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Hi all.
I am assuming everyone knows the old rhyme.
Would love to hear your thoughts.
Vic

https://soundcloud.com/vic-arnold/green-bottles
https://soundclick.com/share.cfm?id=13719014

Green Bottles © 2018 Vic Arnold
v1
It took some time to rearrange
all the letters on the page of your downfall
You stood so many tests
and too numerous were quests you can't recall
The truth was left behind
in you crazy mixed up mind of all their lies
Your social life was steered
by the small minds of peers you raised too high
ch.
Go listen to your false apostles
Throw your stones 'til a real one topples
and there are no more bottles ... on the wall.
There are no more green bottles on the wall
v2
If I gave you my last breath
would you swear there's still one left that you want too?
If you're told this is the end
would you find a way to bend the truth for you?
There are souls who contemplate
before they find that it's too late to turn around
wasting time they now recall
stacking bottles on the wall to knock them down
ch.
Go listen to your false apostles
Throw your stones 'til a real one topples
and there are no more bottles ... on the wall.
There are no more green bottles on the wall

Enjoyed my listen, Vic. Really great vibe to this. Send more soon. ----Dave

Good one, Vic. Really good lyrics and a great vibe to the whole thing.

Nice use of the BIAB oohs and aahs. I have not got the hang of them yet.

The green bottles reference comes thru loud and clear, no problem.
I think the chorus is the strongest part of the song. It's a powerful and direct message, and the melody has cut through and emotion.

I found the lyrical arrangement of the first verse a little confusing, like it had to be decoded and re-arranged before it made sense. That's a bit strong, but that kind of feeling. For me that's making it harder than necessary for the listener. But I concede that's likely a personal viewpoint. There have been plenty of good songs that need a little interpretation.

Good feeling overall and and a high quality sound!

Vic

Once had a girl in Germany, that would pour Four Roses in my beer--I'd float off to LA La Land--then I'd reflect, and then shoot the bottles I emptied with my Model 10 Smith and Wesson, knowing she had a cheater's lie to tell!--I thought many times 'bout blowiing her away.

Keep up your writing and playing from WALES!

Mackie

Vic,

I enjoyed my listen. I am not familiar with the old rhyme (though I looked it up after), but not sure it matters that one know it for this song. It’s an engaging lyric and sound from start to finish. Good stuff!

Best regards,

Deej

Vic,

Enjoyed that. An interesting write.

"Go listen to your false apostles
Throw your stones 'til a real one topples "

Nice.

fj

Thanks Dave.
More on their way as long as I'm able and I have the muse's blessing.

Vic

Hi Gavin.
Thank you. Glad you liked it.

Nothing much in biab can be used as it is. Cut, paste, stretch, fade and trim.

Vic

Hello Vic,


Very nicely done, COOL performance !

I especially liked this.....

If you're told this is the end
would you find a way to bend the truth for you ?


Calvin


http://www.soundclick.com/bands/0/calvinstewart

Hey Vic,

I'm also not familiar with the expression or the old rhyme--please enlighten. However, I'm still trying to figure out Dylan's "My Back Pages" after 50 years, so I'm patient about these things.................

I really do think these are fab lyrics, good music too. I feel it's sometimes cool not to have a song's meaning be crystal clear, on the first listen or two--(except for nursery rhymes). A super good write here IMO, I really love how the guitar cuts through the mix like a knife--disdaining effect!

steady-eddie

Is it kind of like "100 bottles of beer on the wall"? You have such an enjoyable sound, Vic. Nice to wake up to in the morning.

Ricki

Powerful write Vic. Really enjoyable. No nits from me. Great lyric, wonderful melody and fantastic performance. Oh yeah, the recording was real good too. Love it. Ha ha Ricki ... I can remember many bus rides as a kid with the entire bus singing 100 bottles of beer on the wall. When I first listened to the lyric I thought the same thing, but quickly realized that that isn't what this song is about.

Dave

Thanks for lending an ear and the comment, RainyDayMan.
I'm glad the chorus is strong.
The slight ambiguity is intentional. If it was a pop song I would make the meaning clearer.
With this type of song I like to let the listener figure it out.
Basically, the first verse is about the time wasted following flawed ideology and how often the beliefs were dashed.
It'll never be a hit. :-)

Vic

Hi there Mackie.
I played some of the bases in Germany. I remember drinking Shlitz and VO but not in the same glass.
Thanks for listening.

Vic

Thank you Deej.
Not important at all. I just wondered if any would wonder where the idea came from.
Glad you like it.

Vic

No problem. You get a lot more flexibility when you're not worried about commercial criteria. Glad it's coming out how you want it to!

Hi Floyd.
Thank you for the like.
Appreciated.

Vic

Thank you Calvin.
It's great when they just pop into your head.

Vic

Cool intro Vic and excellent guitar work through out.
To my ears it sounds as if you had quite a fun time laying down the vocals.
A "Fun Time" doesn't always mean easy time but you can be proud of the out come here.

Oh Yeah... liked the writing too:
"Your social life was steered
by the small minds of peers you raised too high"

"Go listen to your false apostles
Throw your stones 'til a real one topples "

Cool lines and cool rhyme.

Regarding the ambiguity we both like songs that leave a few dots for the listener to connect tempered with his/her experiences, etc.

Nice write, vocal and production.

Enjoyed it!

J&B

Thanks Ed.
Glad you approve.
I do get tired of simple lyrics that leave nothing to the imagination.
Like an adult reading a child's story book, very pleasant but bland.

Vic

Hi Ricki.
Nice to know I woke you up. :-)
It's a kid's rhyme and yes, similar to "100 bottles of beer" but not so enjoyable.
Thanks for that comment.
Vic

Hi Dave.
Glad you got it.
Your comment is appreciated.
Thank you.

Vic

I worry about commercial criteria all the time but I can only do what I do.


Vic

Thank you Nelson.
The harmonies were quite straightforward in this. A few syncing problems but otherwise stress free.

Vic

Thank you J&B.
Your comments are very welcome.

Vic

A small bonus of local radio play today.

Vic

Very cool folk rock - with a real folk rock lyric too. Nice! And congrats on the airplay!

Scott

Thanks Scott.
Those genres really confuse me so I hoped I got that right.

Vic

God i've sung about green bottles on many school outings and beer bottles on more adult ones,
Good theme liked the chorus especially Vic
John

Thanks John.
Memories are made of this. Well maybe some.

Vic

Nice Vic, I really like the chorus. That guitar actually sounds pretty cool for biab, sounds like Pete Townshend slashing his power chords.

I enjoyed.

Hi Vic, I have always liked your vocals, singer/songwriter style..
this is a bit more than you and a guitar but thats ok too.
I like the music, but don`t ever lose that "me and my guitar style it has a lot going for it...just my thought..Lane

Thanks for listening in, Fdemetrio.
Glad you enjoyed Pete's propeller arm stuff. :-)

Vic

Thank you Lane.
I will try to do as you say.

Vic

Loved the chorus and great rhymes, has really good phrasing and like how you hold out the end of the lines, how artistic of you!! Always special to hear your voice.

Tammy

Hi Tammy.
I love that you loved and liked it. :-)*
Thank you very much.

Vic

Nice smooth feel to it and pleasing to my ear....I keep trying to see in my mind the false apostles idea...thinking does he think he is his own
Messiah or what? Probably not...but interesting words.

doug

Thanks for having a listen, Doug.
My definition of a false apostle in this case would be someone spreading lies.
I'm sure we all know them. Some politicians, some in media, some in advertising and some religious leaders to name a few.

Vic