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RED ROSE

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Bus station sheltered us from showers
when we met, that summers day
She'd long blonde hair, a red flower
Me? One way ticket to get away

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Dylan on home made cassettes 
shared rented house in Kings Cross
the smell of those  cigarettes
mixed with sweet smelling joss
v
Befriended poets, dreamers by the score
buskers with handmade songs
sang for pennies until throats were sore
paid for cheap wine all summer long

C
 Days I remember
   Days all merging into one.
  Summer drifted into Autumn
   Red Rose those days were fun
v
London in the blistering city heat
we loon danced in Russell Square
drunken games of hide and seek
magnolia blossoms on the air

Music?

C

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It was  a misty day in November
things started to go wrong
Some had enough i remember
 me and Red Rose , couldnt get along
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Walked her to the bus stop
we kissed and we  cried
 Hands lingered for a while
  then a final  goodbye

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  Days I remember
   Days all merging into one.
  Autumn drifted into Winter
  Then Red Rose there was non( or then we'd gone)


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DAYS
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Bus station sheltered us from showers
when we met, that summers day
She'd long blonde hair, a red flower
Me? One way ticket to get away

V
Dylan on home made cassettes 
shared rented house in Kings Cross
the smell of those  cigarettes
mixed with sweet smelling joss
v
Befriended poets, dreamers by the score
buskers with handmade songs
sang for pennies until throats were sore
paid for cheap wine all summer long

C
 Days I remember
   Days
  all merging into one.
  Autumn became  winter
   Then the day came she was gone
v
London in the blistering city heat
we loon danced in Russell Square
drunken games of hide and seek
magnolia blossoms on the air

Music?

C

v
Our friend Big Mike drank far too much
so many demons in his head
He went to sleep, and didn't wake up
We laid Hyde Park flowers on his bed
B
Now the streets have  all gone
built a  WESCOE there
Where i bought a blood red rose
  then left it on a garden chair

C
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SUMMER OF 76

She'd long blonde hair,with a flower
me?One way ticket, to get away
Euston station sheltering from showers
where we met, that summers day
v
America on home made cassettes
shared rented house in Kings Cross
the smell of pass around cigarettes
mixed with sweet smelling joss
v
Befriended poets, dreamers by the score
buskers with handmade songs
sang for pennies until throats were sore
paid for cheap wine all summer long

c
Remembering the summer of 76
over and over again
when our candles burnt both ends
putting one aside for absent friends

v
Someone said, it's the path to suicide
playing Russian Roulette
That journey was a magical bus ride
together with people I'll never forget

v
London in the blistering city heat
we loon danced in Russell Square
drunken games of hide and seek
magnolia blossoms on the air

C
v
Our friend Big Ritchie drank far too much
so many demons in his head
He went to sleep, and didn't wake up
We put Hyde Park flowers on his bed
b
Summer ended abruptly as it appeared
I sat there alone
Bitter winds signalled the autumn in
love had died now
it was time to go home.

c
Remembering the summer of 76
over and over again
when our candles burnt both ends
putting one aside for absent friends

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Nostalgia with a good number of images...nice

A Bus station sheltered us from showers
where we met, that summers day
She'd long blonde hair, 2 red flowers
me?One way ticket, to get away

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Thanks Neil i've used so.e of your ideas for verse one


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The third change of title and rewrite
I also have a working melody for the chorus
Travis

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I hear this as a near-rest, heart beat song, so will play long. Also it could use a solid hook and get there sooner than after 3 verses...
LOL I have been reviewing my notes.

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I am trying to figure out whether the two titles represent two separate songs or are two different ideas for the same song. Either way it is a typical song of a summer romance that didn't last once the seasons changed. The season of life in general has changed quite radically since those days as well.

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Travis,

Some really nice lines and imagery here. It's always fun watching your songs transform; really like seeing how they evolve from draft to draft. Will look forward as always to hearing it when it's ready.

All the best,

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Cheers Brian
Not separate songs but title changes.
Hi Deej
Thanks for your confidence lol
I do have a melody and a need to rewrite
Thanks
Travis


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Keeping the rhymes in place and every line making sense is what's going on in this lyric.

I like how this verse has been put together Below:

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Dylan on home made cassettes -------Should this not be "Dylan at home made cassettes"
shared rented house in Kings Cross
the smell of those cigarettes
mixed with sweet smelling joss


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HiIrwin. No the line is how i intended. Cheers thanks for stopping by
Travis


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