay too much attention to proper song structure. If I was going to play it live or send it out to publishers, I most certainly would polish it up using your suggestions. Funny about song writing. I submitted a song to a well known song guru for an evaluation. He said I should never start a verse on the same chord I ended the chorus. There should always be a transition. I reminded him of several Beatle songs that do just that. He replied "you ain't no Beatle".
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Wow. Musically, I just love this. I liked how you built around the initial guitar riff. The key change there at the end was magical. Thanks for this. I have had a crap week and it's nice to be reminded that love can be unconditional.
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I read Neil's post before I listened - and I heard Mamas & Papas too. Could be the power of suggestion - but the description fits.
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Wendy: Thanks for the listen and the comments. The word love is tossed around so much these days without people realizing it's true meaning. Thanks for understanding unconditional love.
Summeoyo: Thanks for the comments. I see you're in Harrisburg so stop into one of our gigs. We play all over the place.
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Good song fine lyric how about posting them at the top of your link? Good comments here well deserved. As a dad fine sentiments Iggy Travis
Last edited by Travis david; 02/25/19 03:27 PM.
We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars. Oscar Wilde
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Very beautiful song here. Brought back memories of the Conway Twitty hit "That's My Job" which had pretty much the same theme. Good luck.
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Hi Travis, Thanks for listening and commenting. Lyrics have now been posted. Thanks.
Beech....Thanks. I'll check out that Conway Twitty song.
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Hey Iggy. Have you ever played at the Open Mic at Tellus360? I perform mostly at venues in the Harrisburg area but I've been know to drop in on an Open Mic out of my area.
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Hey Summeoyo: I rarely take part in open mics. The band keeps me busy and when we're not playing we practice, usually twice a week. One is a full band practice,the other is a vocal only practice. Usually we go to open mics when we lose a lead singer.
If you decide to to go to Tellus, let me know and I'll try to see ya. We've taken a few weeks off from gigs to learn a few more songs. Our next gig is in York the first week of April.
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Iggy,
Nice sound right out of the gate, and the vocal engages the ear right off. I really like the harmonies in the chorus, and the additional instrumentation in that second chorus, which adds a nice layer of depth . . . and that flute (I think), sweet. The bridge is killer, lyrically and musically.
If I had a nit, it’s the last chorus . . . I’m not sure, but it just doesn’t hit my ear as pleasantly as the first two—almost as if the harmonies are either a bit off or a bit dark—where I would as a listener, given the subject matter of the song, really want it to be a bit brighter. and “feel good." I’m not sure I’m describing my thought in a way that makes sense, but either way, as they say, use or lose—just offering up what I hope might be helpful feedback.
Regardless, this is a solid effort, with a sweet sentiment, and I enjoyed listening to it. There’s a lot of talent behind this.
My best regards,
Deej
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Thanks DJ. I appreciate the listen and the detailed feedback. I Didn’t use any auto tune or vocal processors so I could be off in the last verse especially as the pitch changed. I’ll listen a few more times. I like your thoughts on making it being brighter and “feel good”. I’ll have to think more on how to make that happen. Again thanks.
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