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She was all he had
Verse There’s a rusted roof on the old tin shed where I used to sip on Grandpa’s shine. The house burned down about three years ago So there ain’t much left behind. When grandma died he hit the bottle hard and stayed stone drunk for days at a time. I could tell that it pretty much did him in and it wasn’t long before he died. Chorus She was all he had and it broke him He was never the same again. He’d disappear into the old tin shed And drink till the sunlight dimmed. The day that grandma died It pretty much did him in. She was all he had and it broke him He was never the same again. Verse I remember him telling his stories about when he was a boy like me. Every story had a lesson to teach And is part of who I grew to be. He was a friend as much as a teacher and helped keep me from losing my way. I remember that I cried all day long on the day that he went to his grave. Chorus She was all he had and it broke him He was never the same again. He’d disappear into the old tin shed And drink till the sunlight dimmed. The day that grandma died It pretty much did him in. She was all he had and it broke him He was never the same again. Verse In the corner there’s an old coffee can with a broken pocket watch inside. Both of its hands stopped at ten O’clock So I know the moment that he died. It was there with the pistol beside him Lying on the floor of this old shed; where I found him after I heard the bang with a wound to the side of his head. Bridge It taught we what it meant to love someone and I wanted you to understand that loving a woman with all of your heart can be the death a man. Chorus She was all he had and it broke him He was never the same again. He’d disappear into the old tin shed And drink till the sunlight dimmed. The day that grandma died It pretty much did him in. She was all he had and it broke him He was never the same again.
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This is quite a heartbreaker piece. Reminds me a bit of the George Jones classic "He Stopped Loving Her Today".
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Hi, nice work,just as a suggestion I think changing the chorus to end on the title would possibly make it stronger, quote She was all he had and it broke him He was never the same again. He’d disappear into the old tin shed And drink till the sunlight dimmed. The day that grandma died It pretty much did him in. She was all he had and it broke him He was never the same again.
just as a suggestion, something like
He was never the same It pretty much did him in He'd disappear into his old tin shed And drink till sunlight dimmed, The day grandma died ?????????????????? like, his world fell apart, Losing grandma broke him She was all he had.
you could add a lot more colour but I think the last two lines are very repeatable for a song. all the best.john.
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