Who's Online Now
25 registered members (Calvin, Greg C. Brown, Everett Adams, couchgrouch, Dave Rice, Fdemetrio, 9ne, 7 invisible), and 465 guests, and
Key: Admin, Global Mod, Mod
Shout Box
Member Spotlight
Doug Barnett
Doug Barnett
Glendale, AZ, USA
Posts: 473
Joined: September 2004
Show All Member Profiles 
What's Going On
FEISTY MAIDENS,TAVERN ALE
by Greg C. Brown. 03/21/19 05:59 PM
Wordsworth's Breath
by Greg C. Brown. 03/21/19 05:51 PM
Playing Lead
by Fdemetrio. 03/21/19 03:26 PM
PONDER THIS
by Fdemetrio. 03/21/19 10:28 AM
Buy Tapentadol ( Nucyta ) Online
by swetmed. 03/21/19 08:47 AM
The Clock
by Gerry. 03/21/19 06:26 AM
Ex pro vocalist looking for band.
by prosinger22. 03/21/19 02:06 AM
The Immigrants Came
by Neil Cotton. 03/20/19 11:10 PM
PAPAxBLESS looking for feedback
by summeoyo. 03/20/19 08:41 PM
Rocked to the Bone
by Travis david. 03/20/19 07:07 PM
The Strangest Song You Ever Wrote
by Andy K. 03/20/19 06:41 PM
song a week/we never ruled the world.
by Kolstad. 03/20/19 06:20 PM
NEW WEB SITE
by Ray E. Strode. 03/20/19 02:55 PM
Radio interview tonight. Vic
by Vicarn. 03/20/19 02:26 PM
PAPAxBLESS looking for Feedback
by Fdemetrio. 03/20/19 12:13 PM
Charging for images
by Froilan. 03/19/19 07:37 PM
Dick Dale/Hal Blaine RIP
by Perry Neal Crawford. 03/19/19 02:56 PM
If I live through high school
by Fdemetrio. 03/19/19 02:54 PM
I've Got the Moon (Deej & Travis)
by Travis david. 03/19/19 02:49 PM
PINKSTYLE?????
by Vicarn. 03/19/19 01:15 PM
The Time and Place
by Neil Cotton. 03/19/19 09:14 AM
Mother Nature’s Circle (Neil Cotton)
by Neil Cotton. 03/18/19 08:48 PM
Music & Alzheimers...
by Everett Adams. 03/18/19 05:59 AM
MAN OF THE HOUR
by Dave Rice. 03/17/19 01:55 PM
A Patient Man
by Martin Lide. 03/17/19 10:22 AM
Little Black Book of Scars
by Neil Cotton. 03/17/19 12:18 AM
Our little town. Travis & Vic
by Vicarn. 03/16/19 02:54 PM
Mother Nature's Circle
by Neil Cotton. 03/16/19 02:27 PM
Goodbye Mr. Sun
by ckiphen. 03/16/19 10:37 AM
Top Posters(All Time)
Calvin 19,709
Travis david 11,326
Kevin Emmrich 10,543
Jean Bullock 10,330
Kaley Willow 10,240
Two Singers 9,572
Joice Marie 9,186
Mackie H. 8,843
glynda 8,589
Mike Dunbar 8,574
Tricia Baker 8,318
Colin Ward 7,903
couchgrouch 7,465
Corey 7,357
Dave Rice 7,124
Wyman Lloyd 6,578
Mark Kaufman 6,448
Joe Wrabek 6,403
ben willis 6,097
Vicarn 6,017
Lynn Orloff 5,788
Louis 5,725
Linda Sings 5,604
niteshift 5,460
KimberlyinNC 5,210
Derek Hines 4,893
Neil Cotton 4,683
DonnaMarilyn 4,632
Blake Hill 4,528
Bob Cushing 4,356
Bill Osofsky 4,199
Tom Shea 4,179
Cindy Miller 4,178
TamsNumber4 4,032
Roy Cooper 4,017
nightengale 3,965
Caroline 3,865
Kolstad 3,792
Dan Sullivan 3,710
MFB III 3,687
beechnut79 3,492
Dottie 3,427
joewatt 3,411
E Swartz 3,298
Bill Cooper 3,279
John Hoffman 3,199
Skip Johnson 3,027
Pam Hurley 3,007
Terry G 3,005
PopTodd 2,890
Harriet Ames 2,870
Nigel Quin 2,812
MidniteBob 2,707
Nelson 2,570
Tom Tracy 2,558
Polly Hager 2,526
Jerry Jakala 2,524
Al Alvarez 2,499
Eric Thome 2,448
Hummingbird 2,401
Stan Loh 2,263
Sam Wilson 2,241
Judy Hollier 2,232
Wendy D 2,203
Erica Ellis 2,202
TrumanCoyote 2,096
Marty Helly 2,012
DukeWill 1,984
floyd jane 1,982
maccharles 1,920
Clint Anglin 1,904
cindyrella 1,888
David Wright 1,866
Clairejeanne 1,851
Cindy LaRosa 1,824
Ronald Boyt 1,675
Iggy 1,644
Noel Downs 1,620
Rick Heenan 1,596
Cal 1,574
Jack Swain 1,554
Pete Larsen 1,537
Ann Tygart 1,529
Tom Breshers 1,487
RogerS 1,461
Tom Franz 1,453
Chuck Crowe 1,441
Ralph Blight 1,440
Kenneth Cade 1,429
Rick Norton 1,428
bholt 1,411
Letha Allen 1,406
in2piano 1,404
Stan Simons 1,402
GocartMoz 1,396
mattbanx 1,384
Jen Shaner 1,373
Charlie Wong 1,347
Martin Lide 1,327
KevinP 1,324
Vondelle 1,316
Tom W. 1,313
Jan Petter 1,301
scottandrew 1,292
DakLander 1,265
Ian Ferrin 1,230
PeteG 1,229
Glen King 1,212
IdeaGuy 1,209
AaronAuthier 1,177
Diane Ewing 1,158
Gerry 1,127
summeoyo 1,099
joro 1,081
BobbyJoe 1,075
S.DEE 1,040
lane1777 1,038
yann 1,037
Tony A 1,016
Fdemetrio 992
argo 986
peaden 984
Wolvman 960
IronKnee 947
Jak Kelly 912
Deej56 908
krtinberg 890
Drifter 886
Petra 883
9ne 873
RJC 845
Brenda152 840
Nadia 827
Juan 797
TKO 784
frahmes 781
teletwang 762
90 dB 757
Andy K 740
tbryson 737
Andy Kemp 733
ant 732
Jackie444 731
3daveyO3 704
Dayson 703
Dixie 701
Joy Boy 695
Knute 686
Lee Arten 678
Katziis 652
R.T.MOORE 638
quality 637
CG King 622
douglas 621
Irwin 615
Mel 614
NaomiSue 601
Pat Hardy 599
Shandy 589
Ria 587
TAMERA64 583
qbaum 570
Moosesong 566
nitepiano 566
pRISCILLA 556
Tink2 553
musica 539
deanbell 528
RobertK 527
BonzaiWag 523
Roderic 522
BB Wilbur 511
goodfolks 499
R&M 487
Zeek 487
Stu 486
Steve P. 481
KathyW 462
allenb 459
MaxG 458
Philjo 454
fanito 448
trush48 448
dmk 442
arealrush 437
DGR 436
avweek 435
Stephen D 433
Emmy 431
Rob L 426
marquez 422
kit 419
Softkrome 417
kyrksongs 415
RRon 408
Laura G. 407
VNORTH 407
Debra 407
eb 406
cuebald 399
EdPerrone 399
Dannyk1 395
Hobart 395
Davyboy49 393
Smile 389
GJShades 387
Ezt 384
tone 380
Marla 380
Cecilee 379
iggyiggy 378
coalminer 377
java 374
spidey 371
sweetsong 370
Register Today!
Welcome to the Just Plain Folks forums! You are currently viewing our forums as a Guest which gives you limited access to most of our discussions and to other features.

By joining our free community you will have access to post and respond to topics, communicate privately with our users (PM), respond to polls, upload content, and access many other features. Registration is fast, simple, and absolutely free; so please join our community today!
Previous Thread
Next Thread
Print Thread
Rate This Thread
#1149980 - 01/11/19 10:37 PM Word Choice  
Joined: Dec 2005
Posts: 566
Moosesong Offline
Top 500 Poster
Moosesong  Offline
Top 500 Poster

Joined: Dec 2005
Posts: 566
Vacaville, CA, USA
Word choice is very important. As a lyricist, you must always strive to choose the best possible words.

"down the road" is ok but the reader is likely to picture a boring straight road.
'Freeway" or "highway' suggests something fun and easy
"up the long rocky or dusty road" suggests a hard struggle
'the long winding road' suggests a non-boring future with surprises and twists or a past filled with unique memories
' the dark narrow steep icy road' suggests fear and danger


"Look" "watch" and "see" are similar words with different meanings
You may look at something for a while
You may watch something for quite a while
To "see" is to actually get some meaning , knowledge, information, or understanding. You can even 'see' the truth when exposed to things that were non-visual, things you hear, feel, or put logically together in your mind. To write good lyrics, you must always consider word choice.

**

He wonders why he thought of that lecture from a high school creative writing class. A lecture and class he had not thought about in decades. Why would he think about it now in the TV department of a large retail chain store?


He looks at TV's in the store and sees the model he likes
He looks for a clerk and sees the clerk signal him that she will be over after helping her current customer
He watches the TV he has picked out to pass the time
He sees it is showing the migrant caravan
He sees that the vast majority of them are walking
He sees map showing they have walked over a thousand miles already
He sees in his mind, the math 1 pace = 5 feet = 2 steps 1 mile= 5000 feet 1 mile = 2000 steps 1000 miles = 2 milllion steps.
He sees their faces some of hope some of pain some of worry, some of determination. They have been walking for over 10 weeks and their faces reflect the ordeal they have been through.
He sees the bags they carry hold everything they own in the entire world
He sees those bags would not hold everything he bought for Christmas last year, perhaps not even the crushed boxes and wrapping after Christmas
He sees mothers carrying their toddlers as they walk
He sees some are limping
He looks for a remote to change the channel but does not find one
He looks for buttons on the TV set itself to change the channel but there are none
He looks at other TV's and see they do not have buttons either. Did even his old TV have buttons he just never used?
He looks at the shoppers in the check out line. They have been in line for over 10 minutes and their faces reflect the ordeal they have been through.
He looks outside and sees the cars in the parking going up one aisle and down the other, searching, seeking, looking for an ultimate empty spot that is even closer than the empty space they just went past.
He sees news anchors speaking to their audience of people that have sat on couches and used remotes for so long that TV makers do not even bother with buttons on the TV sets any more, many that look upon the migrants that have walked over 2 million steps as 'lazy'

He sees the subtitle on the migrant news story has the word "invasion" in it. He thinks "Transfusion" would be a better word choice.


David Hunkins
Music page
www.soundclick.com/bands/pagemusic.cfm?bandid=707030

I'm a 99 percent inspiration man living in a 99 percent perspiration world..
#1149990 - 01/12/19 11:10 AM Re: Word Choice [Re: Moosesong]  
Joined: Apr 2002
Posts: 873
9ne Online content
Top 500 Poster
9ne  Online Content
Top 500 Poster

Joined: Apr 2002
Posts: 873
N.E. of Toronto
Good read!


http://www.soundclick.com/bands/pagemusic.cfm?bandID=170948

I think what makes satan so attractive to others is
that he tastes like chocolate...
....and he played real drums
#1150047 - 01/15/19 12:50 PM Re: Word Choice [Re: Moosesong]  
Joined: Nov 2016
Posts: 166
Perry Neal Crawford Offline
Serious Contributor
Perry Neal Crawford  Offline
Serious Contributor

Joined: Nov 2016
Posts: 166
California
I too believe in the power of word choices as a storywriter and story teller (spoken word). As a lyricist I write as though the words are all there is. There will be a melody/music/percussion ect, but they exist (in my mind) as the serving dish for the words, a spice, not a main course. I cannot enjoy music well done, but with crappy lyrics, without yelling at the radio and changing the channel.

#1150144 - 01/18/19 02:50 PM Re: Word Choice [Re: Moosesong]  
Joined: Dec 2005
Posts: 566
Moosesong Offline
Top 500 Poster
Moosesong  Offline
Top 500 Poster

Joined: Dec 2005
Posts: 566
Vacaville, CA, USA
Thank you 9ne and Perry for reading and commenting.

I strive to make my lyrics as good as possible. But I find most of my favorite songs are due to the melody and only really bad lyriics can ruin a song for me.

What I really love is when the lyrics fit the tune like a well made suit. That is awesome. A couple of days ago I went to an Elton John concert with my wife and kids. So many of his songs are wonderful in both lyrics and melody. The one that really stood out for me was "Bennie and the Jets" The pounding of the piano keys with the amplificastion from the concert stage, were sent out in waves to splash and pound on my face and chest really brought to life the line 'Solid walls of sound"

After the concert we stopped at a bar where we analysed the word drink as follows.
I was driving and had zero dtrinks pooh
Every one else had 1 drink
then 2 drinks
then 3 or more drinkypoos.


David Hunkins
Music page
www.soundclick.com/bands/pagemusic.cfm?bandid=707030

I'm a 99 percent inspiration man living in a 99 percent perspiration world..

Support Just Plain Folks

We would like to keep the membership in Just Plain Folks FREE! Your donation helps support the many programs we offer including Road Trips and the Music Awards.


Membership
Join Just Plain Folks
to receive the free
JPNotes Newsletter!
*this is separate from
message board registration*

Newest Members
swetmed, StalloneLee, prosinger22, Lostgirllyrics, PAPAxBLESS
21169 Registered Users
Forum Statistics
Forums116
Topics118,772
Posts1,119,691
Members21,169
Average Posts Daily24
Most Online1,541
Feb 21st, 2019
Just Plain Quotes
"The music industry is filled with risk takers, but not so filled with people who educate themselves before taking the leap." –Brian Austin Whitney
Today's Birthdays
dpharris (64), Krooner (63), Steve Vaughan (2019), Wayne Longtin (76)
Popular Topics(Views)
Powered by UBB.threads™ PHP Forum Software 7.6.0