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This song is produced by Michael Zaneski and he also adds the vocals.I have been trying to write a certain song that i was hoping Michael would help me out on and i found it in this one.Thanks Michael Z.

https://soundclick.com/share.cfm?id=13755629

One More Chance

When i'm sleeping,i start dreaming
When i'm waking,i start wishing
There's no difference,oh oh,between the two

When i'm lonely,i feel like crying
When i'm the only,i feel like dying
There's no denying,mmmm,i'm needing you

All the days and the nights,they both seem the same
The darkness and the light,playing tricks on my brain
No remorse in their actions,how it hurts my blue heart
Baby give us one more chance,to make a brand new start

When i see you,you don't have time to stay
When i speak too,you don't hear a word i say
I guess it's true,sometimes love fades away

[chorus]

No matter how i try
Nothing seems to work
I keep asking myself why
Love has to hurt

[chorus]

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Impressive write, Michael:

This one really works well and the two of you have "burned the house down" with this one. Love those harmonies and Zaneski's great backing work. Enjoyed my listen. Best of luck with it 'cause it's ready to be "pitched." ----Dave

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Michael

What a fine song and recording. Lovely arrangement, strong singing and the vocal harmonies are so sweet.

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Nice chorus, well done M&M! (Seals and Croft vibe with those lovely vocals)
The last line in the third verse could possibly be improved, as it seems to imply there is no chance, yet it leads into the chorus, where the plea is for another chance. confused

Good stuff!
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Lovely song, both the lyric and the music, and a great production.
I think the offset rhymes on wishing/difference and dying/denying work very well.

But this line felt out of place:
No remorse in their actions,how it hurts my blue heart
The rest of the song appears to be him speaking to her - there is no "they" except on that one line. You may have a backstory in which that all makes sense, but if it's not part of the lyric, there's a good chance many folks wont understand it.

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Scratched my head on that line also, until I realized, (I think) "their" is referring to the "darkness and light" from the previous line. Is that correct Michael?



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thanks Dave.Yes Mike Z. has some talent. Mike

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thanks a bunch Michael. Mike

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hey Mike,thanks for checking it out.Well as he is dreaming and wishing,so maybe,just maybe,there's still a chance. Mike

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hey RDM,i appreciate your time and thoughts on this one.As Mike says below,he is referring to the night/day or darkness/light. Mike

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Yes Mike,that is correct.Mike

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Hey guys,


Good job, this is a really nice tune.


Calvin


http://www.soundclick.com/bands/0/calvinstewart

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Mike & Mike,

Very nice! Super sound - harkens back to the "airy" pop bands of the late 70's/early 80's... (Little River Band, Air Supply).

Excellent production. Excellent vocals.

Enjoyed that.

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Thank ya Calvin.Mike

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i appreciate the visit Floyd.I hear a touch of Jakob Dylan mixed with Poco sound,two of my faves. Mike

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THIS SONG is at the top of the HEAP!

Thanks for sharing--Write on!

Mackie

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Hey there Mackie,thanks for the visit ad kind words. Mike

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Lovely write, vocal and production.

Wrap it up and stick a fork in it. Done.

There's a world of things to like here.

For us, it's an over the top good ballad!

J&B


Check out our new album Janice Merritt "Am I Blue Enough?"
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Hey guys,

Beautiful song, well done in all respects. I really like the expression "blue heart!" Great bridge too.

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Great collab. Beautiful write Mike. Keep them coming.

Douglas


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Michael (and Mike),

Nice feel to this one—great lyric and vocal. Great collaboration! Good luck with this one!

Regards to you both,

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Pretty song, Mike and Mike.

Vic


It's never too late? Yes it is, so do it now.

If, given time, a monkey can write the complete works of Shakespeare maybe there's hope for me.

http://store.cdbaby.com/cd/vicarnold2

http://www.soundclick.com/vicarnold

http://soundcloud.com/vic-arnold

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Hey Janice & Bud,we appreciate the visit and kind comments.Mike

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where y'at Eddie,thanks for all the visit.Mike

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Thanks a bunch Douglas! Mike

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Great to hear you're still writing, Mike and you can't find a better way to take it to the next level than this. Well done.

Ricki


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