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#1139598 - 04/13/18 12:09 AM Tell Me Everything (Mix 2 033018)  
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I wrote a scratch-track of this tune (piano/vocal) about a year ago. This is an in-progress studio track with much more production. Looking to get the track into music libraries for film/TV placement. Please give a listen and let me know what you think. Thanks in advance.

BTW: I wrote this song from a title, so no cryptic or hidden personal relationship messages intended or included! Lyrics are below.
Emmanuel Lawrence
Copyright 2017

Verse 1
I'm in no mood for lies
Let the truth tumble from your lips
Help me understand what happened
And how we've come to this

Chorus
Tell me everything
Tell me how we went wrong
Go ahead, tell me about your fling
And how he came along
There's not a lot you could say
That might keep me from leaving
But won't you tell me, tell me, tell me?
Tell me everything (2x)

Verse 2
I need to know, was it his eyes?
Was it his touch?
Was it his voice, his laughter?
Why did you need him so much?

Repeat Chorus

Bridge
The truth matters
And love is a matter of trust
But now our trust is broken
And there's no more need for us

Verse 3
Well, the damage is done
Now, heartbreak is my name
The rising suns of all my tomorrows
Will never be the same

Repeat Chorus & Outro

https://www.reverbnation.com/emmanuellawrence/song/29419946-tell-me-everything-mix-2-033018

Last edited by ejlawrence; 04/13/18 07:38 PM.
#1139607 - 04/13/18 05:19 AM Re: Tell Me Everything (Mix 2 033018) [Re: ejlawrence]  
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Hi Emmanual
Lovely song sad poignant great vical too.
All the best with it
Travis


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#1139618 - 04/13/18 10:20 AM Re: Tell Me Everything (Mix 2 033018) [Re: ejlawrence]  
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Hi EJ:

I enjoyed this song very much. You list it as a "work in progress" but I think you've done everything it needs except for getting it pitched and recorded by a big name artist. (Nothing wrong with using Music Libraries... depending on their status and reputation.) This one is a real "heart-breaker" and I think it will do well in your final cut or demo... if you choose to go that way. Thanks so much for sharing it with us and I saw several more songs on your "Reverb Page" and will do my best to get back and listen ASAP. I'm grinding away at one in my little studio right now... so, I hope you understand.

I forgot to mention what a really good vocal you have.

All the best, ----Dave

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#1139630 - 04/13/18 02:44 PM Re: Tell Me Everything (Mix 2 033018) [Re: ejlawrence]  
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You’ve done a good job tackling a tough topic. The one question that was not answered that might add to your song is: why do you need to know?
Good Luck, Bob

#1139634 - 04/13/18 04:07 PM Re: Tell Me Everything (Mix 2 033018) [Re: ejlawrence]  
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A nice song, ej. A really nice melody. A good listen.

Your vocal is nice. It seems a little "dry" - which makes it "sit on top" a little. I think some additional reverb would set it in the mix a bit.

Enjoyed this.

fj

#1139638 - 04/13/18 04:35 PM Re: Tell Me Everything (Mix 2 033018) [Re: ejlawrence]  
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#1139661 - 04/13/18 11:08 PM Re: Tell Me Everything (Mix 2 033018) [Re: ejlawrence]  
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Emmanuel,

I think I recall hearing your “scratch” version of this some time back. Boy, you’ve done a wonderful job bringing this to the next level. Love the melody here, and your vocal accentuates it’s every move. Nice use of percussion throughout for emphasis. Liked this one from start to finish.

Well done!

Regards,

Deej

#1139742 - 04/14/18 09:46 PM Re: Tell Me Everything (Mix 2 033018) [Re: ejlawrence]  
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Travis, Dave, Bob, Floyd, Dee and Calvin-
Thanks for listening and feedback. All much appreciated.

Dave, re: lyric "I need to know": Thoughtful point about the lyrics. I think in a situation like this, a quest for closure and need for understanding still remains. Even among the strongest people, unanswered questions can be silently haunting.

#1139757 - 04/15/18 10:07 AM Re: Tell Me Everything (Mix 2 033018) [Re: ejlawrence]  
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Nice...it definitely has a cinematic feel.

Enjoyed the listen!

Best to you with the libraries.

J&B

PS I agree with fj that some more reverb on the vocal would help it sit fuller in the mix. FWIW.

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#1139769 - 04/15/18 10:55 AM Re: Tell Me Everything (Mix 2 033018) [Re: ejlawrence]  
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nice work EJ really nice vocal in this, and the production. sounds finished to me. but thats just me..really a nice listen ej Lane

Last edited by lane1777; 04/15/18 10:55 AM.

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#1139787 - 04/15/18 08:31 PM Re: Tell Me Everything (Mix 2 033018) [Re: ejlawrence]  
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Emmanual this is simply beautiful.
Love the story and the pain in the lyric and also your expressive vocals
That sax sprinkled throughout is a nice touch.
The arrangement is perfect.

Well Done


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#1139905 - 04/19/18 08:27 PM Re: Tell Me Everything (Mix 2 033018) [Re: ejlawrence]  
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Thanks for listening and feedback. All much appreciated!

#1139948 - 04/20/18 07:51 PM Re: Tell Me Everything (Mix 2 033018) [Re: ejlawrence]  
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Yep...maybe a little reverb on the vocal...otherwise, it sounds great to me. Well done, Emmanuel.

Ricki

#1139955 - 04/20/18 08:42 PM Re: Tell Me Everything (Mix 2 033018) [Re: ejlawrence]  
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Really great melody. Love the dynamics in it as well. Some really nice builds. Agree with others that vocals need to be a bit wetter. Really nice job. Good luck with it.

Dave

#1139971 - 04/20/18 11:50 PM Re: Tell Me Everything (Mix 2 033018) [Re: ejlawrence]  
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Ricki and Dave, thanks for listening. More reverb is a common recommendation I'm hearing. Appreciate the feedback.

#1139993 - 04/21/18 11:16 AM Re: Tell Me Everything (Mix 2 033018) [Re: ejlawrence]  
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Hi Emmanuel,

Nice song you have here. It as a very smooth melody makes me wants to listen to the end. That being said I must let you know that I am not a fan of your voice in the way you have presented it in the song. I think you could have done better ( Please don't use what I've said about your voice back on me in the future because I myself doesn't have a good singing voice, yours are better than mine)

The lyric is conversational and that is a good thing. I read the lyrics first before I listen to the audio. I am saying this because I had already stated in my mind it was a well-written lyric so, it came as no surprise when I heard the song I was like...I know this melody at to be good.

The Song is very clever and sounds commercials too.

I wish you all the best.

Irwin

#1139997 - 04/21/18 01:38 PM Re: Tell Me Everything (Mix 2 033018) [Re: ejlawrence]  
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Irwin, thanks for listening and the feedback.


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