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Leafs
by Gary E. Andrews - 03/04/24 12:47 PM
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I wrote this song a little while ago for some forum friends on another site. I've just signed up to 'Just Plain Folks' and because I don't have a brand new song to post, and I wanted to find out how others in a different region on the 'net hear my music, I thought I'd post this one. I hope that's OK. If not, please remove the thread. If anyone has a couple of minutes to listen , I'd really appreciate it. --So Beautiful--Please feel free to comment, good or not, on any aspect. (The only thing that I cannot really do too much about is my accent!) Thank you, Noel LyricsSO BEAUTIFUL Through the leaves and branches Look at all that sunshine A new tomorrow and it’s breaking free You know, like the rising sun You are so beautiful to me When I’m on my own Just me and memories I’m usually smiling ‘cause you’re all I see You know, like the rising sun You are so beautiful to me I don’t know what each new day will bring for us What surprise will knock knock knock at the door But as long as you’re beside me skies are blue for us And life is true for us Come sunshine, rain or storm On all this planet So vast and awesome It’s here with you that I choose to be You know, like the rising sun You are so beautiful, so remarkable You’re the sunshine that makes my day You are so beautiful to me ©2018 Noel Adams, words and music, all rights reserved
Last edited by Noel96; 05/26/18 01:17 AM.
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Hello Noel, Nice to meet you & WELCOME to JPF ! I enjoyed your song / performance.......it was....................................................BEAUTIFUL Calvin http://www.soundclick.com/bands/0/calvinstewart
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Hi Noel:
It's "Beautiful"... and welcome to JPF. Simple, strong, well written and performed. What could be better. I hope you'll find a comfort zone here (lots of forums and topics) and jump right in. If you need help, please ask. Most folks here are helpful, friendly and kind.
All the best, ----Dave
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Hi Calvin, Thank you for taking the time. I appreciate it. And thanks for the welcome, too! All the best, Noel
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Hi Noel:
It's "Beautiful"... and welcome to JPF. Simple, strong, well written and performed. What could be better. I hope you'll find a comfort zone here (lots of forums and topics) and jump right in. If you need help, please ask. Most folks here are helpful, friendly and kind.
All the best, ----Dave Thanks Dave! I've been having a look through some of the forums and it certainly is a songwriter's abode here for sure! I'm looking forward to finding out. Thank you for your feedback on my song, too. Regards, Noel
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some nice workloved the recording and the mix was that your doing
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Hi Noel A big welcome to you. Where are you based? Noel sounds Irish or UK maybe? I like your song it's a pleasant sound and well sung. If you can it's best to post the lyric below your song link as it does help to give feedback on both the music and words. Again a nice song Regards John
We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars. Oscar Wilde
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some nice workloved the recording and the mix was that your doing
Hi lyricwriter, Thank you! Yes... everything is done at home on my desktop computer. I don't have an expensive set up but I use the audiophile edition of Band In A Box from ( PG Music) for all my backings. This means that I don't have to worry too much about background noise on anything other than vocals. It also saves me a heap of time when putting backings together and gives me more time for writing songs I appreciate your taking the time to have a listen and to comment. Regards, Noel
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Hi Noel A big welcome to you. Where are you based? Noel sounds Irish or UK maybe? I like your song it's a pleasant sound and well sung. If you can it's best to post the lyric below your song link as it does help to give feedback on both the music and words. Again a nice song Regards John Thanks John! I appreciate the welcome, the listen and the feedback. I'm Australian, by the way, and we have a bit of a British tinge to some of our accents. Maybe I fit into that category. Also, thank you for letting me know about the lyrics. I'll go and add those now. Best regards, Noel
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Hey Noel, Welcome from a fellow Ozzie And welcome from a point of view that you have the guts to put up your work. That's the most important step. To put yourself up for potential ridicule is one of the steps that's need to be taken, and overcome. Any "criticism" given here will only be in the best intent, and for a matter of help or referral if, if you're open to it. OK, to the song....... Overall, well written and well structured. A lot of songs here are presented as demo's and this is one. Aside form production, I think it's structured and the intent of the song is coming off well. There are a few cliche's in the lyrics which need to be addressed. Think of the phrase, but say it in a different or oblique way. Go back, re-work it so it doesn't come across as flippant. More depth and more feeling. Tell me a personal story rather than a generic one. Again, welcome, and I hope that I can hear more of your work. cheers, niteshift
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Hi Noel I think there's a couple of Aussie guys on the forum. The rest are in London lol My son worked in Australia briefly now he's in Dubai Thanks for displaying the lyric Regards John
We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars. Oscar Wilde
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Hey Noel, Welcome from a fellow Ozzie And welcome from a point of view that you have the guts to put up your work. That's the most important step. To put yourself up for potential ridicule is one of the steps that's need to be taken, and overcome. Any "criticism" given here will only be in the best intent, and for a matter of help or referral if, if you're open to it. OK, to the song....... Overall, well written and well structured. A lot of songs here are presented as demo's and this is one. Aside from production, I think it's structured and the intent of the song is coming off well. There are a few cliche's in the lyrics which need to be addressed. Think of the phrase, but say it in a different or oblique way. Go back, re-work it so it doesn't come across as flippant. More depth and more feeling. Tell me a personal story rather than a generic one. Again, welcome, and I hope that I can hear more of your work. cheers, niteshift Hey niteshift, It's great to see other southern hemisherians on the forums! Thanks for the feedback. I appreciate it. I'm not quite sure how my writing is flippant but that doesn't really matter because I do understand your point about cliches and I appreciate knowing that you heard the lyrics that way. I'm glad you found time to have a listen. I always greatly value the thoughts of others. All the best, Noel
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Hi Noel I think there's a couple of Aussie guys on the forum. The rest are in London lol My son worked in Australia briefly now he's in Dubai Thanks for displaying the lyric Regards John Hi John, Thanks for the returning visit! I heard that there are quite a few Aussies in London! Hope all is going well for you boy in Dubai. That would have more deserts than we have in in Aus! All the best, Noel
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This sounds really nice, Noel, a sweet folk style love song. I could also hear it played as a show tune. Maybe what niteshift was getting at was that you're telling us this person is beautiful like the sunrise but not showing us how or why. What is it about her that makes you think of the rising sun? There's nothing in the lyric that goes beyond the surface, nothing to hold onto. You say it's not a new song, so maybe now, if you're comfortable with it, you can go back over it, line by line, and start digging deeper into the heart and soul of what you're trying to convey. Don't just tell us about this person, make us feel it. It's a good start and you've got the bones, now flesh it out.
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This sounds really nice, Noel, a sweet folk style love song. I could also hear it played as a show tune. Maybe what niteshift was getting at was that you're telling us this person is beautiful like the sunrise but not showing us how or why. What is it about her that makes you think of the rising sun? There's nothing in the lyric that goes beyond the surface, nothing to hold onto. You say it's not a new song, so maybe now, if you're comfortable with it, you can go back over it, line by line, and start digging deeper into the heart and soul of what you're trying to convey. Don't just tell us about this person, make us feel it. It's a good start and you've got the bones, now flesh it out.
Ricki Hi Ricki, Thank you for dropping by. I really appreciate that you had time to have a listen. I'm equally appreciative of your thoughts and thank you for taking time to jot them down. I always find it very valuable discovering how others hear my songs. It's one of the best ways that I know of to grow in skills. Thanks again, Noel
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Hello Noel and welcome to JPF. First off, blown away by the mix and the tone of your acoustics. Just beautiful. Musically I was really impressed. Loved everything about the melody and recording. I agree with Ricki though lyrically. I didn't find the lyric differentiated itself from many other love songs. Loved loved loved the music nonetheless.
Look forward to hearing more.
Dave
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Noel,
Good to see you here! Welcome!
Good to hear this again. Your vocal is so very sincere.
Excellent production and mix - love those acoustic guitars!!
fj
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hey floyd, Great to see you! Thanks for the comments (again). It's taking a while but I'm presently working on a bit of an analysis of 'Mistakes'. At the same time I listened to your song a little while back, I came across an article on dissonance from the perspective of poetry and I've been trying to wrap my head around it in relation to lyrics. When read about it, I understand dissonance with words but then people give examples and I can't see the forest for the trees! Ah well... I'm not giving up. It's a sign that I need to clarify this in my mind. As always, your songs spur me on to better things and more thorough understanding Hope all is going well for you! Noel
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Hello Noel and welcome to JPF. First off, blown away by the mix and the tone of your acoustics. Just beautiful. Musically I was really impressed. Loved everything about the melody and recording. I agree with Ricki though lyrically. I didn't find the lyric differentiated itself from many other love songs. Loved loved loved the music nonetheless.
Look forward to hearing more.
Dave Hey Dave, Thanks for the comments. You made my day! I appreciate everything you said about the music. As I said to Ricki, it's always good getting another pair of ears to hear things. It helps add objectivity. Really appreciate it. All the best, Noel
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Noel,
What a pretty tune you have here—it sounds great! Really, the guitar work and accompanying instruments just slay—just pull the listener in. And the vocals and phrasing, just work so well with the sound. Liked this a whole lot.
And, hey, welcome to JPF! Will look forward to hearing more from you.
All the best,
Deej
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Noel,
What a pretty tune you have here—it sounds great! Really, the guitar work and accompanying instruments just slay—just pull the listener in. And the vocals and phrasing, just work so well with the sound. Liked this a whole lot.
And, hey, welcome to JPF! Will look forward to hearing more from you.
All the best,
Deej
Thanks for visiting Soundcloud and having a listen, Deej! Much appreciated. It certainly seems like a good friendly neighborhood here. Regards, Noel
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We liked this the first time we heard it and it just gets better. The write, the arrangement, the performance and the mix are top drawer.
The clarity of the mix and the soundstage it sets up is outstanding on our monitors.
Kudos!
J&B
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We liked this the first time we heard it and it just gets better. The write, the arrangement, the performance and the mix are top drawer.
The clarity of the mix and the soundstage it sets up is outstanding on our monitors.
Kudos!
J&B Hi Janice and Bud, Thanks for listening again. I'm glad that the mix still works. For me, mixing is still one of the most gruelling aspects of getting a song together! Ozone and Nectar are my best friends in this area. Thanks again, Noel
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Nice song Noel! Captured it perfectly with your production. Best, John
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Nice song Noel! Captured it perfectly with your production. Best, John John, Thank you for taking time to listen and to comment. I appreciate it All the best, Noel
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Noel
That's a fine song. Simple chords but you do something really original with you melody. I enjoy you voice - and your recorded guitar sound is top notch.
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Noel
That's a fine song. Simple chords but you do something really original with you melody. I enjoy you voice - and your recorded guitar sound is top notch. Thanks Mike! I really appreciate the positive feedback. All the best, Noel
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