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Devils Orchestra v It's party night in hell folks welcome! There's music and dirty jokes. Satan will be waving the baton that Sid Vicious has kindly spat on. v Adolf Hitler's on first violin little later they'll be more from him Chairman Mao on percussion With Rasputin and some other Russian c Hirohito, Satan's second in command red hot trident in his hand Will give wallflowers hell if they're not up dancing,when he sounds the bells
V Refreshments courtesy of Crippen not just a doctor, he's a dietician Burke and Hare dug up the dead but tonight you can dig them instead V Vlad the Impaler Blackbeard the Sailor Billy the Kid an Alcatraz jailer Old Pol Pot banjo and slide guitar Goreing wearing his wife's best bra C Hirohito, Satan's second in command red hot trident in his hand Will give wallflowers hell if they're not up dancing,when he sounds the bells v Ivan the Terrible, Osama the s**t Nero, fiddle and pumping armpits Saddam on the xylophone Himmler paper wrapped round a comb
b The satanic choir are ready to rock n roll v Genghis Khan, Atilla the Hun two raunchy bishops an unfrocked nun Robespierre and Caligula And a few other demonic regulars c Hirohito, Satan's second in command red hot trident in his hand Will give wallflowers hell if they're not up dancing,when he sounds the bells outro So put another naked body on the fire lets hear it loud for the Devils Orchestra and Choir
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Hey Travis,
What a wicked concept ... I can see the dreadful orchestra now! My suggestion would be to bring "good" into the song, so that somehow good is fighting evil and good wins, somehow, some way! I don't know how to do that, though!
Lisa
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This is just pure fun! Love the rhymes and imagery. Thanks for my daily laugh!
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Hi Lisa welcome back. We could do with some help around here. Not thought of a good soul yet. They're few and far between But it could be a contrast. Perhaps someone could be sent by mistake .cheers Travis
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Hi Fallendiva Good to know it had your chuckle muscles working Cheers Travis
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Travis,
Great idea for a song! I've got two suggestions for you to consider: First, the opening two lines are fairly generic. I'm wondering if you can get more to the point in those lines--and is it really "party night," which has less hellish connotations? Guess I'm suggesting that those opening lines are key.
My second thought--though it may be worthless depending on the music that goes with--is that the chorus focuses on Satan's second in command. Why not Satan himself? Seems like a focus on the big bad might fit more with the title. Just a thought--lose or use, as they say.
Regardless, very creative write. You've got my imagination going!
All the best,
Deej
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LOL.....I can just picture this Band...Where is The Angel All Star Orchestra....? lol
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Good points Deej. I need a couple f rewrites on this taking in yours and Lisa idea Cheers Travis
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Thanks for the read through Barry Cheers Travis
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